Reaching for the stars.

The beat of my powerful wings settled to a steady rhythm as the uneven leap into the sky was balanced. I rose higher and higher, watching the emerald green farmland grow smaller.1

I swiveled my head up to gaze at the marvelous night sky, the stars winking at me in easy companionship and the moon my ever-present friend. I ruffled my feathers in a half-hearted attempt to impress them, knowing that I could never hope to rival their silver glory.2

With one last powerful beat I landed on a hot air rise, letting it take me up above the clouds. I floated towards the night, trying to get as high as I could. The free lift spluttered and expired and I was forced to resume manual work. I strained against gravity, longing to join the gleaming suns in their silent aloofness. 3

Exhaustion took over and I swooped back down to Earth like a rusty arrow, my gold feathers brushing out in the free fall. At the last minute I pulled out of my dive and heard an exhalation of breath from a nearby bush. My sharp eagle eyes were instantly drawn to the sound and I spotted the glint of the monkey's equivalent to my eyes. I pondered whether to show off more, just for the sake of it. I decided against it.

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The blush of dawn bloomed across the grey sky, tinting the clouds pastel shades of purple, pink and orange. I perched high up on a tree and watched it, cocking my head to one side to see it better. Eventually I got bored and 'fell' off the branch, braking at the last possible second.
I sped through the forest, avoiding gently falling leaves. I traced in and out of old trunks and new shoots just beginning to emerge. I saw a mouse scurrying frantically through the dark brown dirt and decided not to eat, I wasn't hungry.

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A sharp click from behind me alerted my finely tuned sense. I turned to see a feathered dart zooming towards me, as if in slow motion. It's wake blew out the leaves from either side, leaving it's passage clear. With a sharp pang it hit me just under my out stretched wing. I struggled to force my dizzy brain to keep me aloft but the sleepiness was too strong. I dropped like a rock on top of a handy pile of soft petals, some still spiraling down to me. My eyes flickered open just enough to see the monkey with strange feathers leaning over me with it's claw about to grab me. I collapsed into blessed darkness...

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I woke in a strange place. A room with only one opening through which I could see the hills. I flew over to it and attempted to escape. I sped at it at full force. I was nearly there - Bang! I collided with something. My poor mind was completely bewildered. The air had hardened? I tried again and again until I was covered with bruises, slowly emerging into their purple splendour. An exclamation of suprise came from behind me.

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"Wow birdy, you got spirit!"

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I squawked at the monkey angrily. The strange noises coming out of his beak annoyed me, and why couldn't I go home. He slowly came towards me, holding out what looked like a sharp piece of rock. I backed away and slammed into the hard air. Unused to being cornered I tried desperately to get a hold on the smooth trunk reaching up to the wooden sky.

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The monkey came closer and I gave up, knowing that he was stronger. The needle sank deep into my smallfeathers and I again fell into blackness.

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I awoke in a cage. I was sitting on a fake branch surrounded by interlocking iron lines, no way out. I screamed mentally at being so close to freedom but still not being close enough to soar once more into the deep, never ending blue. I leaped off the branch in the huge aviary, only to crash to the ground. I tried again to soar up high but my wings wouldn't support me! I inspected the longfeathers. A deep cut had sliced away the necessary wingfeathers. They were completely gone, disposed of in a neat, precise clipping.

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I squawked in anger and frustration, what had I done?! Again and again I tried to rise up, to reach the branch again. Eventually I fell into a natural sleep, heavy with exhaustion. The next morning I discovered a bowl filled with seed. I took one bite and spat it out again. Euch, this wasn't anything like mouse! I looked around for an alternate food source, there wasn't one.

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I stayed imprisoned for many days. Days turned into weeks and weeks into years. I was kept away from my home just for the simple want of a pet to impress others. Has anyone ever considered an eagle's point of view? I finally gave up on escaping and spent my days slumbering.

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In my dreams I still flew high above the clouds, in the never ending blue, with my silent companions the stars as my guides.

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Author notes

The monkey's 'equivelant to eagle eyes' are binoculars.
Longfeathers, smallfeathers and wingfeathers are actually meant to be that way.

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  • tonialoise
    November 11, 2008

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    Yeah! A bird story, I was beginning to think I'd only have mammals. And an eagle at that!

    p5 this looks like it needed to be split in two paragraphs but isn't.

    Wonderful descriptions! This was completely perfect! You certainly did see straight through his eyes, the confusion about the glass and all! "The air hardened?" and "the strange noises coming out of his beak annoyed me" Just great!

    p9 "desperately to get a hold on the smooth truck reaching up to the wooden sky." This line confused me, first because I read the last as wooden spoon for some strange reason And second because I didn't know they were in a truck, I thought they were in a building. He identified it as a room,which I can see how an eagle might know what a room is (or their equivalent) but how does he know it's a truck? Also towards this, when you mentioned the hills through the window, you didn't say they were moving so that further made me believe he was in a building.

    p12 normally (in my experience) people who keep eagles as pets do know they are carnivorous and feed them mice and other things (and let them hunt). Though it's possible people with less experience who just want the cool looking bird might feed them seed, so don't change it on my account for all I know that could be a dumb human, dumb enough to take a beautiful bird from the wild

    Sigh... another sad ending. However it's a great story! Thanks for entering and Good Luck to you!


  • Rose-Quartz
    November 11, 2008
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    An Amazing Piece Of Writing

    Hi, I'm from Allpoetry.com. I was browsing through this site when I read your story/contest entry. I think this is an amazing piece of writing, beautifully descriptive and so, so very sad as well.
    A wonderful contest entry. I wish you All Good Luck in the competition. All my very best wishes from Rose

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.