From the personal Journal of Luke Fleming, 8th June 20041
Today my dad picked me up from school for the first time since the third grade. Of course, it was because he needed me to do something for him. Journal, you know I don’t usually make much of an effort to explain shit that happened to me during the day, but today I’m going to because…well, because it could make me famous.2
Okay, so there’s this huge serial killer case going on in Rayburn, which is basically the most exciting thing to ever happen in this boring-ass town. This creepy old guy and his son—and they’ve shown them on the news, they’re all dirty and bearded and Amish-looking—they’ve been luring people driving down highway 284 into their home for years, and, like, killing and dismembering them. And the idiot police just figured it out next week. So of course, my hero cop dad is one of the main people on the case. He’s basically just helping clean up their disgusting old shack and collecting evidence. Really exciting, right?3
But the thing is, they found this girl—this still living girl—in the shack, being held hostage or something. Turns out, she’s the sister of the son, although neither of them are actually biologically related to the father. That’s what my dad said, anyway. So she’s all traumatized by what her dad and brother have been doing, and my dad needs me because she only speaks in sign language.4
I bet that pissed him off. He’s always pissed off when I speak sign language. Especially to mom, because she can still understand it a bit and he’s forgotten it all. He shouldn’t have fucking taught it to me in the first place if he didn’t want me to know it.5
Anyway, we get to the hospital where she’s staying, and I go in her room, and I think it’s the wrong one. Dad told me the girl was sixteen, my age, but this is just a kid. She has this hair that’s so blonde, it’s almost white, and these big gray eyes and the rest of her is tiny. And she’s all curled in a ball in this big hospital gown, which makes her look even tinier. The Sunshine Girl, they call her, because she’s got such a light complexion. Anyway, she waves HI to me and I wave HI back.6
My dad’s around his doctor buddies now, so he has to act like he likes me. He goes, “Thanks for doing this, Luke” and then goes, “can you ask her her name?” I don’t see why, since she can hear just fine, but maybe he wants her to get that I speak her language.7
So I sign, YOUR NAME? But she shrugs, and I realize the problem. I say to dad, “You’re supposed to spell out names, dad. If she can’t read and write, she probably can’t spell.”8
He nods and is about to go on to the next question, when I get an idea and ask her, “Is there any nickname you go by? Something I can sign?”9
But she’s already got an idea. She says, MY MOTHER’S NAME. And I say to dad, “She says her name’s the same as her mom’s. Do you know that name?”10
He doesn’t of course, but one of the doctors, the girl ones, flips through the police file he brought with him. She’s like, “Richard Bailey said that his wife’s name was Molly. Is that your name? Molly?”11
So the girl nods her head as fast as she can, and goes, MY MOM, SHE DIED. SHE TAUGHT ME TO SIGN. I relate this to dad, who’s all surprised. I guess they thought this Molly girl was an idiot or something, but they just didn’t know how to talk to her.12
Anyway, they asked her a few questions about the murders but she acted like she didn’t know anything. I can tell she does know, but I didn’t say that to anyone. Her signing is a little weird—like some words are different, and the hand movements are kind of vague. But I can understand her. It’s just like she’s speaking with an accent or something. They asked one weird question—“What did your brother and father feed you?” She answered, MEAT MOSTLY. I don’t know what that was about.13
Anyway, it’s like 2:30 AM, so I’m going to sleep. Just wanted to write this down so I’d remember. 14
~Luke
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Ooooh, nice different point of view =D
I'm still very intridgued. What a great idea for a story =D
Your writing is good, as ever, very fluent etc.
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Well, thank you for reading, and for letting me know your impression! I wasn't sure about the different POVs, so I'm glad you liked it. Thanks again, next one will be out tonight or tomorrow!
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Or reading. Who knows what the cool kids call it these days?
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I shall definitely be readig
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I really like the way you're writing this story from different people's views! Its refreshing in the writers world to see something like this.
I have to say one thing...is it going to turn out that this meat is human meat...???? or am i just sick in the head for thinking that! -
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I'll just reply to this comment, although I enjoyed all of yours and I'm glad you liked my story so far! Something tells me I'd like your writing too...I'll check it out when I have a moment. As to your question...you're not just sick in the head. Keep reading, that's all I'll say. XD
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