love

I shouldve told you while I had the chance1

You were taking me home after the midnight dance2

It was a rainy night3

The sky was dark and it shouldve gave us a fright4

But we were together5

We were suppose to last forever6

But that night went horribly wrong7

It was terrible and very long8

We were telling eachother how much we love eachother9

But later on across the road 10

The light began to spark and slowly unload11

Sadly you saw this happening12

It was about to fall 13

So you pushed me to cars wall14

I didnt know what was going on15

Then I saw a color that was neon16

I dont know if I was knocked out17

Or it was your blood pouring out18

I heard a loud crah19

And our car was just a smash20

When I finally woke up21

I could tell we didnt have much luck22

The car was trashed23

My arm had a giant slash24

I couldnt find you25

Untill I spotted a bloody lump on the road26

I cant wite anymore

Author notes

This was true, it actually happened. This was when I was 14.

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  • The Jigsaw Poet
    October 30, 2008

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    You know I only found your page on this site because you were on my mates page (Rhythm Child I know hes below) I am glad I did, u r obviously amazingly talented, this is written so well that the pain is tangible.

    It must have been so hard to actually write this, like Rhythm Child (Bill) I believe that you must be very strong at heart. This is so extremely sad, im very sorry you have lost someone like that. I am sending you all the happy wishes I can, someone so talented as yourself deserves to be happy.

    I feel weird giving this applause considering the nature of it, but it is so well written I have to.


  • Rhythm Child silver member
    October 26, 2008

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    thats very sad that this happened to someone so young, it takes strength to share it
    your obviously a strong person whether you know or not

  • depressedangelchick
    October 18, 2008

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    oh wow i am so sorry about this! i liked it but that was very depressing and i am sorry that you lost someone close to u!

  • KitterBean
    October 14, 2008

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    i really kind of got lost reading this...was pretty grim. The way it was worded made it very poetic, but the content just confused me. Sorry. Not really sure what i missed.


  • Lollipopsies
    October 13, 2008
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    You gotta let life go on though.
    Right?

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