Do you believe in dragons?
The monsters from the tales
Of princesses in towers
With shiny golden scales.1
Do you believe in unicorns?
Those playful, friendly beasts.
They are good for they prefer
Vegetables for feasts.2
Do you believe in magic?
Not like rabbits out of hats,
But people making potions
From the eyes of frogs and bats.3
You may not believe
in anything I say,
But I will tell my stories
Every single day.4
I believe in dragons,
In phantoms, faeries, elves.
Do you believe in all these things?
Are you one yourself?5
Long ago there was such wonder,
Such magical special things.
Now they are gone
Solely because
People refuse to believe.
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very good. has Sara read this? It totally screams her.
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Good job! LOL, I like the pegasus pick to. It was cute, and sweet and innocent. I like how it ryhmed and was very descriptive, you know? Most poems I read aren't to descritpvie and just get to the point, but this one that you did, it had description and got to the point. Awesome of the awesomeness job!!! This was fantabulous!!! I also liked how you made it seems like it was real. Golden dragon scales ... I can picture that. Playful beasts ... I liked it all!!!
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So cute! A very cute story! Aw... I loved it!!!
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All I have to say is, well......WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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and why does the princess have scales?
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dragons are scary... but that's the most g-rated one I've read so far. Thanks for entering.
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good job
the Flow was quite nice. I enjoyed it a hole bunch.
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Pretty good
I'm always happy to see a rhyming poem these days. The rhythm seems a bit awkward though. -
This was good. Rhyme seemed a little forced, but I liked the concept.
You might consider uploading this on allpoetry instead of storywrite, though. -
"People don't give enough credit to mythical creatures."
I could make a derogatory, anti religious comment here, but I won't. -
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Haha. I'm sharing in your unspoken derogatory, antireligious commentary.
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This was really good. It was pretty simple with wording, which I liked. You don't always need complex, big words to make a story, or in this case poem, good!
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aww!
Beautiful and cute! Love the rhyme! XD
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Line five should be "unicorns" and the next line should be "beasts. Also in line five you have a misplaced modifier which makes it sound as though the princesses have scales... On line 14 and throughout the rest of the poem you lose your rhyme scheme which takes away from the poem. In order to enhance it you could use a more complex scheme or meter or use none at all. This would either get you to think about other words you wouldn't normally use or it would get you to go completely crazy and release everything you've got.
This is a cutesy piece that I think could be more original if you changed a few things that I've mentioned above. It is a good start though
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