there are times when we wish to stop the hands of time and live in a moment forever. i have had these moments before in my life, believe it or not i have. there is one memory that stands out in my mind as one of the best in my life. yes, even dragons have those moments young humans. i would never give up my memory of the girl with orange eyes for my life, for she lives on in me even in death. 1
i was but a young hatchling not much older than the age of 50. my mother had just aloud me to explore as long as i was home before the great night circle came into the sky. i took full advantage of this and went exploring, maping, and drawing out all of the areas i went to. not returning till the night circle just came out. i was out on one of these such journeys, i noticed a new species of animals that walked on two legs start to emerge. i spent many suns observing them. i learned much of there languag, and the way they lived. 2
but there was one of them that i found my self thinking about all of the time. it was a dark navy blue and white eyed two walker. from what i found that this two walker was a girl and her name was Katarah. she was young and filled with life, i knew deap down that i would have to protect her. though my parents never knew at least i hoped they didnt. i kept a close eye on this two walker making sure no harm came, and for many suns and moons i kept watch over her and her people. in some way i felt like i was apart of them though techincaly i was not, though i had the fealing. 3
i was on my way to where her village had settled. my wings scraped across the leaves of the trees as i flew by. the sound was beautifull and filled my ears joyusly. then i saw her, the one i was destined to protect being harsed by another two walker. though this one was very different. he had white skin pailer than snow, his eyes were a deap dark brown and appeard black from where i was.
A contest entry
- Dragons all around!!!!! by Shimmerfairy.
325 points, ended November 13, 2008, 16 entries
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should i continue this or not?
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I'm not going to lecture you are capitalization, mispellings, and errors since you seem to have already gotten it from other's and just are choosing not to change things. I do like this though, even through the errors. I wish you would have posted more though, made the chapter long, or at least posted another chapter. You left everything so open, what does the dragon do? Does he save the girl? How does the villege react to this? So many questions. Write more and I shall read more.
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realy nice, your awsome at this. the view of the dragon you had took me on a journy of a hatchling too. keep up the increadable work ^.^
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this was uberly awesome!! i think you should continue with this, because you leave us hanging, i mean, give some more!! please? lol, nice job!! and good luck with the contest!!
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there are a few spelling errors, but i love your idea, will you continue it??
Thanks for entering!
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Yup!
I agree with Pikachustar! There some misspelled words and capitalization errors but you're fine! I loved the way you used other words...
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I say you should continue!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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You need to capitalize the words on starting a new sentence. Do some proofreading...And when you start with the Introduction, make sure it grabs the readers attention. Other than that keep writing as the great writer you are!
~Ajax~
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that was awesome you got my attention(although not hard to do) and you kept it, so Awesome Job!
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