What do you do1
When unbendable steel2
Shatters like glass3
When you watch 4
As the Great Wall of China5
Falls at you’re feet6
When strength beyond strength7
Fades completely away8
When tears that filled9
The once great river10
Flow again11
Saturating the dried riverbed 12
When you feel like the Titanic13
Plunging headfirst into the depths 14
When in your greatest moment15
When at your happiest16
You seem to crash and burn17
Spiral downhill18
Implode upon yourself 19
Because of things20
You can’t control21
Because you can’t be22
What you feel is best23
When there’s a gap24
Where you should be25
A space that you can’t fill26
How do you deal27
How do you erase 28
What you don’t have29
When you’re spread so thin30
So many things at once31
How do you become another32
Fill another void33
Another empty space34
When the one thing you want to be35
Is the one thing you can’t36
The one thing they won’t accept37
Author notes
Ok...yes I know this doesnt' really sound all that love like..but it is...you have to know me really really well to get it....
A contest entry
- poetry by trekkergirl.
175 points, ended December 10, 2008, 93 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Watcha think?
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Poems don't have to be lovey dovey to be wonderful
I liked this, particularly because a void is something we feel during depressed, or even on the rare occasions when we just feel like our lives our headed nowhere - well, for me anyway 
your words are perfect, I DO try to spread myself too thinly, sometimes, as a desperate attempt to feel whole...
Thanks so much for sharing this with your SW community
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Thanx a lot....I don't think anymore than 2 or 3 ppl really get the story behind the poem...but I'm glad that u liked it and that u can relate...well not that you can relate persay...but that you can understand it as being similar to something u've been through...anyway thanx again 4 the feedback
*Blessed Be*
Lauren
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wow i think that this poem is really deep. I like it a whole lot. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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This is so sad... and so true which only makes it sadder in my opinion. becasue all we really want when we're buried six feet under is to have lived this life and know taht someone, anyone? cared about us and that we were loved.
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Yeah I know..you realize that you already commented on this one right?
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i like this one, i think you read it to me not to long ago
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Yep that would be the one...
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wow that's really good and kind of sad... but hopefully with the gsa we can make that change love. loves yo
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Love ya too....but you know my mother....I see that you're the one that got the point of it....but yeah.....thanks for the comment...love ya lots.
Lauren
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Well,
I didn't get love out of this.
At all.
But, I did like it.
A lot.
I liked the flow, and the structure,
and the over all poem.
good job.
Keep it up.
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Ok...what it is...is that I've said that my heart couldn't break...ever...for anyreason...I was wrong...I realized just what can break it....to have something that could be and would be mine taken away from me, because of my family...
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I LIKE IT A LOT
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