Four Minutes from Love.

I looked around and found a clock; only four minutes to go. God I couldn't wait. I'd finally get to meet him. All this time talking online and it all comes down to four minutes. I waited nervously bouncing my leg watching the people walk by looking for a familiar face. The small airport meant I didn't have to worry about waiting for him to find his luggage or go through security before I got to see him. It'd been a tense few months that we've talked online, hours on end. 1

It all started so innocently. He'd seen some of my art and fell in love with it leaving me generous comments. Comments quickly grew into long e-mails and then long chats, until I finally gave in and bought a web cam, then it was long talks. I couldn't believe I'd fallen in love with a man I'd never met in person. Or that he was actually interested in me beyond my art. No one ever saw beyond my art. I wasn't the most beautiful woman in the world after all.2

I glanced up and watched the second hand slip by the three minute mark. God, only three minutes and then I heard the plane. I could tell other people around me were nervous and happy to see their friends and family return; all twelve of us. God, this was such a small town, what would they think when they saw him and me together? Word would get around so quickly. 3

I clinched my hands trying not to think about it. Trying to only think of his playful laugh and sparkling eyes. He was so handsome too, tall and a little rugged looking. I couldn't believe my luck. Two minutes now and the airline crew were aligning the steps up to the plane. What would I do when I had him in my arms? Faint probably. 4

They were beginning to move down the stairs now with only a minute to go I stretched my neck to get a first glimpse of him. An old couple exited first then a small family, the children bouncing with joy and my heart beating out of my chest in anticipation. I could feel him close to me. His warmth was already affecting me and my hot breath was clouding the window next to the door as I pressed against it trying to get as close as I could. 5

Finally, a head above the rest I saw his unmistakable blonde hair and crooked smile. He looked around the small airport taking it all in. Thirty seconds from now he'd walk through the door! The old couple was already through and the family was taking their time making him wait that much longer. I was nearly ready to bust through the glass to get to him.6

Zero seconds! He was here! He passed through the door and didn't even have a chance to look around before I sailed into his arms. He laughed sweetly and wrapped his arms around me while trying to get out of other's way. "Well, hello darlen." His deep Texas drawl nearly put me over the edge. I grabbed his hand and pulled him away from the crowd then turned back to him. He held my hands warmly and looked down into my eyes. "It's nice to finally meet you, Cindy." He placed a warm hand on my cheek then leaned down. Our lips met at last! My world exploded as I melted into his arms where I belonged.

Author notes

written for contest; Four Minute Warning

for contest; Contest Anything and Everything by finger-eleven
option 2 tonialoise is username

for contest; Touch Me! (Not a erotic type of contest) lol by; x3mydarkesthourx3
when the going gets tough, eat bagels! except bagels can be rather tough, so I'd rather have pancakes!


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I commented on your piece Utopia

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UN: tonialoise age: 34

for contest; Love Makes the World Spin 'Round by VioletConcept
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  • leolord5235
    August 9
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    Aw, that was really sweet, but I would've rather had more of the love stuff then the waiting


    • tonialoise
      August 9
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      Thanks for reading and commenting, even if it won't win I'm still happy you liked it.


  • Carina.J.LR
    June 18

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    Aww..this was very cute, and I love your spelling and grammer

    Thanks for entering and goodluck!

    Carina


  • codename
    June 14
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    very sweet and cute

    i love the ending about the guys accent. i thought it was sweet.

    beginning: 1, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, characters: 2.


  • Seachelle
    June 11

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    Omg! I have been in this scenario, big time... I got huge butterflies while I read this, because I remember when Jason came to see me. I felt that anticipation... Big time. I love this story, it really does emcompass EVERYTHING, even the southern drawl and "darlin'"... So cute. Love it! =)

    • tonialoise
      June 11
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      wonderful! I'm glad I was able to capture the moment just right. I'm happy for you guys. Sounds like a very special thing you have.


  • Jason Pulcher
    June 11

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    I can say from personal experience that you nailed the emotion. I started a long distance relationship over Myspace and I had to fly across the entire country to see her. I know exactly how this goes, and this was spot on.


  • Maggie Kay
    June 5

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    Lovve the first to paragraphs. Many young girls and woman can relate to this, about how you dont feel like your pretty and amazed that someone actually takes a second look at you and wants to no more about you.
    Really liked this line. it made me smile and giggle just a bit. "What would I do when I had him in my arms? Faint probably. "
    so much better then depressing pieces. i would rather read this any day. it was a a wonderful write keep it up and good luck
    Kmp


  • VioletConcept
    April 15

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    Alright. It was a pretty good read, I admit. I wish you had made it that much longer, explaining things a little better. Overall, you did explain things pretty well. I could really see this happening in real time, it was a little off... Anyways, you ended it rather good, I liked that.

    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    -Vio


  • ArtistoLeVerse
    March 17

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    I like the play-by-play from the four minutes to zero seconds. I think the story was cute and well written. You are few of many who used great detail.
    Good luck and thanks for entering. =]


  • taylor-swift13
    February 24

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    This was really short and sweet. It is exactly what I am looking for.
    I loved the way you described everything so you felt like you were actually there seeing what was happening.
    Great work!!!


  • Valkyrie silver member
    February 16

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    It's a great play-by-play as the clock counts down. I loved the detailed anticipation you wrote, melded nicely with the backstory, and you summed it all up well at the end. Texas drawl, hmm? Nice! Thanks for entering.


  • Eddie
    January 3
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    Good job! Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • beezy92
    December 24, 2008

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    Aw....a nice ending to an internet romance story. I enjoyed reading this! Short but sweet and not overdone (: Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Kevan gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    This is really cute! Haha, and definitely short and sweet. I really liked how you counted down from four minutes throughout the story. It was effective and a well-written tool.

    Best of luck in the contest.

    xoxox.
    Kevan.


  • georgiaz
    November 15, 2008
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    very sweet
    good luck in the contest!

  • pinkphone12
    November 12, 2008
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    really good story i liked it

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • pinkphone12
    November 12, 2008
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    h


  • Artificial.Smiles. gold member
    October 30, 2008
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    Cute

    This story was so cute! I loved the anticipation of it too! It made me want to read more&more!!!


  • Dawn Bon
    October 29, 2008
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    [imagine me smiling]

    Wo this iis really good! I like the texas accent part, very cool. Good luck in my contest!


  • lavanya
    October 28, 2008

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    great toniwho told you that you can't write short stuff,its reallysweet and cute storygood luck my dear


    • tonialoise
      October 28, 2008
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      Thanks! I'm trying to write more romantic stuff, to learn how to be less "intense"


  • DaniCM
    October 28, 2008
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    awwww!!!!!!!!! very sweet!!!! Thanks for entering! Good luck
    ~Dani


  • beutifullcloud
    October 28, 2008
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    OMG! so cute I cant stop smiling! Dang Im a hopeless romantics! * skees like a little girl* YAY!

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