She jumped out of her car and scurried up the steps to her cottage, coat pulled unfashionably over her head. She loved the rain and she usually didn't hide from it, but tonight it was cold and hard and the drops were unreasonably fat, landing on her skin and sliding freely under her collar.1
She dodged the particularly ominous drops slipping thickly off the rain gutter and hopped through her door. She shed her jacket, leaving it on the floor and made her way into the kitchen with a grin.2
She loved rain. It made her holiday villa in Spain even more cozy. She would curl up in her wide chair in the living room and watch tracks of water weave crookedly down her windows. Rain was an occasion to make hot soup and sip burning cider and re-read a good book.3
She had been in the hills, picnicking and already reading such a book when the skies had opened up. She hadn't minded then, even taking her time packing up, because nothing was better than a hot shower after getting caught out in the rain. She put the kettle on and made her way into the bathroom, still smiling. It faded as she got closer and heard the shower water already running.4
He was home.5
She backed away, picking up her sopping jacket and pulling open the door hastily, but he somehow knew. She heard the bathroom door open and turned reluctantly.6
"You're back. Good."7
He came toward her, fully aware of the effects the small towel he had wrapped around his bronzed torso cast on her.8
She saw that and didn't attempt to hide her appraisal. "Eh...you know I'm sure if you looked a little harder you could find something more adequate than a tea towel."9
He grinned at her hyperbole and she looked away. "I know you've been avoiding me."10
She made herself meet his eyes. "You think?"11
"Of course. And I know why."12
"Right, well at least you catch on eventually."13
He propped himself against the arm of her sofa and regarded her quietly. His towel opened just a little and she trained her eyes on his face with effort. "Well?" he prompted.14
"I can't talk about this anymore, like I said before. I'm going. Please be gone when I get back."15
She turned to leave, ignoring his intense gaze. "And don't try to follow me," she added knowingly. Back outside, she found the rain had let up swiftly, but the wind was still churning and moisture whipped all around her.16
"You wouldn't leave like this. That's too cruel, even for you."17
She stopped, unsurprised. She turned, glad to see he had put some pants on. She watched him come toward her, too curious about what could happen to leave.18
He couldn't see her face because the wind was effortlessly tossing about her mass of wet hair. He came closer and took her hair with one hand, coiling it around his wrist. He could see she was softening.19
"Please come back inside. We will talk. I will be good."20
She smiled, knowing that was a lie. She went inside.
Author notes
[beezy92 Picture prompt:
http://media.photobucket.com/image/rain/FindStuff2/Photography/Rain/rain_theme_by_sielojramu.jpg?o=8
Twilight
Picture prompt: 4) http://redfraction.deviantart.com/art/The-Rain-That-Falls-72181980 My favorite place to go is Lake Elkhorn Park
Option Three
This is bordering on romance novel sentiment, but I had fun writing it. So tell me what you think.
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Comments
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This was really sweet. The description was great and you could actually see what was happening before your eyes.
I like how you make the characters unknown to us. It is very mysterious.
Good luck in my contest!!!
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Lovely, descriptive writing. Nothing I could fault with, except maybe change hyperbole. I am not sure if readers in general will know what it means ...
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Wow, rainin' in spain. I like this.I like that it's set in spain. Spain's beautiful! It's very much like a nice romantic movie. I say, well done
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It's well written. I very much enjoyed her pleasure of the rain, which I personally hate unless it's summer!
I'm all for the coziness and burning cider (hahaha! I loved that description), WITHOUT being outside at all. 
That said, the fact that he needed to proclaim that he'd be good, implied that he hadn't been good. And if he hasn't been a good boy, that only reinforces my cynicism, alas. So though it's a very good story, and leaves many unanswered questions, it's actually the opposite of what I was looking for, alas. It's still very good though.
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Oh, good point!! Sorry about that. Thanks for the comment. (:
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This was just gorgeous. I really love the overall warm and comforting feeling this story emitted in the beginning. I love those rainy days when there's nothing better to do then stay inside. Personally, I'm the type to dance in the rain, but that's just me. This left me with many questions though. Like, who's the guy? Why is there such tension between them? Why did she think he was lying at the end? Either way, this was still really beautiful. I would love to read more though. Thanks for entering my contest. Finalist!
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I wish I had more for you to read. I wish I had more for me to read! (: I get these ideas for vignettes in my head but I don't have the ability or the follow-through to give them a proper beginning, middle, and end. Sad. Haha. Thanks for the comment!!
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thanks for entering the contest i really enjoyed the story
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Well written and thanks for putting it in.
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Oops. Forgot these. ^^
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=) I love this. I want to know moreeeee!
Who is he? What's up with them? [I know he's got to be hot.
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This is well written, of course, and I'm really curious for more!
Great work, thanks so much for entering my contest, and I wish you the best of luck!
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So many questions! Who's the guy? haha.
Though it was shorter than I asked for, I still liked it. It's a great start to something and I really hope you continue with it.
Thanks for entering and the best of luck to you! Now I'm off to read another, at this rate I won't be back logged in judging. Haha. -
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Ooops! I must have missed the length requirement. I'm sorry. And to answer your question, I don't know who the guy is yet either. (=
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Very cute. I really liked it.
I liked how you didn't give the back story between this couple.
I enjoyed it!
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Bravo!!
Hmmmmmmmmmmm.......
This was quite an interesting read. More erotic than your usual, but I loved it. The cozy feel you portrayed was also nice to read, being that I could really go for some rain right now Or maybe even some hot cider? Very nice
I really want to read more to this, and I have a few questions;
1) Why is she avoiding this sexy man??? I'd be jumping his bones! Lmao.. half kidding...
2) What is this dude doing in her (I assume she rented it?) cottage?
3) Is she on vacation?
I'd love to read more so all this could be answered... other than than, no complaints from Ana!
Love you!!
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Ana
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This was really good! I really liked reading it and it was a great story! Keep up the writing!
*KT*
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wow, great job. very vivid, i liked it
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You're fifteen! You're not supposed to write this sort of stuff!
The way that you describe astounds me. You are a fantastic writer. Everything about this piece seems so real. Even though there aren't any names involved in this piece either, it's still excellent.
The way you involved the rain and mentioned Spain in the closing sentence was really genius.
Well done!
I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!
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