The Basement Dragon

Reece trudged down the dark narrow staircase with a loaded laundry basket on her hip. Blonde bangs hung in her eyes as she glanced up at the light hanging from the ceiling.1

“Broken again. Looks like someone busted it,” she said with a sigh. “That’s the third time this month. Mr. Bradshaw isn’t going to be happy.” She shook her head feeling her blonde locks trail across her neck with the motion.2

Downward she went, picking her steps carefully. When she hit level floor she stumbled, expecting it to farther down. Reece caught herself on the rough concrete wall, taking a strip of skin from her elbow.3

“Damn it!” she hissed.4

Nursing her arm against her side, she fumbled with the basket and the light switch. A sudden stream of light dazed her and she lifted her free hand to shield her eyes against the temporary blindness.5

“Well thank God that still works.” 6

Stark, gray walls greeted her as her eyes adjusted and she scanned the room. On the opposite wall stood the battered avocado green washers and dryers, four total. The floor was of packed dirt, moist in places where water dripped from the leaky pipes that ran the length of the room.7

Boxes were stacked in the corner closest to the door. A ski, stripped of its boot gear, stuck in the air beside them. One side held an old inner tube and a bike without its wheels and chain.8

“Well, no time like the present,” Reece mumbled as she dragged herself to a washing machine. She set the white basket on top of one the dryers and slid out the soap. The light scent of lavender and vanilla reached her nose as she opened the bulky bottle. She closed her eyes and smiled at the lovely scent. She liked the way the soap left subtle hints of smell on her clothing.9

Loading the washer she noticed the faint smell hinting of freshly turned dirt, almost moldy. It smelled like someone had just dug in a recently watered garden with traces of decaying vegetation. She sniffed a shirt or two and was satisfied it wasn’t her clothes. The smell was disturbing and she shivered as though a cold breeze had rushed down the steps to incase her. Reece rubbed her arms to warm them. 10

She went to close the dented lid and feed the quarters into the machine when her injured elbow smacked into the half-filled basket, sending its contents spilling onto the dirty floor.11

“Damn it!” She breathed through gritted teeth as she cradled her elbow against her side and squatted down to refill the overturned basket.12

She groaned as she saw the last article of clothing half hidden behind the dryer wall.13

She squished her right shoulder between the wall and the dryer’s side and grabbed the shorts. As she pulled away she noticed something shining in the light of the bulb. She hadn’t seen it before because the pants and the shadow of the dryer were on top of it.14

Intrigued, she scooted herself as far as she could between the wall and the dryer, again feeling the coolness of the metal against her cheek and the rough texture of the cement wall against her back. She stretched her arms out but, her fingers barely skimmed the edge.15

“Damn it!” Reece got up, frustrated, and dusted her worn jeans off. She had left behind light stands of her hair attached to the rough wall. A throbbing pain started where the fine hairs had been. With hands on her hips, she stood staring at the washer.16

As she stood worrying the problem and chewed on a fingernail, a soft humming started in her head. No words came to her mind only a subtle melody and a slow steady beat. Like the sound of an engine a mile away or a kitten purring on her lap with a contented sighs.17

Excited, she grabbed the dryer and started to drag it out. Slowly she wiggled it back and forth, wiggling it, kicking it in frustration, and little by little it worked its way out. As Reece was fighting with the dryer, the humming grew louder and she pushed herself harder. Sweat dripped as she struggled, straining to pull out the battered machine. Half cocked, the dryer stood out from the corner and Reece sat on the top panting from all the exertion. The cold of the room had given her goose bumps. 18

Reece sat with hands clamped over the metal shelf that held the controls. Half buried and tucked in the corner sat a white egg the size of a border collie. It gleamed with a soft blue glow and a scattering of spots dotted the white surface.19

Peering down, she watched as the egg pulsed and began to rock. It picked up momentum, only to lurch out of the hole and roll to the back of the dryer.20

“Oh my word,” Reece whispered into the darkness.21

Without thinking, she dumped out the rest of the laundry, leaving only a thin layer of clothing on the bottom. She carefully rolled the egg across the floor. The surface was warm, like a comfortable blanket on a chilly evening. When she looked closely she saw that the spots were raised stars, metallic green and blue in color. She loaded the egg carefully and padded it with extra laundry. 22

Remembering the load that was already in the washer, she hurriedly popped in the quarters and listened for the water to start.23

* * *24

The basket sat in the middle of her one-room apartment. Around her an overstuffed floral recliner, she’d found at a second-hand shop, loomed to the left. In front of the room’s only bay window sat a similarly styled and patterned couch, a little worn around the edges and thin on the arms. Dust balls settled in the corner of the bay windowsills. The middle pane cracked and in need of washing. The white walls were bare of pictures or photos. The end table and coffee table were littered with newspapers and magazines but not other adornment.25

“Guess we better keep you warm. But how?” Reece sat cross-legged with her back to the counter of the bar and chewed on her fingernails while she studied her prize. She took her thumb out of her mouth and spat the nail onto the floor. Her thumb went back into her mouth as she thought the problem through. Reece watched as the egg pulsed slowly.26

“If I turn up the thermostat, I could keep the room warm and set the egg near the heater vent.”27

Shaking her head she stood up to pace the length of the room. “No, that will never do. It’ll roast if I keep it up that high. No, no, no.”28

Into the kitchen she went. The egg-yolk yellow walls always made her smile, but today she was too distracted. She bent down and started shoving pots and pans around until finally she found a large Dutch oven. Its dull gray metal gleamed from washing. Holding it up, she tried to judge if it was big enough.29

She eyed the oven. It was the same avocado green as the washers and dryers in the basement. Only three burners functioned and the fan has never worked since she’d moved in.30

Taking the large pan into the living room, she set it before the egg. As she pushed the pan closer the humming grew louder, more frantic.31

When she pulled it away the humming slowed and returned to normal. “Hmmm…now isn’t that interesting? You don’t like my idea of keeping you warm in the oven? Well, it doesn’t look like you’ll fit anyways. Ok, new plan.”32

Again she paced. Her index finger automatically went into her mouth. This had been a habit of hers for so many years that she never thought about it anymore. The girls down at the office where she worked all had manicured nails and often they laughed at her. But she just went about her work pulling out requests or filing the endless documents that the big wigs sent down. 33

She made her way into the bedroom. Its cream-colored walls and brown carpet dominated the small room. The twin bed was pushed up under the window, its covers a jumble of blues and whites bunched at the bottom. Clothes covered most of the available floor space. Near the door to the bathroom stood a tall dresser made of cherry. Its dark wood glistened with many layers of polish. It stood spotless. No clothes or dust lay upon it. The dresser was all she had of her mother.34

But she passed it without a glance and went into the bathroom. There sat the egg’s salvation, a claw-footed, white porcelain tub.35

The hum had changed to a sweet, soothing melody. “Oh, I see you like this idea. Ok, then,” she called out the door, “how to keep you above the water?” 36

She walked back to the living room and sat in front of the egg again. “Ok, darling.” She ran her hands over the surface, feeling the raised stars. “What will hold you up?”37

Her hand touched the clothes stuffed around the egg and an idea popped into her head. Quickly, she ran through her cluttered living room and down to the dark and damp basement.38

* * *39

Above the steady noise of the blow-dryer, Reece said, “This is just taking way too long.”40

She turned it off and stomped out of the living room. The egg was cool to the touch. “Now that’s not good.”41

Reece strode over to the thermostat and violently turned it up. She walked over to the basket and started pushing it to the vent near the chair. 42

“There! Now that should do until I finish. It’s a good thing I remembered that old inner tube.” She walked back to the bathroom.43

The steamy water rushed out of the chrome-plated nozzle of the faucet. Great clouds of mist arose from the tub. It was almost too hot to breath but Reece continued to blow up the inner tube using her blow-dryer.44

As the water level rose, so did the air in the tube, and as the tube filled, her mind wandered to the egg. ‘What kind of egg could it be? Maybe it’s a dinosaur egg. I mean, it’s large. I don’t know any living animal that could lay an egg of that size. Well, I just need to keep it warm and then I’ll find out.’45

Reece laid the tube in the white porcelain tub. The tube stretched across the widest portion without sinking into the water.46

“Well, it doesn’t quite fit but at least it will keep you above the water and the steam will keep you warm. And besides it’s the only thing I can think of,” Reece shouted over the running water.47

The hum pulsed. The air grew humid as the steam filled the small bathroom. The mirror over the pedestal sink fogged over. 48

As the tub filled she strode back into the living room and started pulling the basket across the floor. It seemed heavier than it had been when she lugged it up the basement stairs.49

“All right then.” She squatted down and strained against the side. Instantly sweat beaded above her full upper up. At that moment the refrigerator kicked in and she jumped slightly.50

She giggled nervously. “Well, we can’t be jumping at every little sound, now can we?”51

The egg rocked back and forth to its own beat of a melody only it could hear, like it understood and agreed. 52

* * *53

For two days Reece emptied and refilled the clawed-footed tub with steamy water. She woke twice a night to make sure the water remained warm. 54

Monday morning broke clear and crisp as the autumn sun rose. Reece’s eyes fluttered open as the rays danced across her face. Movement on the side of her bed made her turn her head quickly.55

Sitting there, with wings stretched out, was a scaled creature the size of a Great Dane. The wings beat rhythmically as they touched the opposing walls. Reece peered at the wings, and could through the membranes, see the blood flow through the veins. Steely scales covered its large body, giving off a greenish glow. When it turned the scales turned blue.56

Oddly enough she felt no fear. The creature did not seem threatening.57

“Well, fella.” She reached out a hand slowly towards its snout. “You must have been what was in that egg. Wow!” Reece forgot to breath and she stood frozen, as a sense of wonderment struck her when she realized that this creature was a dragon. 58

The air around the scaled creature shimmered and became misty. Reece could feel the heaviness of the air, making it hard to catch her breath. She forced herself to sit with her legs hanging over the edge of her single bed. 59

Gradually the air cleared, but the heaviness lingered. It had settled in Reece’s lungs, making breathing difficult, almost impossible.60

When the air had completely cleared Reece saw that the dragon had turned into a young boy.61

The boy stood beside the bed, eye level with her sitting form. She tried to lift her hand to touch his snow-white hair, but her arms couldn’t move. Panic struck her as she tried different body parts. None responded. Silent tears ran down her freckled cheeks.62

The boy reached out and stroked her blonde hair, as if she were a pet. His skin shimmered and sparkled against the low light of morning. Deep green eyes stared into her clear blue ones, never blinking.63

Slowly, he laid her down and took one of the balled up blankets. Gently, he tucked it around her feet. He took one hand and licked it. On his hands was a stringy liquid that he secured the blanket with. He rolled her over onto her stomach and around to her back again. Over and over he did this, periodically securing it with the same sticky material as before. When he was done, he left her in her blanketed cocoon.64

For days she stayed that way, neither sleeping nor eating. She could hear movement from the other room and could hear the phone, but he stayed away. Still the panic and hopelessness threatened to overcome her. Madness lay just underneath, but was just out of her reach. And then he came back but in dragon form.65

She knew he had learned to breathe fire from the smoldering smoke that curled up from his snout.66

She knew he was breathing a controlled flame on her legs but could not feel it. Reece watched the shadows dance on the wall beside her twin bed. Slowly, he made his way up and the only thing she could think of was…67

“I was going to name you Liquid.”

Author notes

JANUARY 15, 2009 All editted and ready for the book. Thank you Bitter Irony for all your hard work.




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  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    September 12

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    Morning Brooke,

    Seems like I met these characters before .

    This tale of Reece and her delightful (though hungry) acquisition has become a near perfect manuscript .

    The descriptions are clear and cleverly worded so both the two unique characters and their activities become visible.

    While the idea of the savior becoming chow is a bit sad, the overall tale is humorous .

    One tiny thing I spotted . When she hit level floor she stumbled, expecting it to (be) farther down.

    Geri

    You should have some extra

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 5.

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    NinjaClary, judge.

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  • Myryca
    April 27

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    I expected that to be longer. Probably because I read the other version first.

    Anyway, I think I do like this version better. It's less cliche and "goody" than the other one if that makes sense.

    I think this would have felt better though if you'd fleshed out the ending a little bit more. Like, have Reece realise he's going to eat her and have her give more of a sad reaction to it or something.

    I don't mean a stronger reaction. Just a bit more description maybe? She did raise his egg, after all. There'd be some sort of bond for her there and yet now the dragon's basically betrayed her. That's a sad thing.

    Anyway, thanks for submitting this one. I admire that you rewrote the ending even if I liked the original better. I don't think I'd be able to make myself rewrite an ending unless I wasn't happy with it myself

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • Violette silver member
    April 24
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    Great!

    Soooo soooo adorable. Very original ,congrats, you're in my finalists list!


  • annemarie
    February 4

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    This is so cute A came to mind when I was reading this Dragon World - from way back in the day. About a dragon's egg being found and hatching in the modern era. I like the idea of urban fantasy because fantasy is good but when you combine the ideas of a fantasy world with the world that we live in, it totally opens up your story in so many directions.

    You have a knack for creating imagery. I had a good mental image of the world that you created. AS a writer that is a good skill to have


  • tonialoise
    January 26

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    You have a wonderful imagination and a good eye for detailed descriptions.

    first we'll bet the grammar stuff out of the way, hope you don't mind. and don't mind me if you've already fixed these in the other version.
    "head feeling her blond locks trail " s/b "blonde". usually the spelling of this word I leave up to the writer but you spelled it with an 'e' earlier

    "faint smell hint of freshly turned dirt" the syntax here seems a bit off. There's several things you can do with it; remove "smell", "faint smell that hinted of...", or "faint smell hinting at freshly..."

    "She had left behind light stands of her hair attached to the rough wall. A throbbing pain had started where the fine hairs had been." You could make this a bit more active by removing both "had"

    "Its dull gray metal gleamed from of washing." remove "of"

    "She eyed it the oven." remove "it"

    "big wigs sent down " missed the period

    After spending so much time on describing all the detail about all she went through the part after he hatched seemed kind of fast and not as detailed. Maybe it's just me hoping for more dragon.

    Awwww... that's kind of sad. I mean she did all that work and she just winds up being his first meal? But they can't all be happy endings can they?

    Really cool about him being able to turn into a boy and even the way he feeds is very different from any other dragon story. I think making him be able to turn into a boy explains some of the other questions I was going to ask (like how the egg got there in the first place).

    Really quite well done!

    • SageSyren Greeters member
      January 26
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      How embarassing. This is for the Anthology book and it would have looked awful if the little typos would have been it Wonder how my editor missed thoses?

      Ok fixed and I'm glad you liked this one.

      The alternate ending was for a contest. Just threw it out and haven't really touch it since. Probably should go back and that least edit it.

      Thanks for reading both
      Brooke


  • sodancewithsoda silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    I remember this..

    This was around March or April 2007... haha, did I get it right?

    I read it before, I liked it.. I read it again, I loved it. THere were typos, but for this one, I was more spurred on to read and find out more - partly to see if you've changed the ending.

    One thing confused me.. x.x When I read this, I did not find it amusing, as Greg's review said (yeah, I read his reply after typing some of my comments) - I felt betrayed, because she cared for it like a mother, and it.. ate her o.o her last thoughts was even heartbreaking because she still thought of naming it.. wah..

    I hope I'm making sense. x.x
    Sorry I can't help with the grammar/typos for now, it is almost 12 midnight x.x
    Thanks for this, Brooke still beautifully simple, it could be a children's story, if not for the tragic tragic ending x.x


  • Abstract Muse gold member
    November 5, 2008

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    Small stuff:

    p3. ..expected it to 'be' farther down..
    p41. (I think. The numbers faded into the background) casement - basement
    Geri already got the rest.

    What a different and amusing take on a dragon story.
    From your descriptions of the egg and the baby dragon I take it you've read Anne McCaffrey, eh?

    Good description all around to show where they were and what was going on. Maybe I just missed something but I really didn't get why it turned into a boy and then back into a dragon. It gave it an interesting twist though. And rolling her in a cocoon after paralizing her seems more like a spider. Cool. A shape shifting dragon.

    This was a fun story to read. Even the ending was amusing with her thinking of her name for him as he roasts her. lol
    There's an alternate ending to this? I'll have to read the other version too.
    Cool story.
    Greg

    • SageSyren Greeters member
      November 5, 2008
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      Thanks Greg. And yes, I have read the Dragonriders of Pern. They are one of my favorite series. I don't know why I decided to have her cocooned, it just felt right


  • scriptor
    November 3, 2008

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    in p.24 you refer to her as a "he" In p. 33 you use the wrong tense "has" Also i think that her reactions to various things were hardly believable. Other than those things i think its good; well written, good idea.I enjoyed it. Im not sure i get the ending though... you think you could explain it? Hes ganna eat her, is that it?

    • SageSyren Greeters member
      November 3, 2008
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      Hey, thanks for pointing those out. Now if you could give me examples of what you thought her reactions would be, that would be very helpful

      There is an alternate version. http://storywrite.com/story/215056

      Again thanks
      Brooke

      • scriptor
        November 3, 2008
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        first of all its hard to tell what paragraph is what cuz it blends in with the back ground... well in p. 23 it says she is shocked and awed... i didnt really get anything out of that. there was no reaction you just simply stated: she was shocked and awed. lol, when the dragon hatches she just talks to it? Other than that you really didnt do a bad job at all, and of course these are just my opinions; not facts.

        • SageSyren Greeters member
          November 3, 2008
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          Oh I see, yes, I just told and not showed. I will see about that. Thanks and you are right they paragraphs do blend it
          Thanks again.
          Brooke

  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    November 1, 2008
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    You given it some nice touches of humor and great description.

    Hi Brooke, this is a fun story for gory people like me .

    You given it some nice touches of humor and great descriptions.

    I know I read this in one form or another before. I’m surprised I never commented.

    I read both versions this time; and while the second ending is easier to understand—which is the second . The longer version? I like this ending too.

    I’m an animal lover but when she woke up with him staring at her, the first thing I thought ‘Hmmm, yep, lunch’.

    Why would he cocoon her? If he’s hungry why not just start dining? Cocooning is how insects save their meals for later.

    A couple thing to look at:

    Blonde or blond lately I noticed writers dropping the e regardless of sex. I don’t care for it; but you can’t have both for the same person tongue. Honey blonde bangs hung in her eyes as she glanced up at the light hanging from the ceiling.1
    She shook her head feeling her blond locks trail across her neck.2

    There sat the eggs (egg’s) salvation, a claw footed, white, porcelain tub.38

    she could (,) through the membranes, see the blood flow through the veins.

    Silent tears ran down her freckled. Cheeks.66 (why that period and the cap on cheeks.)

    Geri

    beginning: 5, plot: 5.


  • Valkyrie silver member
    October 29, 2008

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    Whoa, creepy! I gotta wonder, who put the egg there?? It sounds like it could turn into a horror story, with the dragon going on and eating everyone like this...but I loved the detail you put into the keeping it warm. Ah the irony.

    • SageSyren Greeters member
      October 30, 2008
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      Thanks for reading and for commenting. I saw that you read the alternate ending too. Thanks for that one too.

      I hadn't really thought about how the egg got there. Something to ponder? *rubs chin*


  • Shimmerfairy
    October 26, 2008

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    blimey this one has left me wondering! is he good/bad?
    Really well written and a good read
    Thanks for entering!


  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    p39 "how to (keep) you

    p45 near the (chair).

    p50 it will (keep) you

    This is very good. I enjoy it a lot. I like the modern day aspect of the story. Your detail and descriptions make it seem so real.

    Was 'Phew' in p56 intentional?

    How did you decided to make the alternate ending? I'd like to read that, too.

    Andy

    • SageSyren Greeters member
      October 19, 2008

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      Thanks Andy, I've fixed those errors and changed the sentence with Phew in it. I don't know what the orginal was supposed to say.

      I'll post the alternate ending for you to read. The reason behind it was for a contest.

      Thanks again.
      Brooke

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