Its coming, fast, Mr. Henderson... Mr. Henderson, The doctors words blurred in Kurt Hendersons ears as he stared horrified at his 17 year old girlfriend about to give birth... The heart monitor beeped along snapping Kurt back into reality. Becka's brow was beaded with sweat. Mr. Henderson, are you going to catch or do you need a wheelchair? asked the impatient nurse as she wiped becka's brow. The doctor yells push and the nurse starts counting off. Kurt stands terrified watching the mirical of birth take place. He felt sick because it looked so painful. Becka yelled and coughed in her efforts to deliver there baby. Kurt decided he'd never make fun of her again after this, he knew it had to hurt. He gasped as his baby came into veiw. Kurt was in a transe as the doctor insructed him how to grab it. With one final push kurt lifted his new son up and handed him to the doctor. They laid the baby on Becka's panting chest, and handed kurt a pair of sissors. He cut the embilical cord and hugged becka tight. That was the craziest four mins. he had ever expirenced. They both smiled as they stared at their healthy first born son, Bart.
A contest entry
- Four Minute Warning! by Raccoon.Eyes.
410 points, ended November 21, 2008, 9 entries
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This really set a fast tone to the story, and caused me to read it fast as well. Intense, for sure, and though there were a few spelling/grammar mistakes, it was overall well-written.
Best of luck in the contest.
xoxox.
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That, I'm sure, was intense
This story could use some proofreading and editing.. I could read this over and send you a draft so that it might look better for the contest if you would like.
DarkOneShadow
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ha it only took me 2 mins to write for a contest... you should read something that i actually worked on..
plus grammer is not my strong suit...
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