Incendia-Chapter 1

It was midnight on my thirteenth birthday, I shot up in bed, Something was different.I looked around the wooden walls of my bedroom in my grandads hut in the forest, I had been living there ever since my parents died when i was. 5 I felt something on the edge of my consciousness, like a river of energy. I heard noises outside, a thump and then a moan of pain. I ran outside. I saw my grandad lying on the ground, the grass stained red by blood. he was breathing. I looked up and saw 3 men in black cloaks walking away, the lead man carried a club stained with blood. "ill kill you!" I growled at the men. I ran towards them. a invisible force knocked me backwards an I hit the wall of the hut behind me. I was knocked out for a second. I got up the 3 men were looking at me now, swords drawn. I calmly walked forwards and stepped over my grandfather's body.1

"why did you do this? My grandad had nothing to do with you!"i shouted at the men2

"Because of you." Said the lead man, his voice was deep and powerful.3

"me, Whats so special about me?" I said4

"because you are the chosen one." he said5

At that moment all the rage in me burst forth in a wave of burning energy. I raised by right arm until my palm was pointing directly at the man. "Incendia!" I cried. a glowing orange symbol formed in front of my palm. It flashed white and a ball of raging fire shot towards the man. The men turned to run, but the ball of fire caught the lead man in the back and exploded, killing all 3 of them instantly. The wave of fire past harmlessly through me and dissipated among the trees

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  • TheMorpher
    October 18, 2008
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    Neat

    Not as good as your other ones but this one is quite good