It is raining, it always does, the rain hits me and bounces off, i am dry,1
the rain does not like me.2
I am alone, why does nobody want to help me, what have i ever done to them,3
they used to ignore me but now they are not here.4
I want to leave, why can't i leave, where is the exit, there are no walls,5
why can't i move?6
I am dead to them, they pretended than i did not exist, before they left,7
I liked it batter when they laughed at me.8
First it was hot and they liked me, then they laughed and it was cold,9
then it was dark and they ignored me, now it is wet and they are gone,10
where have i gone?11
Author notes
This is about the inside of somebody's mind, it can be confusing but if you don't get it im me.
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I like this, very stream of consciousness-like, and an interesting read. It really does seem like the inside of a person's mind, with disjointed, random thoughts and emotions. Good job and good luck
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No but really this is excellent! keep writing this really great stuff, you'll be famous for it someday (and no im not joking, i really mean it mate)
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Stop describing how i feel! That's my job! ahhh....i'll let you off this time, only cuz i've already written something along these lines...havent posted it though....hmmm, maybe i should
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hey, this is a very interesting story, very differnt from your other one. I really like it though, it's a stream of consciousness genre which is always interesting to read. It reminds me of my own mind, always jumbled with random thoughts, thoughts that are sometimes confusing to others but not to me. Keep up the good work.
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