Moth Soul

Shrunken, tired, dying, this man wheezes, aches, tremors. His youth has drained, his soul has eaten him from the inside out; the two- body and spirit- were never meant to combine. Shaking and hacking, dust fills his lungs and dries his throat, mouth, tongue. He fumbles, his muscles no longer in coordination with his mind, and one leg collides with the other, brings him to his knees, withered, ancient, in horrible pain. 1

His soul flutters about in his chest, feather-drums the ribcage, causes more ashen blood to gum the corners of his parched lips- thin, cracked. Each rise and fall of the air and blood filled cavity intensifies the pain, exhausts his eyes of light, counts the grains of sand falling into the lower portion of his own, personal, hourglass. Individual particles scour the inside of his dried shell, and the clockwork of his biological being begins to weaken, crunch, fall in upon itself. 2

Rattle. 3

Quake. 4

Soul and Body are sent in magnetic force to opposite sides of reality, and the man takes his last breath. He rises, a lifeless puppet, erratic, jerks to attention, gnarled hands grope, scratch, search blindly, dead, for the opening to the body’s chest. Yellowed, calloused hands lock into the center, wrench back ribcage cupboard doors. 5

Debris spews forth a like fungus spreading spore in a dirty, pathetic cloud of dry, dead bones, ground, worn, chewed from the inside out. A single flicker of grey and rust-earth rises above the wreckage floating, ascending. 6

The form of the man sinks and mildews, taken by years of age in an instant; melds into the mud where it was meant to be. The soul tumbles awkwardly onward toward any shimmering point of warmth it can see, lifted, only barely, by dust and mushroom wings. 7

Selected in a room of heat, passion, lust, another form is infected by the parasitic moth for it to nurture, build, destroy. And a new creature, misshapen mixture of body and soul, is born.

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Short little something of mine I found.

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  • Prestige
    December 4, 2008
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    Well...

    I have to say that I was quite... ummm... intrigued by this. Is intrigued the word I want...? I don't know. *shrugs*

    Anyway, I definitely enjoyed it. I liked the imagery and the emotion of the man. I could feel his pain as though it were mind, and I say congrats to you on that count!

    You did a wonderful job. Keep it up!

    . Rewarded 6

  • Rorshach gold member
    December 4, 2008
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    death obsessed

    cheer up, as we breath we have hope

  • callthexylophone
    October 16, 2008

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    CREEPTASTIC.
    I usually love how I can visualize everything in your stories, but now I'm ick-ed out, so props to you!
    The first two lines aren't quite right yet, though; they aren't you. I don't think they're cliche... but they aren't natural, maybe?
    I have to admit ignorance here and say that I don't get the soul/moth thing, unless the soul/moth is about reincarnation and its going to enter a new body.. If its a science-fiction thing, then I need a little more direction, and if it's not (and i think it's not), then a little more direction is needed that way, too.


    WAIT. OH EM GEE.
    The last paragraph...... is about sex, and a new human life being formed, and the moth goes there and enters it? NOT on my game tonight, shame on me. Liked this, it made me think outside my head-box.