im without you

im here lying here in the dark lost. im white as snow.i lay here wating for you to save me.but your not coming.So i hope you come save me before im dead. i lay here crying and wating for the devil to come and get me. cuz i know u dont even care. im bleeding to death and in so much pain.1

all i have left of you is the memores we had together.i begen to feel dizzy and i think im almost dead.I can see the shadow of death coming right at me.But this pain....thees memores dont hurt as much as u hurt me.I cry in vain.My time has almost ran out but u don't even care if i die so i guess this is goodbye.I know you wont cry for me.Its better this way.ur happy thats all that counts.i just wish you could have helped me.But now its way to late now.

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  • SaccharineMini
    October 14, 2008
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    Awww...so depressing and sad. Lots of emotion. But very very good.
    -Renesme-


  • DaniCM
    October 11, 2008
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    depressing.. the only thing i would change is cap. first words in a sentence adn the i's