It was amazing how cold it could get in October these days. The pale, yellow sun was still trying to fight against the gloomy, gray clouds that were covering most of its surface.1
The grass crunched beneath my feet as I walked across other people's front yards. The frost that had creeped up from behind was beginning to get comfortable here in Virginia.2
I tucked my fists into my large pockets. My hair was starting to creep down to my eyes, which was really annoying. I could barely walk a few steps without being able to see. I could ask my parents for money to get a haircut, but they wouldn't really care anyway.3
I couldn't see at this moment either.4
"Just ignore it," I told myself grumpily. "People might think you're a girl if you keep messing around with your hair."5
And that's how I came to colliding with a hard substance - another person - and heard him/her fall onto their back.6
I instantly pushed my hair back and dropped down to the guy that I had walked right into.7
"Are you blind?!" the stranger demanded, although he didn't sound angry.8
"I'm sorry," I apologized quickly. I tried not to notice his handsome curves and his angelic face, but I kept taking glances.9
"Can you at least help me up?" he asked, a little kinder this time. I nodded dumbly and grabbed his hand. My cheeks were burning.10
"How about pulling?" the person asked, laughing a little. I pulled, and he jumped right up.11
"Sorry about that."12
"No problem," he replied with a small smile. "Have I seen you at school?"13
"South-Mission Academy?"14
"Is that some kind of private school?" the guy asked.15
"Yeah," I answered. "Something wrong with them?"16
"Hm. They're usually swarming with snotty rich kids," he said casually. "Not that you're one of them," he added quickly. "I go to public highschools."17
"Which one?" I inquired politely, trying not to look at the outline of his abs through his shirt. Why wasn't he wearing a jacket in this weather anyway?18
"Haywind. It's right past Applewood Street, if you ever wanna stalk me."19
I laughed. He seemed pleased with himself.20
"What's your name, then?" he asked, after a moment's worth of silence.21
"Craig."22
"Evan."23
I nodded.24
"Why aren't you wearing a coat?" I blurted out. He looked surprised at the sudden question, but regained his composure.25
"Can't afford one."26
"You're poor?" I could've punched myself in the gut. You don't go around asking personal information to people you hardly know - but Evan looked unaffected.27
"Not really. My parents won't give me the money."28
"What if you freeze to death?"29
Evan laughed, as if this was the funniest thing he'd ever heard.30
"They wouldn't care," he said dully, after his laughter subsided. "They don't care about my welfare or thoughts or ideas. I basically get by each day by myself. All they do is argue amongst themselves or with me."31
"So...Are you...sort of..." I couldn't finish, but Evan managed a small smile.32
"I don't cut. Seems like a stupid way to get past your problems. It's like drinking - you know it's wrong, but you can't live without it. So I don't do it."33
I nodded again. Evan took a step forward toward me.34
"I feel something..." He looked at his hands. "I feel something in my veins. Something powerful."35
I didn't tell him I was feeling the same thing. It was just too...weird. It was the feeling I got when the girl I liked was near me. I shook my head.36
'No, I can't be falling for a...another guy,' I thought desperately to myself. 'I can't. Mom and dad would kick me out of the house if they figure out I'm bi...but I can't be...'37
Evan looked at me worriedly.38
"You okay?" he asked, concern in his eyes. He reached out to grab my hand. I pulled away instinctively. He looked away, and I couldn't figure out the look of hurt on his beautiful face.39
After a while, he turned toward me again.40
"Wanna get something to eat?" he offered. "I'm starving."41
I shrugged.42
"Sure," I agreed. "Nothing else to do today."43
We walked toward a local and well-known food place, talking and laughing the whole way. People mistook us for brothers and gave us smiles as we passed.44
But, when we got there, he dragged me to the parking lot in the back.45
"What're we doing here?" I asked curiously.46
"I know you feel it, too," Evan said solemnly.47
"Feel what?" I asked nervously, but all that came out was a squeak. Evan took my hand into his and kissed it.48
"That's what you feel," he said, putting a devilish grin on his face. His floppy black hair was caught in a breeze and flew in his opposite direction. It made him look even more beautiful. A pink tinge appeared on my face.49
"W-wha..."50
"It's okay," Evan whispered. "It's okay to feel that way, Craig."51
I took a step back. He took a step forward. I paced around to calm my violently thudding heart. I turned to look into his intense green eyes.52
"I thought we were going to get some food?" I asked. He smiled.53
"Not now," Evan said. "Maybe later." He walked over to me and put my head into his hands. "Maybe later..."54
And then I was flying. Our lips connected. My eyes flew open in shock, but I realized that I wasn't pulling away. A small smile formed on my lips, and I slowly closed my eyes.
Author notes
Bi story. >< Never thought I'd write one of those. x3
http://blood-stained-angel1.deviantart.com/art/Kiss-32274979
I KNOW he's wearing a coat in the picture...Pretend he isn't. o.o
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest!! by Eddie.
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Comments
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Weird, I never actually commented on this? Huh...
This story is absolutely adorable, the kind that can make you feel warm when the weather outside is -5 degrees. I was excited to see what you would do with the prompts, and you incorporated them into the story beautifully.
"And then I was flying."
That line stuck out the most for me. What a perfect way to describe a first kiss with someone. I love this
Good luck in my contest, but you are DEFINITELY a finalist. -
Cute story! The part at the end where you describe the kiss...that is sort of how it was for my boyfriend and I the first time he kissed me. At least the flying part teehee. Well written! Very descriptive. I'll have to read more of your work as time allows. Good luck in the contest! -Liz
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Thanks for the comment. I might read some of your stories...if you have them.
Jussst kidding. You probably have stories. Or you don't. But you probably do. So...I'm rambling right now. 
I might see you around. Byeeee. 
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Even though this is a contest story WRITE ANOTHER ONE. It was good and if youu don't I will find you and kill you X3
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Not if I kill you first. And write another of what? Thanks for the comment, by the way. OCTOPUS COOKIES, FTW
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Oh sweet Jesus! *tosses some brownie points* Yay!
Okie dokie. On to business. As I read this I found you did wonderfully with characters and spelling so I had a good time reading this. But I will say that I thought it was kind of weird how these two boys just met and were so open with each other about their lives and emotions. I just thought they were rushing it. But that was my only issue.
So I loved this. I love reading about bisexual boys! A lot more than I like reading about bisexual women which is weird considering I am one... But I digress. I though it was crazy good. Your characters were vivid and angsty and I love vivid and angsty characters. This made me smile. It was very nice indeed. -
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Thanks~~~ ^-^ I'm glad you liked it. NOW GIVE ME A NICE, SHINY TROPHY. o.o Did that just come out?
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Wow, I see what you mean. (as in the better bit) That is great! It goes perfectly with the picture. Congratulations on making ME feel bad.
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AWESOME! A double post. Now I must take pictures to remember the memory. Yes, I'm weird, but I'm Barney the Dinosaur, and I come from your imagination!
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Wow, I see what you mean. (as in the better bit) That is great! It goes perfectly with the picture. Congratulations on making ME feel bad.
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Just as you say in your notes: Bi story. Never thought I'd write one of those...Bi story, never thought I'd read one of those...with boys in it anyway. It's just not my thing. However I found this very well written and since I'm not a homophobe I actually found it endearing in the sense I felt you meant it to be. I think you did a great job. Just a couple of spots I thought you might improve. In para. 3 did you mean I could barely walk a few steps without being able to see. Or did you mean that he would be unable to see? In para 54 He walked over to me and put his head into his hands. didn't make sense to me. Do you mean took my head into his hands? or put his hands on my head? Great Job!
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Lmao. x3 Paragraph 54 is messed up. o.o I'll go fix it. Thanks for your...umm...feedback. That's a nice thing to call it. Now I will go fix it up. ^-^
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its cute. Lol I really like it. I plan of writing something like this or starting a contest like this in the nearer future.
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Awesome. ^-^
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Sure! Here you go:
http://blood-stained-angel1.deviantart.com/art/Kiss-32274979
Good Luck
And if you can't write anything from it, just let me know and I can give you a different one.
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Are they both boys? o.o Just makin' sure before I start. o.o
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Lol. Yeah, I'm pretty sure they both are.
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