Leo gazed up at the full moon. He was still himself, but he had the hunger.1
The hunger that drove him insane, clouded his mind with a thick red mist. The hunger that made him angry, made him excited.2
Leo stood taller than any man, over 8 foot tall. He had long muscular legs and arms, stronger than over four men put together. He had a contorted face, that was almost wolf-like. His long jutted out jaw could break an elephant's bone with one bite and his pointed out nose could smell up to miles away. 3
His steel blue-grey eyes scanned his surroundings. They could see perfectly under the moon's light. His wolf ears twitched back and forth, listening in the night's silence.4
His body was covered by thick silvery fur, and his long wolf tail swished in anticipation. He clenched his fists; with long sharp claws instead of fingernails, tightly. 5
He sniffed a long breath, picking up a scent. Human. Dropping to all fours, he ran, almost ape-like to his prey. 6
He had been changed almost 5 years ago. Leo had killed countless humans to feed his insatiable hunger. He didn't know how many he had changed, it was hard to survive the change. 7
He crept closer to his unsuspecting victim. It was a young man walking a dog. Leo groaned inwardly at the sight of the dog, although easy to kill, they were a pain to deal with. 8
He shuffled closer, the hunger almost beginning to become too much to bear. He was about to leap when he spotted her. 9
Hidden in the darkness, naked to the human eye, she stood out like a rose in winter. Vampire. 10
A growl reached his throat and he held his breath, thinking of what to do.11
She stood probably only under 6 foot tall, and had long midnight blue hair. Her skin was pale, almost white, but her lips were rose red. Her eyes were calculating, a deep shade of purple. She looked up at him, stared directly into his eyes, and lifting a blood red nail, she put her fingers to her lips, in a 'shush' gesture. Smiling wickedly she sprang to life. She almost flew towards the man. 12
The dog barked viciously, the man screamed. The vampire kicked the dog hard; sending it flying. It hit a tree trunk and dropped into unconsciousness. The man whimpered in fright. She stalked towards him, her fangs gleaming in the moonlight.13
Leo was stunned. Suddenly he regained his composure.14
"Hey! She-demon, that's MY kill!" He leapt towards her, blocking her path to the human. The human screamed louder, and backed against a tree. 15
The vampire looked momentarily shocked, but then smiled in amusement.16
"How very...typical. No matter what species, you men are all the same. The woman does all the work and then the man claims it his own." Her voice was drawn out, and sounded almost snake-like. 17
Leo growled angrily. The hunger was taking over. The vampire raised an eyebrow, realising what was happening.18
"Easy there Fido. You don't want to lose control do you? Do you honestly think that in your raging wolf act you could defeat me?" She said cooly. 19
Meanwhile the man had almost gone into a fit of hysterics, Leo sniffed, disgustedly smelling urine in the air. 20
"What shall we do then mistress of the night?" He asked, regaining his composure. He held the hunger back, pushed it far into the darkness of his mind. 21
The vampire walked towards him and reaching out, stroked his cheek, twidiling the fur between her fingers. 22
"Oh master of the moon, it's a shame our people fight. Together we could rule both the night and day." A cunning smile flickered across her face.23
Leo took her hand away from his face and held it gently. She was cold to touch, and she had no scent, no life. It was peculiar. He had never been this close to a vampire before and now she entranced him. He shook his head and pulled away from her.24
The human had been long gone, the dog as well. He looked back at the vampire.25
"Well I guess we've both lost out on a meal tonight. I'm Leo by the way." His voice rumbled out of his throat deeply.26
Her eyes widened and looking behind him, she saw that the human had gone. She relaxed and looked back up into his blue/grey eyes.27
"Leo...a lion trapped in a wolf's body. How amusing. I'm Deon. Well I must part now, for unlike you I must feed every night otherwise I shall fade away." She stroked his cheek again and then was surrounded in black mist. 28
Leo stood back and watched as out of the darkness leapt a large black panther. It's purple eyes glinted mischievously at him and then it bounded off into the night.29
Leo stood dumbfounded. He had only ever seen bat-vampires before. Could they all transform into panthers? Or was Deon special? Smiling wolfishly to himself he bounded off after the scent of the man.
Author notes
I've not read any of the books you mentioned, but really wanted to give vampire/werewolf writing a go! Hopefully I ticked some boxes!
For Danica's contest... I know this is mainly based from the werewolves point, but I loved the vampire in it, so I added it for ya!!
For amanda-vampiress ... I know you've commented on it already, but Leo twisted my arm into entering!
So far I have added three more chapters to this story, you can get to them via the list link. Please comment...but be gentle with critism! I dont mind it,but I'm sensitive! lol! Hope you all like it at least!!
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Comments
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i thought it was pretty good... an i am a sucker for romance. not to mention i too am writing a story about a vampire falling in love with a werewolf. lol. very good. i like it, and i think i may read more when i am finished with this contest. good job!
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Very interesting...I'll be honest, I think the vampire meets werewolf thing has been done to death, but having said that, this was very well written, and there are a lot of people who like reading it still. Please don't take offence, It's just not my sort of thing, but I can still see that you are a very talented writer.
The use of imagery was very skillfully added, and there was plenty of it! Which can never be a bad thing! The only imagery I had a tiny problem with was this; 'His steel blue/grey eyes'....you should really write it as blue-grey, as that is grammatically correct.
Overall, I thought it was a great piece, and a very interesting read, well done!
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No offence taken at all!! Everyone is entitled to their own opinions and tastes!!
I'll change the eye thing, thanks!!
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hahaha like a forbidden romance. they seemed pissed at each other then they were flirting, interesting.
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The reason for that being, that they were 'sizing' each other up...neither really wanted a fight, as neither had fed...well thats what I tried to get across lol!
Thanks very much for your comment!
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Alarming....
Vampires, panthers, wolf-like creatures.......all very interesting. I liked the way you described the she-devil vampire.......Great=)=) -
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Thank you, I try hard to keep the reader's interest!
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i'm not much for the classic (not really that classic i guess, in my opnion this whole trend started with "underworld" but that's just me.)vampire-werewolf thing. but regardless of the subject matter, your prose is excellent. believe me when i say that it takes a good writer to hold my interest. running with the metaphor, you didn't just hold my attention, you snatched it up then chained and stapled it to a bomb shelter. i was hooked from about the 6th graff, the ape-like part was so different from the traditional "graceful" stuff that i simply had to read on. as for the question of vampires associating with other species, i have to say, that's refreshingly original. i'm shocked no one thought of it earlier (that i know of). it is simple genius. well done indeed, bravo.
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wow thankyou so much *grins ear to ear* really appreciate it!!!
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I enjoyed the interaction between the two. It's a little different take on the vampire/werewolf thing so that's great! And the dialog was fun. A good read!
I did notice a few things that can be looked at grammar wise.
p12 "stared directly into" missed the t in into
p20 "sniffed disgustedly" removing the "in" sounds better.
p25 "the dog as well" a space between as and well.
I'm not exactly sure(as I'm not good with them myself), but many of the sentences seem to be runon. Maybe they are just long and seem like they could be broken down into a couple sentences, for example; "The vampire kicked the dog hard, sending it flying, and hitting a tree trunk, it dropped unconscious."
Overall that doesn't effect the flow of the story so that's very good.
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Thank you!!
I get really carried away when typing, type real fast!!! haha!! I'll go over it and correct those parts! Thanks for the advice!
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hahas, cute authors notes comment! Yes, I really did enjoy this story. So much that I read it again. lol I still think it is unique and had some interesting twists. I had a feeling you were going to bring in the numorously used "vamp-and-werewolf-antagonistic-battle-for-eternity" thing. The vamp surprised me though. lol
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I like it. It isn't the normal vampire stuff that I usually read which makes it something totally new! And, in case you didn't know, I love new. Most of my vampire "beliefs"(I don't actually believe in vampires but you know what I mean) are based off of Stephenie Meyer's Twilight so it is nice to have a new perspective in it. Good job and good luck in my contest!
-Dani
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Thanks! I've heard alot about these Twilight books, I may have to go read them!!
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Yeah write more!! I command you haha
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lol, I'll def try to find time for them! Thanks for the comment!
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This was really good. I really liked how you said made his name Leo, but he's a wolf nice humor XD. I Think I enjoyed the dialouge the most. I also like your idea of Vampire that has to feed every night or it will disappear. That really intruiged me. I love how it's different. Yeah you did tick some boxes. =p I thought it was scary yet cool at the same time at how you described Leo. Scary how strong he is but yeah he's a were-wolf what should I expect. I liked how you were talking about his hunger and the "change". Yeah I wanna know more about that. Again I'm a sucker for ending's. Great ending!!!! I love it. Yeah I loved the vampire as well. Thanks for the addition. Yeah I thought it was really cool how she could change into a panther. For a second I thought she was Shapeshifter. =O I find it interesting how you have them call eachother Mistress of the Night and Master of the Moon. Also how Deon was mentioning how it was a shame vamps and were's didn't work well together. I wonder what happens. Yeah now you have me wondering is Deon special!?!? Wow. Nice job. Really enjoyed this. ^^
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This was great! I enjoyed reading this story. I like your description of leo. And Deon sounds like a pretty interesting vampire, very mysterious! Keep up the great work!
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Thank you !
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Cool. I really liked how his eyes were 'Steel blue'. Thats a neat idea. I enjoyed your story, and I really want to read more! Great job.
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There's a possibility i may continue....i dont usually write about vampires and werewolves, but the characters have got me hooked lol
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