“My children, you've probably heard the story of Little Red Riding Hood,” began the papa wolf. 1
“Tell us, Papa, tell us!”2
“That story is silly! Silly! Puh! Puh!” spat papa wolf.3
His pups gathered around him, listening attentively.4
“Well,” papa wolf continued. "One day this young girl wanted to visit her grandmother. Realizing that her mother would not let her go alone into the forest to her grandmother's, she secretly gathered a basket of food and headed out the door of her house and into the woods, thinking she'd find her grandmother's house on her own. She was wearing a red cape and hood, hence the nickname Little Red Riding Hood.5
“In no time the silly little creature was lost and crying all alone in the forest.6
“Normally, as you know, wolves don't eat humans, in fact; humans are far more likely to hurt wolves than we wolves are likely to hurt humans. However, this young girl looked so fresh, tender, and was so available that I let my hunger get the best of me. Of course, I, just being one of a pack of wolves that were hunting that day, decided that I should share my incredible find with the rest.”7
“What did you do?” asked one of his pups.8
“I walked up to her and asked her if I could help. She didn't seem to have any fear of me, in fact; she was relieved that I had come along.9
“'I'm going to grandma's house,' she said. 'But I'm lost.'10
“'I think I know the way,' I told her.11
“Such a simple innocent she was. My tongue was practically hanging out with hunger as I salivated thinking about how she might taste. Having never eaten a human, I didn't really know how they tasted, but she looked good.12
“'Oh, please show me,' she begged.13
“I led her deeper and deeper into the woods toward where the other wolves of the pack would be. Naively she followed willingly behind me. Soon Red and I came to the area where the pack gathered, gnawing at a freshly killed deer.14
“'Look what I've brought for desert,' I said to my fellows.15
“'Do you think it is wise?' asked one of the pack. 'They might hunt us down if we eat her.' We were speaking in wolf and the girl didn't understand she was being considered as a meal. At least, she didn't seem to realize it.16
“'Look, clearly it will be seen that she came to us, a case of misfortune.'17
“'I guess,' said my brother wolf.18
“'Come here, my child,' I said to Red and she did as I requested. When she was in easy striking range, I quickly bit deeply into her neck, viciously tearing her jugular, and dropping her to the ground. Bright red blood, almost matching her cape spurted out and onto it. Terror filled her eyes and she gurgled as she struggled to scream, breathe, and to free herself. Soon she ceased her struggle. 19
“We chewed the meat from her bones and left her carcass and clothing behind. Some time later her remains were found.”20
“How'd she taste?” asked one of his pups.21
“She tasted good, but not as good as deer or rabbit.”22
“What about the grandma?” asked a pup.23
“Well, honestly, I don't know. I didn't eat her.” The wolf paused, “Anyway, that's the true story of Little Red Riding Hood. She never made it to her grandma's.”
Author notes
Batuins Rock
Horror/Humor
In a list
A contest entry
- Antagonist by Thorn-on-the-Rose.
100 points, ended November 9, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Twisted story by Dawn Bon.
255 points, ended November 19, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - love storys are for wimps ha ha ha (not really but) by Silver Dancer.
100 points, ended December 1, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - For the Wolf Lovers by Celestial Rose.
600 points, ended December 22, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Choices, Choices by Violette.
375 points, ended June 6, 22 entries
Honorable mention
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130 points, ended August 18, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Points of view or What if? by Melancholic Smile.
350 points, ended August 15, 13 entries
Honorable mention
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175 points, ended October 6, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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This was really good and very interesting. Thanks for entering and best of luck!
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Hi there!
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I'm glad you like this true account of Red Ridinghood. It's important to try to dispel all those false rumors.
Andy
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This! is good. It reminds me so much of what I did last year. When halloween came around I wanted to be Little BLACK riding hood. Yes, it was a retelling of little red riding hood. Actually how the wolf was a werewolf and in love with little black riding hood and how he killed her and her blood re-stained her hood red. It was not a happy ending to say the least in fact it was quite grusome. This is awesome though. Great work, indeed!
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Hi FH!
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm very pleased you like this story so much. So you felt the wolf should get the girl, too?
May you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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I really like how it's told from the wolf's perspective, great story. It's creative and was interesting to read.
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Howdy Slyly!
I'm very pleased you like the true account of Red Ridinghood from the Wolf's own mouth. I never liked that false story about Little Red that people have so viciously spread, ruining the good character of the Wolf.
Thanks for hosting and all the applause.
Andy
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Ummmm....i kind of wanted something origional. I know this is a totally different version than I have ever seen, and it's good and everything, but I didn't want anything like a parody. I said that in the rules. Thanks for entering though! It was very entertaining and a good read.
-Ellie (Rae)
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Hi Ellie!
I didn't think of this as a parody, but more of a reverse fairy tale. I'm glad you found it to be a good read.
Thanks for hosting.
Andy
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I really enjoyed this take on the classic story! Especially the ending where she didn't really taste so good after all! You wrote it very well, kept me intrigued from beginning to end. I do enjoy reading new versions of classics
It was twisted with a slight amount of humour still thrown in, especially the final line. I thought you had just the right amount of gore in the descriptions of them eating her, not too much. I also liked the way the wolves seemed to be able to talk in both human (wolf to red riding hood) and also in wolf when talking to each other so she couldn't understand. This was a really enjoyable read, thanks for entering!
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Hi there!
I'm very pleased you like this take on Little Red Ridinghood. I enjoy the traditional tales with just a little bit more reality.
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause.
Andy
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What a creative twist to the original tale! Leading the child to the pack of wolves, and then making fun of her afterward by saying she didn't taste as good as deer or rabbit! I'd imagine that this is what really happened, and not that she ever went to her grandma's. I'm not even sure I remember the original ;]
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Hi Siby!
Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm very glad you like this true account of the demise of Little Red Riding Hood
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I think there are several versions of the original story. In the one I know, a woodsman comes to the rescue and the wolf coughs up the grandmother and runs away.
Andy
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I think I read that one :]
But I think the woodsman comes, kills the wolf, and cuts out the grandmother. Or something o.o Because a happily ever after includes the demise of the antagonist
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FABULOUS!! This is great!
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Hi!
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading. I'm pleased you like this story. May you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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Very clever, and an enjoyable read. Thanks for entering!
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Hi*happy*
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. May you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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Lol, very clever. It seems I have yet another story to add to my finalists today. Such an imaginative twist on the tale, it was good to hear it from an alternate perspective.
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Yeah!
You've probably heard that in many legends and myths there is some basis in fact. Well, I want you to know that in case of the story of Little Red Riding Hood, that there is hardly any basis in fact at all
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This is the true account of what happened from the wolf's mouth, himself, and who would know better? You be certain to straighten out anybody you bump into that believes that other ridiculous tale.
Thanks very much for the honorable mention.
Andy
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very interesting
i liked your story-a lot. But i think it is a little darker than what i was looking for. Very cleverly written. Good job -
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Hi! Gezza!
Thanks very much for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like this story.
I hope you had many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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that was excellent. i like how you started off. i liked it better then the originally versions. it was good because it was told from the wolfs perspective. i get sick and tired of
reading so many copies of red riding hood from her point of view. anyway that was brilliant and captured my attention through out the whole thing. well done
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Hi!
Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I'm very pleased you like this version of Little Red Riding Hood.
So you didn't mind that Little Red got eaten?
Andy
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I never liked the story of the Little Red Riding Hood, specially not the end of it... this version is more my style... letting the wolf come out as the hero.
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Hi!
How are you?
I'm glad you like this version of Little Red Riding Hood. You'll notice that in my author's picture, the wolf has her in his clutches. I'm glad you found this version of the tale more entertaining.
Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause.
Andy
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very well written, i love that the wolf ended up winning for once.
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like this story.
May you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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....That was a little disturbing. Though I did see some humer in it, it still is disturbing. But never mind. Great idea, though I agree with Claudia, it could have been longer.
Fall
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.
I felt it was only just that the wolf should come out on top, once in a while. Don't you think so?
Andy
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It disturbed me, but that's a good thing
I am amused. Very humerous. It reads like Papa Wolfie is one of those slimy, mafia-type wiseguys who normalizes brutality; pups beware, it might be hereditary. Very good, not overdone. I wish it were longer....
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Thanks Claudia
It was meant to be a humorous take on the old story. You didn't like papa wolf? But he's so sweet! Sorry it wasn't longer. The original story is pretty short, too.
Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it.
Andy
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Ha that was awesome! I really loved it! You'd expect Red to somehow get away but she gets eaten instead. Very good view point from the wolf. I liked that. And I like that the wolf was storytelling to his pups. It doesn't necessarily make one view the wolf as the "big bad" wolf. This was written well and the structure was great! Thanks for entering.
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Thank You!
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it.
Yep, big old lovable papa wolf, he's such a sweetie. I'm glad you like this story.
May you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy,
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i rely loved this story and the picture but at firs i thought that the wolf would help her or something that is what i thought when i saw the picture so other that that i adored it (sorry i can only give out 1 applauds because i am trying to save points
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it. I especially appreciate you applauding when you are tight for points.
The picture does look a little like the wolves are taking care of her, but in the story, they do a little more than that.
May you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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Wow very creative and nice picture. great imagination. Thank for enetring!
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I'm glad you like my story.
I hope you had many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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Hehe... I have mixed feelings about this one. From my contest point of view I guess I'm looking for something more realistic. And yet in a way you have that. I mean it's fairly realistic to see that's what would have happened to Red. If it weren't for the whole thing of the wolf talking to her in a language she understood, it'd be perfect.
I'm not saying you should change your story, from a fairy tale point of view I loved it.
p3 "spat the wolf" I can tell it's one of the kids talking but the tag suggests the dad because you use that in the next paragraph. Might want to make it more clear.
So thanks for entering and good luck!
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Thank You
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it. Except for a sci-fi werewolf/vampire story I didn't have another story from an animal's point of view prewritten. This story seemed like it might fit the contest.
Actually, I had meant for it to be papa wolf who said, “That story is silly! Silly! Puh! Puh!”, but after thinking about it, I feel the line might better suit one of the pups. So, I'm going to change it.
I'm glad you like the story.
Andy
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Ah... I see... I took "Puh! Puh!" as the pups way of saying papa
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Oh well,
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Your change works! Nicely done.
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I'm glad you changed it! I'm sick of the little girl making it seem as if the wolf was horrible... even though he ate her. Oh wells! I loved it! Great read and excellent work!
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Thank You!
Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like that the wolf ate Red Riding Hood. I thought it was about time she get ate.
Andy
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I love it. Totally gruesome, just my thing! It was so well written, and the characters were well-developed for such a short story. I loved the descriptions(spelling??) you are a Finalist!! great job, loved it =DD
-Dani
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Thanks Dani
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it. I'm also happy you like this story and that I'm a finalist. I'm glad you like the descriptions. I hope it's not too short.
May you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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this is so cute. i love the papa wolf lol. great job, this story is actually a lot better than the real one, hehe
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I'm glad you like the true account of Little Red Riding Hood.
I hope you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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Heehee
This was a funny, new angle! I always sympathized with the wolf when my mom read it to me as a kid, and strangely enough your story doesn't change that.
I like the way the wolf just don't seem to care at all. He's hungry, so he eats. A real wolf at last, and he didn't even had to dress up in a nightgown!
The only thing i noticed (and this might be me just being weird) was that sometimes you used the same words a bit too often.. um, hard to explain.. Like, if you write two reasonably short sentences that both contains the word 'grandma', or 'wolf', it just feels wrong? Or am I wrong?
Anyhow, great story! And have a lovely day^^
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Thank You
Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like this story.
I'll have a look at the story and see if I can fix some of the repetitive wording.
Andy
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Ha Ha Ha! I didn't eat her grandma, but the truth is she never made it to grandma's! So predictable, yet so funny! And he said it so casually. I also liked the humans are more harmful to wolves angle. Yet poor little Red was gobbled up!
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Thanks Xm
Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like this story and that you found it humorous. Don't you think it is about time Red got eaten?
Andy
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nOW I LIKE THIS STORY A LOT, AND THE WAY YOU CHANGED IT TO THE WOLVES POINT. dON'T KNOW ABOUT LITTLE KIDS HEARING THIS. SSHHHH! anyway, it was just brilliant. Reminds me of a tale i heard on a movie years ago about hansel and gretel. It was changed in the movie and it was so funny. Sorry about the different types. My fingers are doing there own thing today, so you will have to be patient with them. Great job and would like to hear more of your fairy tales.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Hi Condor
I haven't really tried my hand at many fairy tales. I'm very pleased that you like this one.
What happened to Hanzel and Gretel in the movie? Did they get et?
Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it.
Andy
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