Set in the near future (2015), convicted criminal Angela Morris finds out that an old acquaintance is found dead in an abandoned warehouse in Darling Harbour - apparently beaten and then killed. She dismisses it as another sad fact of the 'outside' world - one she hasn't had to deal with since her arrest and sentencing five years earlier. 1
Meanwhile, she and her best friend, Tina, have to live their day-to-day life in the maximum security women's gaol Berrima Correctional Centre in the picturesque Southern Highlands - working, eating, sleeping - counting down the days until they are to be released.2
Their routine comes apart when Tina receives news that her son is gravely ill with Leukaemia, and when the gaol refuses to allow her escorted access to her son at Westmead Childrens', she vows to Angela that she is willing to risk everything and break out. Angela convinces her that an escape would not be the answer to this problem, only to receive her own bad news - her husband is killed in what appears to be a bungled home invasion.3
After Angela receives a cryptic message in an unmarked envelope, both women turn to each other, and suddenly the thought of breaking out becomes more and more appealing. The two women put their heads together to stage a daring escape - and succeed to end up on the run, with both the authorities and someone else on their tail and gaining ground.4
While on the run, Tina searches for a way to save her son, while Angela searches for answers.5
What Angela uncovers on her journey answers questions, but brings to light the possibility of something so terrible that she wishes that she had never sought the truth.6
Author notes
Chapters for this novel will be posted as I edit, just click on the link to the list.
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Hmmm... I'm not EXACTLY sure what to make of this. It's a good story, don't get me wrong. Interesting plot you've set up for me so far. You're probably one of the more detailed summary givers in this contet lol.
Great work, this is a story I didn't expect. It's based in reality, a place that isn't exactly the most hospitable place in my travels.
Only kidding.
Best of luck to you. I tip my hat.
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You have me on the edge of my seat - literally! This is exactly me cup of tea: thrillers, mystery, an obvious hint of a conspiracy topped with delicious family-related emotions! Would love to read this!
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Hmm .. sounds to me like my cup of tea.
I would definitely like to read more, after having read your excerpt on Nano's website.
Good luck editing!
RJ
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Hi Blondie, so this is what you were doing.
Sounds like you put a lot of thought into it, the plotting sounds interesting and the characters easy to see, I would definitely like you to post the chapters here.
Geri
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I would indeed wish to read more...
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I'm impressed - it's not often I see a NaNoWriMo story that is so obviously well planned. It hints at conspiracies and action and friendship, desperation and hope, and so mystery. I know you powered through this during November, and I can't wait to read chapters as you post them - it sounds great!
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Interesting. A very promising tale from one of StoryWrite's best authors. I look forward to seeing this work published. Great beginning, Blondie.
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It sounds like it'll be PACKED with jam. I mean jam-packed with action, intrigue, twists and mystery. Puts me in mind of that Fox show, Prison Break, a bit, and I thoroughly enjoyed the first season of that show. I love the giant plots with shadowy bad guys and huge, interwoven conspiracies! It sounds like it's gonna be a great ride.
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a very intriguing teaser... this really captivates interest from the very beginning... the plot appears to be very interesting, as this teaser reveals and hints at a lot. looks to be shaping up to be a successful story- good luck!
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Yes, I DO want to read it. When can I have it? - 1st December would be really nice
You're nothing but a long-legged TEASE! Blondie
Lis
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Interesting
This would do well as a part of a query to a publisher, I would think. It sounds like you are drawing from your personal experience in the beginning. Probably a lot throughout the story. I think it would be a good read when you finish, but I don't think I'll have time to get into it, unfortunately.
What can you win in the NaNo competition?
Andy
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Your teaser is wonderful. It gives us just enough insight to the characters and their situation to already have us guessing at several things that we want to find out the answers to. There aren't any gramatical errors that jump out at me. I'd say you have the start to a wonderfully interesting tale here.
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Hmmm... quite a lot happening there and that's just the teaser?! wow!
Well, I'll be honest, prison break stories don't really interest me, however I like their motives and I like the mystery behind it. A good intrigue usually outweighs the overall genre for me.
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I am hook!
You got me hook! It read something back on a novel in bookstore. You have thought your story well.
Good luck in writing it,
Lynn
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Sounds like you have an interesting plot; with some well thought out scenes and colorful characters.
Not much for female 'heroes' but if you promise to throw a nice handsome fellow in as a distraction sure I'd love to read it.
Your writing is always easy to follow; so reading is not a problem--now tell me what's this NaNo business?
Geri
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Great Teaser!
I know this will be an interesting read--Sounds so promising! Very original to write about two female inmates who are going to try an escape just to be with their sick loved ones and get some answers.........very nice.=) -
I said it before and I'll say it again: I LOVE THIS! Oh, gosh...the intrigue, the excitement. I love it!
*calms down after hyperventilating*
As the previous commenter said:
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I think I saw this movie! J/K
This sounds really interesting. I wonder what Angela or Tina did to end up in there. Were they wrongly convicted? Who sent the letter? Damn you and this teaser! I want to know more!!
I hope you do well in NaNo. After all is said and done please tell me you're going to post the story here.
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I'll start posting in December - after NaNo finishes - I should have at least a 100K raw draft by then to start tidying up and posting in chapters. Just sitting on 22.5K at the moment, so I'm hoping I'll achieve my target.
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Wow. I think if I added up all my stories on here I might have about half of that. And that might be pushing it. lol
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