I heard the song come on the radio, weird it was the third time today they’d played it. As I listened to the music float through the empty spaces that we’d once called our home, tears started to well in my eyes. That all too familiar lump rose in my throat and I had to push hard to keep it down. 1
I have to say that the breakup was such a shock. I knew that we fought a little bit more than most couples, but I just put it down to the fact that our situation was different and harder. Even so I always thought I’d found my one and you would be the person I’d spend the rest of my life with. 2
I know how cliché that all sounds but when you meet that special person, ‘the one’ or so you think, all cliché melts away and its just your heart on the line. You put your tender heart right out there and risk it getting broken, but don’t ever think it will happen. When it does, it feels like a mound of snow crashing down on you, freezing your heart right in that moment of them walking away, breaking you. It hurts and it’s cold. Except there’s no first aid officer and the one person you want to comfort you, is the one that’s breaking your heart. 3
Falling in love sounds scary huh? Sounds like it almost hurts you too much to ever bother doing it, but it’s definitely worth it. When loves good, it’s really good. Your face gets sore from the smile that’s permanently stretched across it. You think about that person all the time and get sick of them in your thoughts but love it all the same. They are your one constant obsession. They are your constant. Love is all you can see, feel and breathe.4
Than all of a sudden one day its ripped from you. That thing that you’ve based your life on is taken right out from under your feet. You fall, your head smashing on the ground, your heart already in pieces and the air winded from you. Your constant is now in tiny pieces and is reflected in every broken glass, mirror and window you see. You stare at the reflection looking back at you, pieces of you reflected in broken pieces of the glass and you know that pretty much sums you up, broken pieces all contained within that one fragile piece of skin that is you. One fragile piece of skin that feels paper thin and ready to tear at any moment and you’re scared that one it does, all the broken pieces of you will come spilling out and cut someone else, the way you’ve been cut.5
And when I hear that song on the radio, I dream of happier days. I dream of the beginning and the middle and shy away from the end. I change the ending, make it easier to bear, make it seem like a fairytale and pretend that I’m Rapunzel locked in a tower and I’m just waiting for my hair to grow and than you’ll save me. I change the ending because it’s too painful to face. 6
Author notes
2. Romance.
This is about romance and heartbreak...hope it fits into your requirements.
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Comments
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The imagery and emotion evoked made this piece an engaging read. Though relationship breakdowns are a natural aspect of human relationships, I liked how you portrayed the emotion involved in both the before and after, rather than purely focusing on the negative impacts.
Thank you for your entry in Share the Spoils.
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Wow, this was really well done! Like.....I know exactly how this feels. Well sort of. Before my boyfriend and I started dating, I knew he was the only guy for me, and then all the sudden he started dating this other girl and it totally ripped my heart to shreds (I have a story based off of that on here actually) It was the worst feeling in the world, but what you said is true. When love is good, it's GOOD. Better than good, Fantastical! Yeah I'm going to stop rambling now and...yeah. Great job and GOOD LUCK in the contest! -Liz
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Thanks for your lovely comment on my story...I read it to my partner and she cried..its been really hard for us since we moved interstate...hopefully things will settle soon...and i hope your precious heart has healed...whats the name of your story??
P.s. am up to part three or four...of your series and am really enjoying it... -
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It's called "If Only I Could Tell You" There are a few differences from what I have penned and what really transpired, but you get the general idea. Glad you're enjoying Hard Time!!! I need to get back on writing more of that series...
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Oh my God...that was absolutely stunning. I think everyone, gay or straight or even bi, who has ever been through a bad break up, has felt like this at one point? It's a terrible feeling, and sometimes it feels like you won't ever smile again, or fall in love again. You think that person was IT, and there's no one in the world who will love you the way they did. It's almost scary in a way, and this entire story just sums that all up. That was so incredibly heartfelt and beautiful! I love this:
"I know how cliché that all sounds but when you meet that special person, ‘the one’ or so you think, all cliché melts away and its just your heart on the line."
That couldn't be more true, in my opinion. You don't worry about how stupid you sound, or how love-sick you might act, because all that really matters is that one person.
And this:
"I dream of the beginning and the middle and shy away from the end. I change the ending, make it easier to bear, make it seem like a fairytale and pretend that I’m Rapunzel locked in a tower and I’m just waiting for my hair to grow and than you’ll save me. I change the ending because it’s too painful to face."
Wow...this entire piece was just breathtaking. Thank you so much for that! Finalist!
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Thanks for your beatiful response to my story...glad that you liked it and it touched you in a special way...my current partner and i aren't broken up at the moment but she keeps on saying we are and than we're not..so its been really up and down, topsy turvey all around!
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