She watched him from across the lunch room and his face still looked the same as the day before and the one before that. She still looked, even if she already had an elaborate image of him in her head. His eye caught hers and he smiled and waved. She returned the favor, as always. His liberal seeming smile made her smile appear also. How was she to emerge with her feelings for him? How was she to say that he felt no longer like her brother, but just a good friend? One that she was attracted to, not just physically either. These same thoughts scrambled her brain the day before and the one before that.1
Days after, when talking to a friend, she confessed her feelings for this boy. A week later, the girl found out that the boy, who had felt like her brother until now, liked her as well. Impulsively, he asked her to be his girlfriend, she of course said yes. For the next five months, they appeared inseparable. When you saw one, the other was by their side. She was always smiling and laughing while with him and his eyes always were watching her and holding onto her every word. They were a very notable couple and weren't considered mediocre.2
Over those five months, they spent hours on the phone and learned so much more about one another. The boy learned of how frugal the girl could be and she learned of his sweet, indulgent heart. They went to movies and always sat with each other on their bus ride home. When they parted, the words, "I love you." were always exchanged. How perfect life seemed to be, but we all know that when you least expect it, the worse happens. 3
On one of the girl's happiest days, she noticed there was something wrong with the boy. He wasn't his normal self. This bothered her because she didn't, for once, know what was going on in his confusing mind. On the bus ride home, he told her his reason for being so odd that day. He said that he felt they were distant, that he needed space, that he wanted to break up with her. Right then, the past five months seemed to disappear with the tears she cried. The girl's whole life was gone, nothing but black sadness was in her mind.4
She cried almost every night for two weeks. Thoughts of hate and love for him were in her broken heart. He was slowly changing, becoming farther from her. When she tried to talk to him, it was useless. He would throw everything back into her face. Now that it has passed, tears still form when she sees him talk to that other girl and when he acts so indifferent towards her, but she doesn't let him and the rest know. Yet, sometimes, the girl wishes he was still there with her, but he's gone now. He's done with her and she's out of his mind. And I hate to say that this young girl, so full of life, who loved this boy so much, is me.5
Author notes
For english, we had to write a short story & we had to use all of our vocab words from this week, some of ya'll know what I mean. This really is about me and my first love, again, some of ya'll know what i mean. But I do hope that you guys enjoy this.
Edit: We got our papers back today, 4-21, and i got a 98 on this... i had grammatical errors, i think i left a hyphen out and i also had an extra word in there i think.
<3-Madison
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I did enjoy it
but it was very sad, sniff, you seem to have a knack for capturing that certain emotion. Usually i try to override sadness by going for something cynical or gory, lol.
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SIMPLY F*****G AMAZING!
oh, mad, its a beautiful story, and ms cullen is a butthead if she doesnt give you an A++++++...ha ha ha...if you are wondering who this is, come by my site, all will be revealed in due time, my pretty...
YOURS IN LIFE AS IN DEATH,
(for now, nameless)
Quoth the Raven, Nevermore!
Edited on Apr 16, 9:57 p.m. because ''. -
well actually it's a short story that i had to write for english, not a poem, haha but i still appreciate the comment and your encouraging words, thank you so much
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wow this poem is very strong and emotional. its soo sad how that girl is you but very true about what happened. one of my best friends loved someone and he loved her too but they weren't dating and then one day he just dropped her like she was nothing and went out with another girl. she cried almost every night too. i dont know if you've gotten over it or not but if you haven't trust me..you will.
emily -
God. Your's is so much better than mine. I'm gonna be too embarassed to put mine up. But, question, where's reciprocate? Just wondering. Anyway, it's really well written! I haven't actually written mine yet. lol. Got to get to work. Keep up the great work!
God bless you,
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Erika ~~~~~
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aww...that's so sad
nice writting though, you seemed to use those vocab words pretty well mixed in there so you better get a good grade or i'll have to go have a "talk" with that teacher 
(if it's mrs. cullen then absolutely no problem but i have a feeling it's that other chick, marschews or whatever)
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haha thanks... i really hope i get a good grade on this. thanks so much!
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this was a very good short story, you were able to say what you felt...and hopefully get and "A" in English...LOL...well, as always, keep up the great work.
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