Look

You saw me as I once was
Beautiful in light and dark
But now
I am in shadow
Encased in cloud
Nothing to whomever...
Nothing fits right
Feels right anymore
Uncomfortable around you
Around me...
Don't trust
Can't trust
No more feeling of love
Not even of lust
Emotion is forced
Like everything else
Do you still see me
Or am I just a shadow?

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  • Sgs
    November 8, 2008
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    This is beautiful, very well-worded and easy to relate to.


  • try2changeme
    November 8, 2008

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    amazing

    i love how you put it together
    it may be short (which is how i like it)
    but the emotions come pouring out of there
    i love it
    it makes me feel like i once was, and for an author to make u feel ur past is great

  • Insanitys Plea
    November 8, 2008

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    *huggles*

    As I've told you before I love how you form the words together.They slide in effortlessly and they flow,they know no obstacles.They have no obstacles.