A girl went in to the toy shop, she bought some wings so she could go to a dress up birthday party. She wore them on and gasped, she really could fly! She flew in the air, the feeling of a light and fast feeling, also combining a happy feeling. But a strong gust of wind lifted of her wings and she began to fall.1
'Oh no!' she cried as she plunged downward, but nothing could save her, she wished she hadn't chosen the angel costume but she had. It was too late. As she was almost about to hit the ground, all her memories, happy and sad came back to her, 'goodbye world' she thought. Then she hit the ground and died.
A contest entry
- Less is more by moonwriter.
2200 points, ended November 2, 2008, 19 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Anything accepted.
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Awesome. Nuff' said. I applaude your comical yet morbid story. 3 applause!
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Oh wow! Very good for 9! I'm impressed! You'll only improve from here. Great job.
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Wow! I never expected something so serious from you. You're turning into a fine writer. Keep up the good work. Real sad, and yet it brought a small smile in me. The way you make impossible things happen, I simply love it. Keep Writing!!
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good
wow it is pretty sad, but I kinda like it. Its quirky. I don't understand the angel thing but it's goodbeginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 3, ending: 1, characters: 2.
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It isn't an angel, it's a girl who bought wings and flew if you don't understand
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I like it.
can I try.
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Wow! Great story for such a young age! Well done and very interesting
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whoa! Totally grim...i foudn this kind of disturbing...but that's why it was so great! Best of luck in the contest..
Really great job!
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oh I wish I can fly but why she can go to a toy
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