In The Rain

In the rain...1

You can see the tears2

The angels cry3

In the rain...4

You can hear the whipsers5

Of those who lie6

In the rain...7

You can feel the sorrow8

That you've held in all this time9

In the rain...10

Not only water will fall...

Author notes

My favorite songs that deal with rain are;

Listen to the Rain by Evanescence

Rain - Cowboy Bebop Episode Ballad of Fallen Angels (can be viewed on youtube)

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I think I should have added another line....

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  • Orimis
    October 28, 2008

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    Lovely.

    Not much to say here. The poem speaks for itself.
    It's true, though. Not only water falls in the rain.

    That's a good line. :]

    Thanks for entering!

  • IpodLove
    October 17, 2008
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    cute.

  • Rorshach gold member
    October 14, 2008
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    rain washes everything away though, signals a new beginning so optimism is always in the rain

    • Forsaken Unicorn
      October 15, 2008
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      Eh, it's been a while since I wrote a poem and I got inspired by the tears of angels, ya know? So I just went with it. If I placed everything I thought of the rain, it'd be friggin huge and wouldn't have been so poetic lol!

  • KitterBean
    October 14, 2008

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    Really a very beautiful poem! Showed strong emotion and was pretty sad actually...if i caught it right! Very good and best of luck in teh contest!

    Kit

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