Shani groaned in agony as she embraced the raw materials of the Universe. She called to herself the magic that lay under Nature, in every river, mountain, desert and molehill. She felt it flowing to her and embraced it, opening herself to it.1
To any onlooker they would have seen a beautiful woman with ebony hair kneeling in front of a fire. They would have seen a golden glow that flickered around her like flames, delving deep into her aura.2
With a flash Shani opened her eyes, inside was the raging power of Nature, an overflowing tide of rock-hard cold flames. A bolt of lightening pierced the horizon as it flashed down towards her. Shani held out her hands and the end of the lightening just slightly touched her outstretched fingers. 3
Shani shivered uncontrollably, feeling the electricity coursing along her very bones. It combined with the other power and they merged with a clash of thunder that rocked the stormy night sky. Shani drew out the power and shaped it carefully, using her eyes to channel the power. She finished the shape and tossed it into the fire.4
Flames roared up, reaching high into the sky as if they could reach their powerful sister suns. A being emerged out of the gateway of fire, a creature beaming with such incredible intensity that even Shani was forced to look away. The light rivaled moonlight, illuminating the surroundings so brightly that it looked like day, even brighter than that!56
Then, as quickly as it started, it stopped. The flames simmered back down to normal and the being's light faded to a bearable level. Shani turned back around to gaze at her creation. A cat walked out of the small, heatless, super nova. It's body bristled with flames, red hot flames that replaced it's mass. Even as Shani watched it opened it's eyes.7
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Author notes
Do you think I should add on? You know, just kinda make it into a proper story.
P.S The picture is the one of the fire cat
P.SS I think it's pretty obvious how the pictures match.
A contest entry
- Short Picture Prompt contest by Shimmerfairy.
240 points, ended November 11, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Does it have potential to be continued?
Comments
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Is this a prologue? You don't have it listed as such but since it is in my contest I'm assuming so. The descriptions on this were wonderfully vivid, I'm very impressed. This was very captivating and I would deffenetly continue it. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Yeah, it's a prologue. Thank you for reading and commenting!
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Good start
I thought your descriptions were great. The entire scene was riveting. I think you have a very good start to an interesting story. Keep writing.
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oops, i fogot 2 add!
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wow! that was...AMAZING!!! I could totally picture this in my head!
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THis was good and i definately think that you should add on to it. I know this was for a contest but i felt like i might as well put in my input cuz i already read it.
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ooh i like..yeah maybe add more if you're up to it??
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