I gazed out at the sea, watching the waves crash against the rocks on the shore, spraying sea water into the air. The moon cast it’s brilliant light upon the black inky waters. Every time I looked at the sea I was reminded of him. His name was Dylan, and he was my best friend and my true love. 1
I had met him on a night similar to this. I had been walking down the beach, along the line where the water meets the sand before it runs back into the sea. I loved the feeling of the wet sand between the toes of my bare feet. I continued to walk across the shore, until I came to a small pale pink shell partially buried in the sand.2
I picked up the shell, dusted off the small grains of sand, and examined it closely. I stared at it in wonder. It was perfectly shaped, and it amazed me that it had not been destroyed by the waves when it had come in with the tide. 3
“Do you like it?” a voice from behind me asked.4
Startled, I turned around to see a male figure perched upon a near by rock. All I could see was the top of his bare chest. 5
“Yes, where did you find it?” I asked in curiosity.6
“At the bottom of the sea, of course. Where else would I find one that perfect?”7
“But how were you able to retrieve it from down there?” I asked with confusion sounding in my voice.8
“It is easy when you have one of these,” He stated calmly, flipping his tail over from behind the rock. At the moment I lost all of my sanity. Sure I had heard legends of mermaids when I was younger, but I never would have dreamed that they would be true. “I’m Dylan, by the way.” With that he jumped form the rock into the water, and swam to the edge of my feet.9
I knelt down on my knees, and shook his hand. “My name is Marie, and it is a pleasure to meet you.” I figured if I was going to lose my mind, why not have some fun with it. “So you’re a mermaid?”10
“Uh, merman. I’m not a girl.”11
I laughed. And from that night on I would visit Dylan every night.12
Every night was a new adventure. Sometimes he would bring me treasures from the sea floor, everything from more shells, to starfish, to sea sponges. But my favorite was a small gold locket that he brought me from a shipwreck. And I still wear it to this day. Some nights we would merely sit on the shore and talk. Other times, we would journey down the shore. And occasionally he would take me into the water and we would swim throw the sea. 13
I slowly found my self falling in love with him. And to my great joy, he felt the same way. Even promising to find a way for us to be together. 14
We remain happily in love and visiting with each other every night until one fateful day. His father, a king, needed him to leave to another sea, and fight some battle with a rival mere kingdom. 15
The last night I saw him, he held my hand, and asked me to wait for him. I promised, saying I could never possibly ever love another. He slid a light pink coral ring on my ring finger. Kissed my lips, and uttered the words, “I love you Marie.” And with that he was gone. 16
That had been over fifty years ago, to the day. My hair had grown gray. My skin had lost it’s youthful luster. And my once emerald eyes now where an aged green. But that ring still remained on my finger, and I still stood at this balcony every night waiting for my beloved Dylan to return into my arms again.
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kool
kool story =) , slightly sad but light and wonderful . byyyyyyyyyye k
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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This so utterly adorable. I loved it! I know I just started this contest, but, Congrats! You are one out of three finalists!~
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Aww... that's sad. Very emotional. Brilliant, though you may want to edit it, for I think that on '... and we would throw the sea...' didn't you mean 'through' instead of throw? Either than that, I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes, but still, read it over. And it's difficult to read without spaces in between the paragraphs. But this was very touching and WHY THE FREAK ISN'T HE COMING BACK? That's so sad!
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Sad and unique and romantic really good
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That's a sad yet sweet story.
I had to go back and reread the second paragraph though to realise your character was actually reminiscing.
Also, if the shell was buried in the sand, how would Marie know Dylan was the one who found it or why would Dylan leave it buried in the sand?
Otherwise it was a good story. I liked the bit in the middle where she asks him if he's a mermaid and he says he's not a girl. That was funny.
Thanks for entering this in my contest. Overall it was a good write. -
Aw that was a sad ending, but also very sweet. I liked the way is was short but you still managed to flesh out a very good story. Well done and thanks for entering,
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so sad!
room for improvement,butnot much
i really liked this, short and simple but effective 
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it was a pretty good story. Poor dylan left. lol. thanks for entering the contest.
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Pretty
This is good. I liked the storyline, could've done with some more description. I liked the toes in the sand bit.
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