Exhausted from the busy day, Lizzy walks up to her bedroom. As she opens the door, shes sure a bomb has hit it. Ahwell. Quickly getting undressed she looks for a top that has sleeves. Suddenly, something in the mirror catches her eye "tidy room" A note her mother must have left her, if she doesnt like the state of the room why doesnt she do it? As lizzy rips the note of the mirror she sees something else. Something she didnt want to see. Then it happens.1
Why do you hurt? She screams, as she rocks back and forth on the floor.2
Because you me to hurt you, you want more and more, she replies.3
No i DONT! Lizzy screams, WHY do you taunt me so?4
Because you need me, she replies, you need me to breathe. As Lizzy Cries, the voice comes back, saying the words Lizzy knows too well, shes herd them all before. 5
THEY DONT LOVE YOU LIZZY6
Yes they do7
PROVE IT TO ME THEN, GO ON YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAN.........8
Lizzy knows far too well, as she picks up her knife with sadness. She slices her wrists yet again.9
Slowly but surely, she begins to fade, leaving Lizzy feeling herself again, but leaving her with another scar.....10
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Comments
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wow this was so good hun....youre excellent at writin poems...and now i see youre just as good at writin stories! this was amazing...very sad...but great! the emotion you out into it made it how good it is! well done...i thought the endin was really awsome!
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WHOA!
this was awesome hun. I LOVED how you ended it like:
"Slowly but surely, she begins to fade, leaving Lizzy feeling herself again, but leaving her with another scar....."
this was amazing! keep up the awesome work babe! xoxoxoxoxox
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wow. lovely story. nice and short
lol. You should write more to this. having been a victim of the voices myself, I understand this all too well. Altho i didnt give in quite as easdily. meh never mind. all ppl r different.
brill work hunni.
Write more.
~kenaz~
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