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The mysterious noise3
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w.Peter Sanci Oct. 2o / 20085
Well as Halloween rapidly approaches we like to get into a spooky mood.
So I thought up a cool little story,
I call “ the mysterious noise ! ”
It was a dark and stormy night .
The wind was howling all around the old house on the hill.
Little billy smith and his long time companion , sammy sales, were a long way from home so they decided to stop at this old abandoned farm house .
They no sooner got themselves settled in, that they heard this long low moan,
It was so loud that it shattered the glasses in the case by the table.6
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They promptly got up and made a tour of the entire property.
They turned up no thing, it was suddenly very very quiet.
“ Man what was that ? ”Billy said to sammy who was still shaking.
“ I haven’t a clue, billy, ” sammy replied.
“ I ‘m scared ! ” sammy confided to his liflong pal billy.`
`` Me too ! `` Sammy replied back.
As they tried to go to sleep it happened again.
A loud low humming sound. Well this time they were up and couldn`t get back to sleep. 8
`` Well were up we might as well play a game on the computer eh ! ``
No sooner ad sammy said that the loud noise happened again.
``That does it ! `` sammy said .
I`m going to get to the bottom of this if it`s the last thing I ever do,``9
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so off the two lifelong friends trodded, in search of this mysterious noise.
They hadn’t gone very far when sammy noticed a banged up old owl stuck in tree branch !
That was the answer to their mysterious noise |!
They both turned to each other and laughed all the way home.
The end.
A contest entry
- OKG's Halloween Special: A Sanguineous October by Oblivion Kitty God.
550 points, ended October 31, 2008, 7 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This story is interesting, but the dialogue seems unnatural. And the punctuation is slightly broken, but I can still understand it.
As for being bloody, it isn't. It's not dark, in fact, and not really scary. It is a good story, it just doesn't quite fit the requirements of the contest.
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Haha, that was cute. I liked it. There were a couple typos here and there, but other than that I liked it. Very nicely done. It made me smile.
Keep up the writing. God Bless!
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Mel the V+Believer !
Why thanks so much for you're kind words about my poem. I was suppossed to make several really scarey stories, but I just don't have it in me ! I like happy endngs. I am so glad that you enjoyed my little atory.
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AnotherGood One !


