Lucy's P.O.V.:1
It started off just like any other Monday morning, only today things were different. As I reached down to pick up my fifty- pound school bag off the hallway's brown and gold tile floor, I noticed something strange sticking out of it. Something red and shiny...upon closer examination I realized that it was one of my little brother's toy cars. He is always leaving stuff in my school bag! Just as I was reaching for it, I noticed something else, something much more disturbing, heading my way...Shannon Garner, the most popular girl in Butterfiel High School ( as well as my most loathesome rival since first grade ), walking hand in hand with Alex Robertson-- only my ex- boyfriend since last Thursday!!! Anger instantly began to swell up from inside me. Like a boiling, red hot tea kettle, ready to explode at any given moment. I couldn't decided who I was more angry with- Him, when he knows the history and bad blood between us. Or her. Staring furiously into her piercing blue eyes, I acted impulsively. Using all of my strength and concentration I casually slid my little brother's toy car across the floor in her direction. My aim was perfect! Just as she was about to flash me one of her infamous serpent- like smiles, her and the moving vehicle collided! As she collapsed onto the floor, her legs swinging over her shoulders, everyone turned to look at her. Even the members of her " fan club " couldn't help but laugh hysterically as she struggled to get up and then slapped Alex across the face before strutting to the nurses office. What a glorious day it became for me!2
Shannon's P.O.V.:3
It was a bright and beautiful Monday morning... The fragrant flowers bloomed, the spring birds sang- all for me! Like the queen of the school I am, I walked in regality. Most of the other, more insignificant students, lowered their heads in respect as I walked by. Some even covered their faces and looked away, thus realizing that they were totally unworthy of looking upon me. Others, however, just stood gaping at me. They were noticing how beautiful I looked in my new lime green outfit that I purchased at Forever 21 on Saturday . I even got matching high heels and a purse to go with it. I looked perfect! But then again, I always do, don't I? Suddenly, I remembered my purpose. To get back at Lucy for not allowing me to copy her algebra test. I had to teach her a lesson. Show her that I AM superior to her. And the best way to do that was to make her think that I was with Alex- that dork that she is so in love with. So I walked proudly, holding hands with Alex until she finally noticed us. She looked so mad, it was wonderful! Our eyes met, and she just stared at me. It started to give me the creeps. I tried not show it by smiling at her when suddenly I slipped on something! Before I knew it, I was on the floor and everyone was laughing at me- like I was some kind of fool! And dopey Alex- the one who had let me fall in the first place- just stood there looking at me! When I FINALLY managed to get up I gave him a good slap in the face! Then I helplessly limped to the nurses office to be sure none of my delicate bones were broken.4
Alex's P.O.V.:5
So, it was the beginning of another school day. Was it Monday or Wednesday? I don't really know. Shannon was waiting for me in front of the school when I got there. I could see her three blocks away in that loud, green outfit she was wearing. At first I thought the school was planning a Christmas in May party, you know? She shouldn't dress like that, it's not normal. When I got to school she began acting all goofy and begged me to walk her to her locker. She's the most popular girl in school, so I couldn't really refuse her. I kinda wish I had've though, 'cause she stunk! Chocolate Bubblegum Ice Cream perfume? I think that's what she called it. But no one else liked it because they all held their noses when we walked by. I was looking around for Jason so we could talk about the new Spongebob movie when she fell. She just slipped out of my hands and next thing I knew she was on the floor...This blob of booger green! I took a step back so she could get up, and when she did she slapped me. I don't why because I didn't push her on the floor! Then she left and I headed on to my locker.6
Author notes
This short-short story is told from the point of view of three different characters.
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wow this is really great. I like this story and the way all three of them have their moment in the spotlight so to speak. so in closing this gets two thumbs up, three happy faces, and a 5 out of 5. thanks for the read and keep on writing.


beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Thank-you for your comments. They are very much appreciated.
This isn't a true story, I actually made it up for a creative writing course that I took in college last year. Thank-you for asking, though!
Take care!
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wow... this was prety good was it based on true story or was it made up?? you have a wonderful way of getting into the thoughts and feelings of your characters and i think you're a great writer. thanx for the criticism on my piece it was very much appreciated!!
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Kim

