Flight(2)

She waited for the performers to let her out anxious for a chance to stretch her wings which were bound to her back to stop her trying to fly away. She hear one coming and, stood up ready to cooperate so she could get out faster and strech her wings.as he stepped in and unchained her wings he gave her a stern warning anot to try to escape showing her the whip to prove his point. she stayed silent and unsurprised they did this every time. as she was lead out she stretched out her wings wincing at the pain of her mussels being stretched after so long bunched out. she heard mummers the show had started soon she would be led on.1

As she was lead on the head performers announced her . "And now the star light of are performance the one the only a dragon hear too preform for you leaper ". she snorted such a silly name last weeks name had been better.2

She flied and sung for the audience for along time never daring to stop fearing the whip. the crowd gasped at her simplest tricks as easily amused as any humans.When she gave a roar at the end of a song she saw the performers cringe in terror like every other human. She realised with a jolt of surprise that the performers were as frightened of her as any other human.3


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  • Silver Dancer silver member
    October 31, 2008
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    Oh!

    ok i am going to give you a few pointers here. in the last paragraph it says flied in the sentence 'She flied and sung for the audience for along time never daring to stop fearing the whip.' but i think that it should be flew since that would work much better and yes KEEP WRITING IT! since i will read what aver you write.