Stroke my cheek
My eyes they close
whisper you love
and i will go
anywhere that you want
anyplace
on anyfront1
Dry my tears
with gentle hands
rush my heart with kisses2
make me shake
with every look
make me wish
with every smile3
you have a strange effect
i can't explain
can't expect
these effects to bring you close
to make you love
my shattered soul4
but when i wake
the dream it's gone
i reach for you
but you disapear
the dream it has shattered5
in school you smile
hug me tight
and when i watn to hold on
you let me go
and walk away
friends are all that we've become
my dreams they speak my wishes
my wish to be near you
but yet i'm lost
and can't be found
until your gone
around a cornter
out of sight
i am profound
and can't fight
to take you to my side6
so friends we stay
my heart it slowly breaks
with every passing day
nothing to do
but sit and wait
and pray
for a dream to come true/
Author notes
this is a poem about somthing that i actually feel and i thought it would fit perfectly with the first picture becuase he doesn't know i love him.
A contest entry
- Picture Prompts *yay* by EZlats.
400 points, ended November 8, 2008, 14 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow..i really like that its pretty good!
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Wow, I can so easily relate to this. Fortunately my love knows who he is.
I love the lines
'Stroke my cheek
My eyes they close
whisper you love
and i will go
anywhere that you want
anyplace
on anyfront'
Because just the thought of his simple touch on my cheek and I am swept away.
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I want you to reread this poem and fix some of the grammar. Usually I don't care about it, but somethings are just butchered in here.
Also, reread it to try and see what sounds good with what. Things might sound good individually, but when you put it all together it doesn't work very well.
And use can not instead of can't -
Very nice...I like this part especially..."whisper you love
and i will go
anywhere that you want
anyplace
on anyfront"
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