The Chant of a Dead Man

I scream but cannot hear it
I feel the blood rush through my mouth
But, alas I cannot taste it
My toungue is gone already!
I laugh at when I think this
I'm mad am I not!
And then I hear the beat
The Oh So slowing beat
I'm dying Sir!
As you can see
The spear runing through my back!
I fall down to the ground,
My body turning cold!
The horses are rushing by me,
I feel it in my bones!
Hours later
After all the soldiers take their leave
The rats come out.
Oh help me!
Save me!
They'r clawing at my face!
I feel like I shouldn't worry about this,
for I am a dead man.
What do I have to worry?
When I am dead and gone?1

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This is the thrid time i edited it! Hope you like it!

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  • MsAlee gold member
    November 11, 2008
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    Very well written.


  • chuchu11384
    November 9, 2008
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    Thx!


  • TNTrouble
    November 4, 2008

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    I like this but it seems as if you could add more to it? Just a thought...twas so good it made me want more.