To sylvia 1
I watched your movie it broke me into a million peices2
To see to no and to even feel the beatings the branding..3
I'm sorry so sorry no one helped you they helped beat you..4
If people could feel your pain they would see just see..5
what you went threw I know I did not no you.... But I read your story...6
It hurt reading it and watching the movie...7
The kids burning you with lighters and making you do bad things..8
With coke bottles...You were only sixteen...9
And I'm sorry I hope you are resting now that people no your story..10
You got the word out to stop abuse...11
R.I.P 12
Syliva Marie Likens13
January,3rd,194914
October,26,196515
Comments
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nice work
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Your poem to me seemed a little chunky, meaning hard to follow. The story line was very obvious, but it didn't really keep me wanting to read anymore.
Also your trying to spell know, not no. Also you were missing a few commas.
Overall I think this poem needs a little work done....beginning: 3, language: 2, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 2, characters: 2.
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