In a world so far away,1
Dwelled the kingdoms of Night and Day.2
Wars for power, dark against light,3
The two kingdoms locked in an eternal fight.4
During the battle two babes were born,5
Connected through love a Prophecy forewarned.6
The girl child grew up in the kingdom of light,7
And the little boy in the silence of night.8
The two met first on the bridge towards dawn,9
To put the ‘gale to sleep and the lark into song.10
Their eyes met together, their hearts good willed,11
From that moment on the prophecy was fulfilled.12
Every night they met to kiss, and to feel love,13
Their intentions were white, as pure as a dove.14
The arguing kingdoms of Night and of Day,15
Discovered their love, planning to part them far, far away.16
The lovers were heartbroken, sad and full of agony ,17
They could not find any way to hold their anger at bay.18
The two realized the problem couldn’t be solved,19
So they’d run far away leaving the world to revolve.20
They chose to meet on the Bridge at midnight ,21
Then went to their kingdoms to bring what they must.22
But the girl was caught by her protective father ,23
And was locked in her rooms while he met her lover.24
Her father met her love at their meeting place,25
And lied of her death right to his face.26
He wouldn’t believe it and needed proof,27
And entering the Day Kingdom was his only way.28
He crept into the castle alone and aware,29
At the same time his girl broke out of despair.30
She got out of her rooms to go meet her dearest,31
Going down the main stairway that happened to be nearest.32
Halfway down, she saw him running her direction.33
Before he reached her an agonized cry was his vocal projection.34
Mistaken for a Nightly spy, a sentry ended his life35
With a single stab of his of his hidden warring knife.36
She flew down the stairs only to find him fading,37
Cradling his head, his dark blood cascading.38
“You’re alive” he breathed, “I knew you would be.39
“Whatever happens, I will always love thee.”40
With those last loving words he fell limp in her arms,41
And now he was gone, away from all harms.42
His lover was heartbroken, and knew not what to do.43
She took the fallen knife and her own throat she slew.44
Word spread throughout the kingdoms of Night and of Day.45
That the heirs to their lands had sadly passed away.46
They learned from their hate came nothing good,47
The worst had happened like the Prophecy said it would.48
The kingdoms now stopped all parts of the fights,49
And the hate became great love of Day and of Night.50
Through the love that the heirs had shared51
But it was already too late when the peace between the kingdoms52
was finally declared.53
Author notes
this piece was inspired by Shakespeare's book Romeo and Juliet in my sort of twisted way.
also inspired by the quote : " Did my heart love till now? Foeswear, it sight! For I ne'er saw the true beauty till this night." by William Shakespheare
Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoyed it..... Sorry i it was a bit long .......
Gothic Angel
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I enjoyed reading this. Most of it was rhymed but parts were not. But that was ok. I think that you have a great talent for writing. Keep it up.
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Wow Angel this was awesome!! I love the story. And, ironically, we finished reading Romeo and Juliet in English class today. Weird! Anyway, this is a story, but it's more of a poem...I think it should go on All Poetry instead of Storywrite.
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... This is a VERY good write lil sis!!! It is soooo awesome!!! I love this!!! It flows so wonderfully and tells the story of Romeo and Juliet with a cute twist!!! Great job!!!
Hugs,
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Hello Charles,
Yes I got this inspiration from a book that I've read a few years ago, and Im reading the book again now. thanks for the lovely comment my dear friend .
Gothic Angel
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Wow!! You get this from a book? How incredible. No matter the length, it was enjoyable through the whole thing... Your just simply amazing!! Wowsers!! And not only that, it rhymed... THat is very different from your usual ones. But you did an amazing job with it and the flow. img src='http://img.allpoetry.com/images/smile/rofl.gif'> Well De, you've done blown me away with this piece!! Job well done!! Keep on writing!! God Bless You my friend!!
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Dark Charismatic, thank you for the lovely comment
Gothic Angel
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that's amazingly well done...it's a great twist to the standard romeo and juliet.
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Hello Huntress ,
Thank you for being patient reading this piece from begginning till the end. I'm glad you enjoyed this one.
Thank you for the lovely comment and the applause
Gothic Angel
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I think this is your best poem yet, it is fantastic. I was reading faster and faster to see what happened next
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fantastic
My my angel this is absolutly amazing my dear, I love the way you wrote your own versio of Romeo&juliet.
Lady Dragon
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Sugar -and Spice ,
thank you for the wonderful comment dear, Im glad you you enjoyed reading this piece .
Gothic Angel
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Florescent Gray,
Im glad you like this piece thank you for the wonderful comment.
Gothic Angel
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Awesome write! I love it! I love how you took the old classic and made it new like this. It's slightly different, yet so much the same. Good flow and sweet job! Words can hardly describe it. Great job! Keep up the good work!
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I really liked this, it was reminiscent of Romeo and Juliet, yet deffinitely had your own twist on it. I thought it was going to be rather cliche, but I enjoyed this thoroughly.
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Kendal,
Im glad you like my version of Romeo and Juliet , and thank you for your patience on reading this very long piece, Thank you also fot the lovely coment and the appaluse
Gothic Angel
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As I was reading this, I thought, Romeo and Juliet. I like your version. It's just as beautiful.
Always and Forever,
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papichulo07,
Thank you for being patient and reading this piece till the end ......I thank you for your wonderful comment and the applause
Gothic Angel
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damn freakin good!!!
i luv it
it reminds me of romeo and juliet, only events r mixed up
it was damn freakin good(which means its GOOD)
peruse my poetry, please...i'd luv to hear what u think
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