Tied Up Love

It was dark, She had no idea how long she had been in the big wooden crate, at least that's where she thought she was. Her hands were tied behind her back, the feeling was long ago lost. All she could do was wait now for her demise. 1

But while we are waiting, Let me tell you the beginning of the story.2

Tara was a typical 15 year old girl that went to Morrison High School in Virginia Beach. She was the girl that nobody ever noticed, She knew she really didn't matter...except to one person. Jordan. He was a guy she had been talking to on-line for about 4 months now. The pictures he had sent her told her he was to die for, out and out handsome. They were in love, the poems, the flowers, everything he had sent her told her that. It made her so happy to know, and today was the day she would finally meet him in person. At the little Cafe on the corner 2 blocks from her house. She was a little nervous about meeting him, so she had suggested a fairly public place. They were going to meet after school.3

She walked straight from school to the cafe, Hoping that he wouldn't be there yet, She needed some coffee to calm her nerves. She was so nervous. How could meeting the love of your life make you nervous? She had a odd feeling in the pit of her stomach. Not like the butterflies she used to get when she was going on stage with one of the schools plays. This was different. 4

Too late to turn around and run back home, She saw him park his new Chevy Pickup, It was Silver, Her favorite color. God he was gorgeous. Simply beautiful. Dark brown hair, Bright bluish Silver eyes, the build of one of those underware magazine models. 5

"Hey Beautiful"6

She looked up at him, completely in shock- his pictures didn't do him justice. He was a prince compared to her homely looks.7

"Hey" She said.8

He sits down at the table with her, and they talked what seemed like forever. Talking about so many things, her family, what they were like, How she was treated. When she tried to talk to him about his family, He seemed to shut down. He didn't want to talk about it, too many bad memories. 9

"So, Do you want to go catch a movie with me tonight?" He asked10

She looked at him, smiling. "I would love to go to the movies with you!"11

" Pick you up at 7 in front of your house then? Do you want me to meet your parents, or anything like that?" He asks her politely, Just like a gentleman.12

"Sure, my dad will probably ask you a million questions, and give you the riot act. But just don't get too scared away though!"13

He grinned, "Baby, when it comes to you, I will go through hell and high water just to be with you, Nothing will ever scare me away from you!"14

God! Was she really hearing these words? These words meant just for her? She smiled and wrote down her address on a piece of paper. 15

"See you at 7" She called out running home to get ready for tonight.16

Right at 7pm, the doorbell rang. Tara was so excited, She ran to the door, but her father got their first. Just as she had predicted, he had read Jordan the riot act, Threatening with his gun that if harm came to his daughter, There would surly be hell to pay. Jordan played it off great! Her father beamed with pride as they walked down the porch steps to his Chevy truck. 17

Once in the truck, They made their way slowly to the movie theater, But before they got there, he stopped the car.18

"Whats wrong?" She asked19

"Nothing, Hey you mind if I show you something? Its my favorite place in the whole world, and I want you to see it, You are going to be the first to see this, my love." as he's saying this, He tries to hide the excitement he is feeling. He knew she was a virgin. 20

"oh, um, ok." She says, That feeling in the pit of her stomach again. She ignored it and put on her happy smile again, as they turned onto a old dirt road. They pulled up to an old broken down farmhouse. But she could see a glint of water behind it in the moonlight.21

He cuts the engine off, and steps out of the truck, Opens her door, and once again, She cannot believe she is with this guy! How lucky she is!22

They walk behind the farmhouse, and the lake came into view, oh how beautiful and pristine! That was the last thing she remembered.23

He had been walking behind her, and took out a little bottle of clearish liquid. Chloroform. It only took less than a second of her inhaling from the towel he carried before she was knocked unconscious. He carried her back to the truck, and layed her in the back on a rough blanket. Tied her hands behind her, and tied her feet to one of the trucks holdings. Knowing she wouldn't wake up before they arrived.24

"Stupid Stupid Stupid!" She says out loud. Her voice sounding strangely quiet in the box. Her arms and legs were still tied, but she tried kicking the walls anyway. They wouldn't budge. All it did was make her hands hurt worse. Then she heard the footsteps coming. 25

"Tara.... Are you wake yet baby?" He sounded different, more harsh.26

"Why are you doing this Jordan? What did I ever do to you. I want to go home now. Enough with your sick twisted games. Let me go home!"27

"But Tara, I love you. I want you to stay with me, Forever" and she heard the click of a lock being opened, and bright light came pouring into the darkness. It took a minute for her eyes to adjust. She looked around the wooden crate she was in. She saw fingernails, and blood, bits of hair... She knew at that moment, She was not the only one.28

"come on out baby, and see your new home" He laughed.29

"I cant walk. My legs are still tied." She was trying to be strong, be brave, be anything except show him that she was scared.30

"ok then" He walked inside and grabbed her arms and pulled them straight up. She cried out in pain, and he only laughed harder. Once she was standing, He kicked her forward. Falling to the ground, face first in the dirty floor, she saw more blood, old blood. Everything around her had a metallic smell to it. He kicked her again, watching her roll on the floor. Finally he grabbed his knife to cut the ropes off. Instead of cutting the rope, he began to cut off her jeans. 31

"What the hell are you doing, Stop that! Why are you doing this to me?! What is wrong with you?"32

He stops to look at her. "Wrong with me? What the hell is wrong with me? Girls like you, always thinking that their life sucks, always believing that Nothing will get better for you, Well, I am tired of it. You think you are not worth anything, Then I will SHOW you what you are worth... To me."33

He grabs her hair violently and tells her as sweet as he could be, His voice thick as honey. 34

"Now sweetheart, you listen to me. No more screaming, no fighting, no running, and no backtalk. If you dont listen, Well, you will find out, I dont want to hurt you baby, But I will."35

Tara was terrified. What on earth was he going to do. She tried to sing nursery rhymes in her head, like when she was a kid. Nothing worked. He finished cutting off her jeans, then went to work cutting off her shirt. When he finished, He picked her up gently, and took her to a bed in the corner, first tying up her feet to the bed, before taking the old ties off. Then He cuts the ties off her hands. She doesn't bother to fight. She lets him tie her hands to the bed. She silently wondered how many other girls that he has done this to.36

He slowly takes his time, appreciating her body. Letting his hands run across her collarbone, down her chest, between her legs. Enjoying the fact that she is scared, and trembling under his touch. He rips off her panties. Laughing at her scream at the pain it caused. Already he could see the Bruises forming around her hips. He enjoyed causing pain, making her feel real pain, something she had never felt before. The pain and fear made it all worthwhile to him.37

He could feel the bulge in his pants. Aching for her. Wanting her more than any of the others. He forces himself to take time with her. Rubbing her down, making her wet with her juices. He slowly begins to kiss her neck, then her collarbone, slowly down to her still covered breasts. Why wasn't she reacting to this? The others screamed and fought until he had to knock them out again. This was a first, more enjoyable, because he knew she was scared, but she was determined not to show it. She wasn't going to cry out, That was good...Very good.38

He begins to undress, slowly, making sure she was watching him. As his manhood sprang to life, begging to be in someplace soft and warm. He knelt in front of her put the head of his manhood at her entrances Just as he was about to push...39

"please don't" She whispered. She was afraid she didn't speak loud enough, because he didn't move. 40

She spoke louder, "Please don't, If you ever felt anything for me, anything at all. You wont do this. You will let me make my own decision"41

He slowly looked up at her, tears in his eyes.42

"Why are you so nice to me, after all this?"43

She looked at him, no longer fear in her eyes.44

"because, You really don't want to do this. How many others have you done this to? How many girls have you wanted acceptance from? How many rejected you, and forced you to do this. Untie me, let me make my own decision."45

He looked at her, amazed. She was stronger than he thought. 46

"Your going to run when I let you go." he says softly.47

"no, I wont. I will wait until you let me go. I don't want to end up like the others."48

Slowly he leaned over her, untied her hands, and her feet. She didn't move. Just layed there. 49

Then she spoke50

"If I let you have sex with me, will you let me go?"51

He looks at her, She had won, everything, his mind and his heart. He couldn't go through with this now.52

"Get out of here. Now."53

Her jaw dropped. She cant believe what she is hearing...Was it really this easy?54

"I SAID GET OUT OF HERE" He screamed, Startling her out of her thoughts.55

"I have no clothes..." He threw a long trench-coat at her. 56

"Go get in the truck, I will take you to the movie theater and then we will say goodbye."57

She slowly put the trench-coat on, watching every move he made, weary that he could change his mind, at any time. She got into the passenger seat of the truck, he climbed in and started the engine. As they drove to the movie theater, not a word was said. He didn't warn her not to tell anyone. Just a thick silence hung in the air. When they arrived at the movie theater, It was dark, The movies had closed long ago. She got out of the truck, barefooted and began walking away, Too afraid to run. She didn't dare turn and look back, afraid he would change his mind. As she neared the payphone, She heard a gunshot.58

Tara ran back to the truck, he was leaning over the passenger seat, a gun in his hand. There was no mistaking he was dead. Tears streamed down her face, and she couldn't explain why.59

Several hours later, after giving statements to the police, and hearing over and over again how lucky she was to survive a mass murderer, the news came on.60

"You have all heard the story of the man Called "Virgin" as that was his victim of choice. Today he was found dead in a Movie Theater parking lot. Early that night, he had taken one last victim, a 15 year old girl. She is alive and well, back at home. If anyone has any information on this man..." 61

She turned the TV off, seeing his picture flash on the screen was just too much to bear. Running to her bedroom, Her mother and father thought it had been too much for her, but in reality, she was grieving for the man she loved.62

Because she knew, in his mind, He loved her too.63

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This story has no truth to it whatsoever.

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  • Dreama
    January 31

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    blue bananas!

    wow. this was an amazing piece of writing.
    i think there's a little editing needed as in some places the flow of the story doesn't seem quite right. at other times it fits but not all the way through
    thanks for entering my contest

  • Drgan
    January 6

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    Needs Improvement

    I like the overall story line. However, it is either rather easy to tell this is an early work or hard to discern if you've written stories before. Now, I know you personally and I'm aware of your ability to write stories so this will just be an "early" work on my mind but this is for technical reasons rather than writing style in general.

    The use of 3rd person in this story proved really useful to you in the storyline. What I would like to see is better formatting of the text in general. This story - becomes difficult to read with some of the formatting in place.

  • likesuede
    November 16, 2008
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    kept me interested! good job.


  • NightTerror
    November 13, 2008

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    Thank you for entering. This was an interesting story. There were a few technical mistakes in it, and I think you could have introduced it a little better, but the story overall was good. The fact that she loved him despite what he was doing to her, and that he let her go because of it was an interesting way to write it. You might even add more to it concerning her love. Right now it seems a little superficial, but if you added more to it to explain why she feels that way about him it will make the story really spectacular, I think. The best thing you could do with it is probably make it a little less obvious that this guy is going to do something bad. Also, put a little more emotion into the ending. It feels a little detatched, and I think at this point, after losing the guy she loves, her emotions should be raging.

    Anyway, very good story. Thanks again for entering (and I apologize if I overloaded you a bit with the suggestions. I'm studying to be an editor, so it's more out of habbit than anything else.)

    -Nick.