3rd week of January-Monday morning:1
"You late again?You can't get in hey any earlier?" Katrina asked Danielle as she sat down. 2
"I was at school every since but went to get a cruise ticket and did minding Ms. Norman business. We got a new one."3
"You malicious too pretty. Part this one from?"4
"Skool or parish?" Danielle asked.5
"Both." 6
"From SJSS and she from Jackson. Don't ask me nuh mo, I get run."7
Katrina laughed,"You foolish bad hear."8
Danielle took out her cell phone and looked at the time.9
"Wa um is you looking fa so...Akeem?"10
"I in gine tell u nuffin,"Danielle nodded her head to the front of the class,"Looka she dey."11
Katrina looked up and watched her English teacher and the transfer Danielle was talking about came in, "Sh...i...te, she...waaaaait that int you ex man best friend girlfriend sister cousin."12
Danielle looked across at Katrina,"How de hell I supposed to understand wuh you jus say?"13
"Dat in Romerio girlfriend sister cousin."14
"Das wa you say just now. Yes I think so, cud be wrong doh."15
the teacher made introductions to the class and the transfer sat down in the back of the class next to Katrina and Danielle.16
"So you in gine talk to she?"17
"Nope. I'm not one for small chit chat yuh know."18
Katrina stupsed,"Yeah right ya unmannerly dog. Wait doh, I now vise why ya went buying another cruise ticket fa?"19
"This fa Simmone she in coming school today."20
"So wuh happen tuh d docks?"21
"She in waan buy dem from dey dem cheaper hey."22
Katrina turned to front of the class flashing a glance across at the new girl before looking back at Danielle,"She too cheap, Sim....wait you mean we Simmone or...?"23
Danielle glared at her,"Who else I gine mean, wuh me and Simone Archer doh gree nuh mo, Man you best behave you self hear."24
"I got sain tuh tell so remind me when we gine home."
Author notes
This is the very beginning, this is where I started writing from. All shall be filled in just have patience. Please note the use of Simone Archer and Simmone Carrington two different people hence the spelling difference...not that you noticed...more to come...it all ends back up leading to the ones I already posted no fear.... 
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I like the idea of using dialect in the words that people are speaking. There were a few phrases that it took me a bit to get though. But I am not really sure how that could be improved. Some of it could just be me. Still I found the story interesting and it has me wanting to read on.
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You set up such a wonderful story here that I was compelled to read from start to finish and was entrapped in your world. I really loved the way it was written and the overall scene. i could really put myself into the story... The vibes, The characteristics Xd it was all so Wonderfully written
Well done
Thanks for writing this
Loved it
Write more.
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I think i might just read them and see, if i can get the gist of the speaking, your right it would probably take away from the character for them to speak standard english, be prepared for more comments on this stuff
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hmm... i only clicked to comment and ask what BAJAN is.. I read it and after i got over myself and realised that it wasn't bad grammar i got used to it and started to like it confusing trying to translate and get the story of someone related to someone else and all, but it was sorta funny
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Lol bajan is what we barbadians call ourselves instead of the long word barbadian..how it exactly came about I'm not so sure. This is just an understatement to how we really do speak because it is alot worse. Fortunately most of us can juggle both this dialect and standard english
. I'm glad you found it funny most of the time some of the situations we get caught up in ARE ridiculously funny. If it helps I can summarize what happens in this for you by IM.
Thanks for reading.
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Ok er I tried to read this but I can't understand it. I see they're talking in a specific accent but you might want to make this less emphasised and make it more accessible to everyone. However, from what I did understand, it looked like the beginning of an interesting plot so good luck with the rest and thanks. Sorry I'm rather hopeless at reading I guess accents aren't really my strong point. Anyway, interesting idea and keep working on following it through, it looked great.
~Luck~
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Umm I guess if you look at it that way it would be considered an accent but I prefer the broken english /dialect term. I did try bringing it over to more standard english but then it only took away from the characters. What I have been considering though is recreating it into one with standard english. At least then, more people can understand. So if you'd like you can stay tuned for that.
Thanks for reading though greatly appreciated.
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oh wat ever. simone archer simmone. ugh. i understnd tho i kno an akelah n a akeila but i dont speak to akelah lol.
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