The music begins gently, softly – don’t want to disturb or be disturbed by giving away my presence behind locked doors and drawn curtains. It fills my mind and my heart. I alternate between two versions. My favorite and yours.1
Pachabel’s Cannon.2
It seems like only yesterday – yet also like a lifetime ago. An impulsive decision – one I have never regretted – that takes us far away and back home in one day. An answer to a call for help. A call that I couldn’t have ignored, even if I had wanted to. 3
I still see you standing there, wearing a yellow and green jacket. Was it a look of relief or disbelief, or maybe surprise, that passed briefly over your face as we drove up to you waiting under the canopy of a small supermarket? No time for talking then. Hurry, hurry. You must, you need, to get away as soon as possible. You are driven to get yourself out of the place where you have experienced such darkness. Our first real socializing is over coffee and a sandwich at a roadside stop outside of town. It all still seems very unreal, but at the same time very, very real too. Strangers meeting for the first time, yet not strangers at all. Perhaps a sort of recognition?4
The drive back is filled with ‘getting-to-know-you’ chatter. And some reflective silences. You immediately fit into our little household. You accept us as we are, for what we are and not for what we have or don’t have.5
Months have passed since then. Months of happiness and heartache. Great joy and great turmoil. Making friends and losing friends. Serious times and wacky times. Discussions on love, life and the universe. Silly dances. Times that are more precious than words can tell. Times of loneliness and longing. Times of togetherness. Growth and self-discovery. Tears and confessions. Secret jokes. Sharing music and words. Support and encouragement. Good ideas and bad ones. Plans and schemes. Questions and sometimes answers. A shoulder to cry on. True trust. Silent communication. It just feels so good and so right. As you put it once: it’s two-way traffic.6
Throughout this time, this beautifully haunting melody – sad yet uplifting – is threaded like a ribbon of gold. Each of us holding an end – or perhaps a beginning? Will this golden ribbon become longer, or will it draw us ever closer? And always a pondering, a wondering – of what the future will bring. In the words of a wise and wonderful friend: “stand fast in belief and yield to fate, destiny awaits, go make it great”.7
Thank You. 8
Author notes
This is for option 9 It is something I wrote for my good friend Page, also here on Storywrite - my inspiration and slavedriver :P
A contest entry
- Honesty, Love, Words, and Letters by Tangled Angle.
100 points, ended April 9, 2006, 13 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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oh yeah forget about the thing I said about all of the same backgrounds. Someone entered my contest and had a pretty neat background (the pole star) which is different than all of the ones I have seen.
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LOVED IT!
This was great! I absolutely loved it!
This isn't your official score, but here is your score for now. (After seeing the other entries I go back and see if I should change scores) Anyway-
Creativity: 8.5 Good metaphor with the ribbon and the quote fit in great.
Originality: 8 I have seen letters like this before of course, but the creativity is what made this your own, and original.
Emotion: 8.5 Wasn't sure if you made me feel exactly the way you feel, but you showed a lot of love in this, and since I know how you feel, I can relate, so actually- in a way you made me feel the way you feel. It depends.
Showmanship: 10 There is no other background on this site- everyone is going to get 10 points for this one. lol
Mechanics: 10 This was fluent and easy to read. I am sure there are some mistakes that I missed, but who freaking cares, mechanics mean nothing to me... (only unless you want this published) ANYWAY just dont worry about this category, like I said I score easily on this category.
I have nothing bad to say about this letter. It was full of love. I wish there was more of that on this site.
Good job!
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Katy, thank you so very much for reading and your wonderful comment on this piece. It really is so good to know that others do find enjoyment in the things I write.
I would be honoured for you to use this in your speech... and would appreciate if you let me know more about the speech - what it is all about, why you have to do it, what the subject is, etc, etc, etc. I'm interested to know because, being from South Africa, our schooling systems and subjects differ vastly. If you'd like, you can IM me and I'll give you my e-mail addy for this info. In the meantime, go well, enjoy and have a wonderful day.
Keepb well,
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This was so beautiful and stunning. I couldn't take my eyes off of it! You should bask in the glory of this beautiful story that you have written! A wonderful memory. I would be honored if you would allow me to use it in my forensics speech with the topic Rememberance. If not, that is fine. But such a beautiful story like this one deserves as much recognition as possible. Let me know please.
Keep up the absolutly fantasitic work.
All the best to you and yours,
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Wow this was very breath taking. I enjoyed reading this a lot, you really carried me there right into that scence. Every single word you used was descriptive and just made me think that I was there and it was so real to me. I love it especially because of the reference of music. I liked how everything you went through that person was all said in one paragrpah and short words, that just gave the story and meaning more depth too me. The questioning in the end was excellent and overall you made this story a pleasure to read. The quote in the end was excellent.
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It all began we an "impulsive decision" Two people drawn together by an invisible thread that has materialised into a golden ribbon of things yet to come. As you can probably tell I am quite taken by your unfolding story. Good work!
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You know, I liked this better the second time I read it. Echoing some other comments, it is very emotional and remniscent. There are some people who just move and inspire us and not necessarily by being unordinary, but just by surviving. I love my best friend, just because he loves me the way I am (that being no small task). I like the way this was written with the good, bad, and everything else thrown in together. When I read it to myself, it sounded like life: unordinary and yet amazing in its simplicity.
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Beautiful
This is so peaceful. It takes me away. Makes me think of how lucky i am to have met some of the people i have met. I'm glad i read this poem it's full of happiness. The imagery is a great. Lovey piece you got her. Oh and thank you so much for commenting on my poem. It means a lot to me especially comming from someone with your poetic talents. -
Yes, very strange indeed, and perhaps just as well that we do not always know... because perhaps then we would run before the joy could begin... Thanks so much for reading and commenting on this, I really appreciate it.
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Isn't is amazing how when we meet someone, we actually have NO idea what is a huge impact that person could have on our lives, everyday we meet somebody we could be meeting a new best friend, our future boyfriend, girlfriend, husband, wife, somebody who might save your life or take you for all you have. Anyway it was just a thought that your story made me think of, I really enjoyed it because a few of the lines I have thought of many times myself.
***Strangeangel***
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A very emotional journey into the intimate privacy of someone elses world. Thanks for taking me there and for sharing.
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WOW!!! This is an awesome story!!! It is VERY deep and descriptive!!! I'm not sure what it is about but it is AWESOME!!
Thank you for commenting on my poem
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Great job very deep. Great description keep up the good work.
PS thanks for the comment.
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enjoyed the read
very nicely put together...almost poetic...fingers crossed that gold ribbon will get shorter, pulling you both together...good piece of work
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Stunning, you described the scene very well. I felt like I was there. Great job
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wonderful.
wonderful. I love it. I've tried to write or read something that captures that feeling, but I've never found it before. great job! I'm adding you to my favorites. -
Very deep. Makes one think a bit harder about our everyday life.
Not bad at all.
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Touching
I remember - very emotional, I like it
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