How Do You Fill The Void [poem]

What do you do1

When unbendable steel2

Shatters like glass3

When you watch 4

As the Great Wall of China5

Falls at you’re feet6

When strength beyond strength7

Fades completely away8

When tears that filled9

The once great river10

Flow again11

Saturating the dried riverbed 12

When you feel like the Titanic13

Plunging headfirst into the depths 14

When in your greatest moment15

When at your happiest16

You seem to crash and burn17

Spiral downhill18

Implode upon yourself 19

Because of things20

You can’t control21

Because you can’t be22

What you feel is best23

When there’s a gap24

Where you should be25

A space that you can’t fill26

How do you deal27

How do you erase 28

What you don’t have29

When you’re spread so thin30

So many things at once31

How do you become another32

Fill another void33

Another empty space34

When the one thing you want to be35

Is the one thing you can’t36

The one thing they won’t accept37

Author notes

Ok...yes I know this doesnt' really sound all that love like..but it is...you have to know me really really well to get it....

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  • sodancewithsoda silver member
    February 11

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    Poems don't have to be lovey dovey to be wonderful I liked this, particularly because a void is something we feel during depressed, or even on the rare occasions when we just feel like our lives our headed nowhere - well, for me anyway your words are perfect, I DO try to spread myself too thinly, sometimes, as a desperate attempt to feel whole...

    Thanks so much for sharing this with your SW community


    • XXx.A.N.G.E.L.xXx
      February 11
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      Thanx a lot....I don't think anymore than 2 or 3 ppl really get the story behind the poem...but I'm glad that u liked it and that u can relate...well not that you can relate persay...but that you can understand it as being similar to something u've been through...anyway thanx again 4 the feedback

      *Blessed Be*
      Lauren


  • trekkergirl
    December 9, 2008

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    wow i think that this poem is really deep. I like it a whole lot. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.

  • blackrainbow
    November 20, 2008

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    This is so sad... and so true which only makes it sadder in my opinion. becasue all we really want when we're buried six feet under is to have lived this life and know taht someone, anyone? cared about us and that we were loved.

  • Kameron
    October 25, 2008
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    i like this one, i think you read it to me not to long ago

  • blackrainbow
    October 16, 2008
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    wow that's really good and kind of sad... but hopefully with the gsa we can make that change love. loves yo


    • XXx.A.N.G.E.L.xXx
      October 16, 2008
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      Love ya too....but you know my mother....I see that you're the one that got the point of it....but yeah.....thanks for the comment...love ya lots.
      Lauren


  • ObsequiousSycophant
    October 14, 2008

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    Well,
    I didn't get love out of this.
    At all.
    But, I did like it.
    A lot.
    I liked the flow, and the structure,
    and the over all poem.
    good job.
    Keep it up.


    • XXx.A.N.G.E.L.xXx
      October 15, 2008
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      Ok...what it is...is that I've said that my heart couldn't break...ever...for anyreason...I was wrong...I realized just what can break it....to have something that could be and would be mine taken away from me, because of my family...


  • Rorshach
    October 14, 2008
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    I LIKE IT A LOT

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