Blood Lust

He snapped his jaws down into my neck, penatrating my flesh and my veins. The poison seeped into my blood crawling and clasping around my blood cells. It didn't burn like they said. It felt great.
He pinned my arms to the wall with his hands and held my body up so I wouldn't collaspe. His body was the only thing holding me up. I felt my body begin to burn. It didn't bother me any. It made me pull myself closer.
He broke away but still held me up. I felt him lick the warm red liquid off my neck. I felt him let go of me and I dropped to the ground. I still felt now pain. Except the pain I felt when he walked away. 'Is he making sure he doesn't drink more? Why's he leaving me here?' I thought as I tried to move. I yelled his name as a rush of pain shot through my body. He turned slowly.
"What do you want, girl?" I felt tears whell in my eyes. They began to roll down my cheeks, smearing my eyeliner. He smirked and walked out the door, leaving me lying there.
I saw a boy come towards me from the hallway. I had heard Stefan say his name but it blurred. But I was sure it was Jakob. He walked to me slowly. He had witnessed everything I suppose.
I felt his arms wrap around me and lift me from the cold floor. "Sh...Don't worry. I won't hurt you." I knew I could trust him.
I just nodded and closed my eyes leaning my head on his shoulder. I passed out cold there. 1

I awoke about an hour later. I was lying on a bed with a young girl sleeping on the side of my bed and a small kitten on my chest asleep. The boy, Jakob, was asleep next to me with one arm around me and the other around the little girl. 2

I tried to sit up but pain kept me down. His grip tightneed around me and he mumbled in his sleep about something. From the purple under his eyes, I'd say this was his first time sleeping in a long time. I snuggled against him. He smiled in his sleep and he looked so cute. 3

I petted the kitten after the pain went down. The little girl, whos name I found out was Elizabeth, was asking me tons of question. I answered half of them. The others I didn't know the answer to. 4

"So how do you know Steffy?" I looked at her smiling face. "Party..."Was all I could say. Jakobs grip tightened as blood dripped onto his wrist. It hurt. More now than before. He mumbled my name. 'How did he know my name?' I thought. He pulled me close and Elizabeth ran out. 5

This was weird. And new. He was sweet though. And as time progressed my teeth sharpened to sabor fangs. Jakob and I progressed from friends to more than friends. We had connections and he helped my blood lust. 6

Only a couple weeks of being a vampire I couldn't control myself. I attacked Jakob and bite him. He gave me anything I wanted. Which I loved. 7

I only attacked him out of pure blood lust. My blood lust. My blood lust curse. This is the only begining. 8

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  • jessscattt
    October 23, 2008

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    hm

    Well I was wondering where the setting was in from the start. You used I a lot at the beginning in your sentences which made the story kind of boring. I also felt like you had rushed your story. And how did their friendship progress?... Maybe I just have to read more of it to find out. The blood-lust sounds interesting. So far I'm assuming the narrator is a vampire but I don't know (yet?).. I wonder why you make the vampire at the beginning seem so merciless as well. I myself could sort of realise the pain in your story but I would like to really see more depth in it. When you mention the blood-lust as a curse it makes my mind wonder why is that?.. And then you have those words "this is only the beginning" I wonder what it is the beginning of. Life as a vamp. Controlling this lust perhaps? I would like to see more of this in the future. Thanks for the read. I enjoyed it.