No one could see the pain behind those glowing blue eyes1
No one could see the depression that lurked within her2
They didn't know that everyday, she slid a blade across that smooth porcelin skin of hers3
They didn't know about the growing number of scars on her wrist4
They never realized her thoughts of suicide behind that gourgeous fake smile5
They never knew until it was too late6
They found her laying across the bathroom floor7
The blade still in hand, her arm still bleeding, making the pool of blood around her increase in size. 8
They never knew why...
my 1st poem.. what do you think?
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mint
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I can relate. Great! keep it up.
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Grimfang
aw this is sad but i love emo stuff so this story brings wormth. I realy love this.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Grimfang
aw this is sad but i love emo stuff so this story brings wormth. I realy love this.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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wow i can kinda relate but only slightly but this is still very very sad
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this is sad that no one knew why
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i like it
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sounds like me X(
i can relate
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I think it's a little creepy but very good. Particularly the descriptions of her, and her skin. I really liked it, but it certainly was a bit creepy, that's for sure. Best of luck to you
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