love is blind

My face buried in your shoulder,
tears flow from sightless eyes.
For us the saying was literal,
love really is quite blind.1

From the first day I met you,
I never saw your face.
Beauty doesn't matter,
especially in this case.2

I don't know what you look like,
but I know your feel and sound,
i know when you're feeling happy,
and I know when you're feeling down.3

I hear the birds outside my window,
I feel the sun's warmth on my face,
I know that you are here,
with me in this place.4

I know your heart may ache for me,
imagine the condition of mine.
Isn't it a tragedy
when eyes that can't see cry?5

With all consuming blindness,
there comes problems, there comes strife,
but it is when you cannot see
that you see the beauty in life.

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  • DemApples
    November 1
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    aww and this hasn't won a gold trophy yet?


  • BlondSteph
    September 7

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    Unfortunately this is a poem sweety sooo i was looking for stories, i noticed you have another entry. However on a positive note this a very good poem and really enjoyed reading it


  • Le Masquerade silver member
    July 14
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    Well I've already commented on this poem in my previous contest and I really enjoyed reading it both times. Thanx for entering my contest and good luck


  • LynksTryforceGurl
    July 7
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    for contest:

    piano

  • lalala69
    July 7

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    Wow that was good. However, in the fourth stanza, 'suns' should be sun's. Also, I don't have the information that I asked for in the 'guidlines and suggestions' part of the contest, so please get that to me, I don't care how. I enjoyed reading that, it was very moving. Thank you for entering.


  • Unice the geek
    July 6

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    I hear the birds outside my window,
    I feel the suns warmth on my face,
    I know that you are here,
    with me in this place.4
    that was my favorite line! thank you for your entry, you did really well. i hope to see you in some of my upcoming contests!


  • Vanilla King
    June 30
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    Strong poem! I like rhyme in poems, so that's a plus.

    The last two paragraphs were very powerful, especially these parts:
    P5: "Isn't it a tragedy
    when eyes that can't see cry?"

    P6: "but it is when you cannot see
    that you see the beauty in life."

    Though poems weren't really what I was hoping for in my contest, I sill thank you for entering!

  • Le Masquerade silver member
    June 27

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    That is very sad, sweet and well written all in one. It's nice to hear people writting about differnt ways of loving a person and I thought It was wonderful that this person loved someone else without ever seein their face. Great job


  • ArtistoLeVerse
    June 24

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    I loved it.
    It spoke so much truth.
    but you needed to put in your authors note if you have been or are in love.
    other than that, very nice job.


  • plurangel silver member
    May 22
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    beautiful. hope u win


  • Neolittlefish
    April 3

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    I like the angle that you chose for this , it was very honest and packed with emotion. One thing, can you please put your favourite film in your Authors Notes (it was my rule number six to check everyone had read the rules) Thanks for entering


  • snoble
    March 9

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    oh i love this poem. i almost felt blind and like i could feel peoples fetures better. i really cant describe it


  • Keirii
    February 24
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    Truly truly beautiful.

    Loved it!!!

    Your a possible finalist!!!


  • Cajun.Lullaby
    February 21

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    This is so beautiful! I loved this poem. The rhythm fell off in just a few parts, but it flowed well anyway. Wonderful job. The reader can plainly feel the emotions of this person. Well done!!!


  • Raeyle
    February 9

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    I like this poem. The rawness of the emotion through basic level language, I think conveys both the simple levels of emotion and the deeper levels as well. Unfortunately, it does not meet all the criteria for the comp. But I did enjoy reading this


  • SweeneyTodd-girl
    February 6

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    Maggie!!! (I mean NiteShayde) how can you not know who this is about?

    "from the first day i met you,

    i never saw your face."


  • SweeneyTodd-girl
    February 6
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    You couldn't see his face... hmm... wonder why...

  • Vanilla King
    February 2

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    This was beautiful! Normally I'm not a great fan of poetry, nor do I know much about it, but this I liked! Can't help you with possible suggestions or anything, really don't know much about poetry. It flowed and rhymed well, so I think that's good!


  • crazy.hott.salsa
    January 21
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    Emotion in every line!

    it was fabulous! emotion filled the lines..PERFECT!
    Thanks for your entry and good luck

    -salsa


  • Bethany
    January 20

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    oh my gosh you did an excellent job, it is a beautiful poem, i love the ryming, alot of people try to make it rhym (haha sp) and they make it sound forced, but your did an excellent job =]


  • inluvwithawerewolf
    January 18
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    that was sad,
    but i liked it


  • Sliver Rainshine
    January 10
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    i love this poem so much meaning good job


  • Vampiric souls
    January 7

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    wow this is beautiful... really really beautiful..... I love how you've put the piece together it so fits with the whole thing and you have written a wonderful piece............ Thank you for entering


  • NiteEnjoysGolfBalls
    December 30, 2008
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    Okay, i give up. which boy is this about?


  • Living.Disaster
    December 14, 2008

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    Exactly Love Is Ever so blind, most don't relize that

    Beautiful Poem and Good Luck in my contest.


  • Artificial.Smiles. gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    this is so true, and so fantastic!i loved this poem so much. It had so much meaning to it, and it caught my attention from the first line

    Good Luck in my Contest!


  • caitecola
    November 14, 2008

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    I believe that this is so true. When you finally aren't looking at your life like you have to make something of it, and you just sit back and relax, things will come to you and life will be more enjoyable, more beautiful.

    I think that people don't realize this, and I even have a hard time being able to let go and see life for what it is, but it's that simple. I really like your poetry. Great job.

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