if you read it , you read it . if not , then im sorry . look out for my new story comming up soon .
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if you read it , you read it . if not , then im sorry . look out for my new story comming up soon .2
if you read it , you read it . if not , then im sorry . look out for my new story comming up soon .
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This is a continuing "Diary" ... will update soon
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its not really a diary entry , its more like a story . this was like just one of the chapters in it and such shat . im in process of making the other chapters . but i think im about to delete all this tho , cause i came up with a more "interesting" thing for a story but with the same plot line and such . thanks for the suggestions tho .
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this is a cool diary entry, but since it's from a diary, I'm not sure if you'd want to change anything. I don't know if I should give you suggestions or not.... well, if you want them here they are, and if not, then ignore them:
Try to use words other than darkness. You say darkness a little bit too much.
go more in-depth on who your friends were and stuff and how they made you feel.
That's basically it, said from one diary writer to another. And if you don't want to use these suggestions on this particular entry, maybe you can use it for future ones. Good luck with everything and I hope you come out of darkness soon.
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Hey I like your diary entery sounds the same as most of mine I'm always the oddball that doesnt quite fit in the outsider of the group the self harmer and the one wishing for death but pretending to be happy so yer I can totally relate to this well done in gettin your feelings down sometimes it helps.
Becca xxxx
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