"Cal!" My love, Micheal, screams into the night air. He runs after me into the forest. The scent of pine needles and the Earthy scent blow on me with the wind. I splash in a puddle of rain and I hear that Micheal is close behind me. Curse him being faster than me.
"Go away!" I yell at him.1
"Don't do this Cal! Please, I love you!" He yells back. Tears start streaming down my face and I stop. I turn around and see that he stopped also. Why can't he just leave me alone? 2
"I have to! Nobody loves me except for you! I'm such a mistake...You don't deserve me..." I say quietly as I look directly in his eyes.3
"No, you're not. I love you, and I DO deserve you, Cal. And a lot of people love you. Aculem loves you, you're parents lo-" I cut him off.4
"My parents do not love me-"5
"Yes, they-"6
"THEY BEAT ME, MICHEAL!" I yell. He steps back and his eyes widen.7
"Cal..."8
"Just shut up! You know those bruises that are on my arm everyday? Yeah, that's from them. And...just leave me alone." I turn back around and walk instead of run this time. I feel Micheal's gaze following me as I get closer to my certain spot. Micheal just stands there, shocked by what I told him. 9
I start to run again, and soon, I'm at my spot. I spy the rope that hangs above the pond from a tree branch that I built a few days ago and climb onto the rock below it. Tears fall down my face harder and my neck finds its way through the noose that I made.10
I suddenly hear footsteps running towards me, and I know it's Micheal. I quickly kick the rock away and I hang there. I can't breath. I look over as I hear a gasp and there's Micheal, just standing there, eyes wide. I close my eyes and more tears fall from my eyes.11
"Calida!" He yells as he runs over. Suddenly, I hear a crack and I look up. The branch is breaking and I look at Micheal. He's so far away. Then, the branch breaks and I fall into the water where I don't struggle. I close my eyes and hear a splash but fall unconscious.12
~*~13
I wake up the smell of a hospital and hear voices surround me.14
"Is she all right?" I hear a familiar voice say. My mother's. Like she cares.15
"She's awake! She's awake!" I hear my father yell in fake joy.16
My eyes slowly open and I look around. I see my parents around me and a nurse.17
"W...where's Micheal?" I whisper, afraid of the answer. My parents look at eachother, then the nurse, then to me again.18
"We're sorry hunny.." They need to go no further. My eyes widen and beging to overfill with tears. Micheal can't swim.19
"Get away from me!" I yell at my parents. 20
"But hunny.." My mother says as she tries to stroke my arm. I move away from her.21
'Get away! I hate you guys! This is all your fault! Quit trying to act like the perfect parents! You aren't! You're nasty, ugly, shit heads!" I yell at them. I look at the nurse. "They beat me." I whisper as more tears fall out. The nurses eyes widen.22
"I-is this true?" She asks.23
<"No, of course not!" My father says as his eyes widen.2425
"Then how do you explain this?!?" I yell as I show them my ugly bruises. The nurse believes me as my parents' eyes widen. The nurse calls somebody in and they take my parents away as they deny everything.26
"So...Micheal..he didn't make it..did he?"I ask the nurse sadly. 27
"I'm so sorry..He drowned." She looks down.28
At first, tears silently fall down my face as my body shakes in pain. Then, I scream his name over and over again as the doctor tries to calm me down. The tears glide down my face as the nurse tries to comfort me but it doesn't work. I can't stop crying or screaming his name; so much that a doctor came in and put me down.29
~*~30
I'm going home today. Finally, I need to be away from that place. It just makes me more depressed. And sadly, it's Micheal's funeral.31
When we get home I walk up to my room as Aculem is already dressed and waits downstairs. I undress slowly and slip into a black dress. The sleeves were long and loose at the end. It went down to my knees and the neck kind of went down. I put on a real black pearl necklace. I put on fishnet gloves, did my hair, and put on make up. I put on high heels-a rare occasion- and slip into a sweater and walk out the front door.32
At the funeral I start to cry and I can't hold it in, letting my eyeliner and mascara run down my face. After the morbid funeral, I take off my high heels, run into the forest, and stop at the place where Micheal saved me. I have no idea that Aculem is close behind and I jump into the water, and again don't fight it. 33
'Now nobody can stop me.' I think to myself as my eyes close. I hear splashing. But I fall unconscious and never wake up. But suddenly, I feel a bright light surrounding me and my eyes flutter open. I'm falling.34
I look down, so close to the ground. But then, I fall into comforting arms. Micheal's.35
"I want to spend forever in your arms."
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Comments
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Sad
i cant help but wonder who Aculem is..
this was a good story but I wish she didn't commit suicide. -
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Aulem is her bestfriend.
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its really good!!


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sad story(in a good way!)

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This sent shivers up my spine! But I'm feeling something so we already know you've done a good thing. I'm kind of tough to move. As I read this piece, I found that I was completely immersed. I wasn't aware of anything else. You did a wonderful job with characterization and emotion as well as realism (and perhaps the right amount of exaggeration
). Excellent work.
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wow. that was really good. You should work a bit on the flow at parts, but other than that it was really good. I loved the plot. Good work, and good luck in my contest.
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at line 4, it says I have too! but it should be i have to... so just fix that
but that was completly amazing... really
i love how she gets to be with him in the end..
maybe you should make it a little more flowing though.. like
in the hospital scene, it was a little cut off, you should say a little more, and have it flow into the next part though..
but i like the detail and the way you wrote it
really good
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Yeah, sorry about that. This was just a quickie.
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oh my Gosh...Anna, This was so sad, im crying right now....Great Job
and Good Luck in my Contest...
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