The Center of the Universe

Here I am. I stand in the center of the universe. I stand where everyone and everything can see me, where I can see everyone and everything. I can see the planets, the sun, the stars. Their bright shining colors twinkle in my glossy eyes. The world, and all its happenings, whirls around me. I know where I am, I know where I should be going, yet I feel lost. Lost in this feeling. This... indescribable feeling.1

Everything seems so right, but at the same time so wrong. One moment all is perfect, the next I feel like all the mass in creation is piled upon my back. One word misplaced, one action misread and my mind is sent reeling on an endless journey of confusion and self-deception. But then with one moment, one simple moment of perfection, the world can fall back onto its axis and all is right again.2

The cause of this chaos? It's none other than you. You're the culprit and I'm the victim of your charms. I tried so hard not to fall into such a place, not to be stuck so badly in a rut that has no easy way out. If there even is a way out. And to tell you the truth, I hope there isn't a way out. I hope for life that I can stay in this rift of creation known as your presence.3

However, we both know that isn't so. That our time together is limited. Day by day, minute by minute, our time dwindles. I don't know how to tell you this, but in the understated period that we have spent together, I have felt something that I have never felt before. You make me feel beautiful, interesting, smart, and most of all... wanted. I don't know what you've done to me and I don't know what I'm going to do once you stop.4

So now, I shall revel in the remaining time that we share. I'll shove the thoughts of parting out of my mind until the time for them is ripe. I'll stop counting days and regretting each minute I have missed and think only of the minutes I have gained. For right now, I'm where I'm supposed to be. In the center of the universe. With you.5

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For you... Though you'll never know I wrote it. <3

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  • trekkergirl
    February 23

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    nicely written I do agree with you that your love should be the center of the universe with you. Good write. I liked it. Flowed well. Kept my interest. Nothing that stood out and said change this to me. Good solid write that I liked. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering my contest.


  • BlamedRobin
    January 30

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    Like Lone Writer said you did put a lot of effort into this. And I like the way you explained things with so much detail and experience. Though I would have liked it better if it was a story more than a monolouge it was still really good. -Smiles- Good job and good luck in my contest!


  • LoneWriter
    January 29

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    This shows you put a lot of effort into this piece! I love how you compare love with different examples. Especially the solar system, cuz I love it

    Good Luck in my contest. And no matter how many years from now, there still won't be a guidline or even map to love.

    ~Lone


  • Vampiric souls
    January 6

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    this is very emotional and deep and i think that you did a great job with it.... it is so sweet and at the same time unbelievably sad... Great job!! Thank you so much for entering it in my contest!!!!

  • trekkergirl
    December 1, 2008
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    Thanks for sharing this. This is a very interesting write you have here. It almost reads as a poem. I like it. Thanks for entering this into my contest.


  • NinjaMegami
    November 17, 2008

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    Oh wow, this is very emotional and deep.... it goes deep into the concept of love and losing that love. I absolutely adore this! It really captured my interest and helt it, very neat. Good luck!

  • CedricDempNQ2
    November 15, 2008
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    Complex and fascinating and shows a clarity of expression and thought process.


  • Atticus Unanimous
    November 14, 2008

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    Well I must say that this certainly was different! I really enjoyed it. I loved how you talked about being completely content with feeling little and so upset at having to feel the mind-blowing and tormenting questions of love.

    One thing though: "our time is dwindles" but other than that everything was almost perfect. This was wonderful.


    • Robin Omallia
      November 17, 2008
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      Thanks for the comment!
      I changed the error I had. I didn't notice it when editing.
      Thanks again! I'm glad you liked it!

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