The insistent drone of a clock
chanting its mystical rhythm,
with anticipation hot beneath my breast
abandoned by thought as instincts surged
instant relief accompanied the sole chime,
signaling Midnights arrival1
Like a seed bursting to life
eagerness and blood lust consumed me,
eating away at my will, my humanity,
a raging inferno of molten magic
ensnaring me within its waiting grasp,
surrendering to such, the change2
My world, void of life and color,
persistent voices howling upon the wind
as hands of bark clawed at my hind quarters
unhampered I was, of the surrounding chaos,
hypnotized by Mother Moon’s innocent compulsion
rendering my throat to her, I cried
singing with the voices of my kin,
the song of the wolves3
Author notes
This is a poem I wrote a while ago, when my wolves curiosity started to border obsession. XD I have this poem up on the sister site; allpoetry, but I thought I would add it here on storywrite to share with all of you. I hope you like it. 
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- Wolf Poetry by JustCallMeAngel.
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Comments
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I am impressed, you described so much in such a small amount of words. You clearly have a lot of talent in this field and it is clear to me that you were quite passionate about wolves when you wrote this. Keep up the good work.
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Thank you for such a gracious comment. I'm thrilled that you enjoyed my poem. Good luck with your contest!
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hehe forgot clappys...
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I am amazed at how you can fit so much...awesomeness into 100 words
haha excellent!!!
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thank you so much for the very kind comment. I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem.
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nice...
I like the description and figurative language. Transforming into a werewolf under the moon is something cliche, but ina poem, the way you described it, makes it eerie and majestical.
Great job, good luck!
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Thank you black-bird for the read and comment. I am glad that you enjoyed my poem. It took some time to create; in order to get it just right.
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Awesome job at publishing it! It's a really great poem. It has beautiful description and I just fell in love with it!
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem; I had fun writing it.
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Loved it!
I love the line"mother moon's innocent compulsion". Your imagery is beautiful and compelling. I will be watching for more stories from you.
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Thank you for reading my poem and commenting! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed it.
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I really like this poem, however it seems like the flow of certain lines seem to clash with the rest of the poem. Such as "surrendering to such, the change". I know you most likely intentionally set apart the words "the change" by the comma for emphasis, but it felt as if there should have been another line in the stanza to continue the flow. Just my opinion, aha...otherwise this is a really great poem, the imagery played out in my head as I read it. Good work. [:
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Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. I really appreciate it. Also, thank you for giving your opinion. I suppose the lines do seem like they clash a bit but I like it as it is so I'm not going to change it; unless I find some other form to put the poem in of course. XD
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Whatever someone else has said or will say after me... I liked this poem. And most great poems don't rhyme, otherwise they look very quickly a bit childish. But that's my opinion... at least in Dutch they do.
beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 3.
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Thank you for the read and comment. I agree with you about the rhyme. I'm glad you liked my poem too.
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interesting. I like the visuals, but for a poem it seems... I don't know I guess wordy or complex. Hmmm... I guess maybe because of the words I didn't feel much rhyme and meter to it. It'd make a nice story though.
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Some of the greatest poems written do not rhyme, and since it is from them that I get my inspiration a lot of my own do not rhyme as well. lol Though I do love rhyme and pattern like everyone else, but after a certain number of those they all start to sound the same; at least to me. XD Thank you for reading my poem none-the-less and commenting. I am grateful that you have.
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don't I know it, a lot of my poems don't rhyme. I didn't mean it was a bad poem; for that or any other reason.
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Lol No offense was taken, I was just pointing that out. lol Again, thank you for the comment.
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not my taste but i think it was an emotional story really good but maybey a little more would help
i think you would be good at writing for children, maybe try the course "writing for children all ages" your stories tell you are a very experienced writer an would be good at hosting a group.beginning: 2, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 3, characters: 1.
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You are a great poetry writer. And yes...I did like it Keep writing!
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I really liked it!!! When I was reading it, my mouth dropped open in amazement! Lol, sounds corny, I know, BUT IT;S TRUE!
I liked the 2nd stanza the best. Don't get me wrong! I thought it all was amazing! But the 2nd stanza stood out to me the most.
Keep up the awesome work!
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Lol Thank you for reading and commenting. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Your comment made me laugh by the way. XD Oh, and good luck with your contest.
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wow... this is really beautiful. and its the first poem entry i have so far in this contest. it was very very good.
Like a seed bursting to life
eagerness and blood lust consumed me,
eating away at my will, my humanity,
a raging inferno of molten magic
ensnaring me within its waiting grasp,
surrendering to such, the change2
i really like this verse the most. i think the poem was mostly shaped around this words, and it just really made the poem flow... great job!
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Awe shucks. lol Thank you for commenting. It always pleases me when the reader likes something that I have written. Oh, and good luck with the rest of your contest.
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This piece is completely amazing. The vocabulary you used here was both professional and beautiful, and how you wrote from a wolf's perspective in the last stanza was impressive. I don't think I could ever do something like that.
And I must add, I adore the way you used "Mother Moon". I'm Wiccan, and the moon in a way to me is "Mother Moon."
Keep up the wonderful work!
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Wow, thank you for the flattering comment. lol I'm glad that you enjoyed reading my 'bit of babble'. XD I actually thought of saying "Mother Moon" instead of just the moon, because when wolves bay at the moon its almost as if they are paying homage to her. *shrugs* Anyway thanks again for the wonderful comment, and it pleases me that you liked it.
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You're an awesome poet, as well as a writer, and I am glad to have read it.
I have a small obsession with wolves as well. Or rather, I used to. I believe I wrote a poem once which included a wolf who was hit by a snowmobile. Pleasant, eh?
Anyways, great job.
xoxox.
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Awe, thank you for reading and commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed it. A poem about a wolf and snowmobiles? I bet that was either a really fun read or gory. XD Anyways, thank you!
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Wow, this was incredible. I like the way you set it out, almost a poem. That was excellent, really descriptive. Mother Moon's compulsion, amazing.
Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you. I am always happy to hear that someone likes my work.
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wow this is a very visual write. I like how creative you were by choosing to write about were wolves. Not many people really write about them. At least not that I have read. Good write. Thanks for sharing this.
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Why thank you trekkergirl for taking the time to read my poem. On story-write there are very few who do write about werewolves; that I have seen, but on all poetry there are alot of werewolve poems floating around. XD
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Thank you for reading and commenting! It pleases me that you liked it.
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