Her wrists are cut1
Side to side2
No more tears 3
From her eyes4
She wrote a note5
Just for you6
Guess what it says7
I still love you...
Comments
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You should add more description of the feelings you had and put in through your story. This is really a story line, and should have more words added into it. Similies are always great to wow people and attach them to your poem.
Overall, you did do your job of making it depressing....
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Awww that's sad as!!! You morbid girl.
At least it ryhmes. Did you just think if this just then at this very moment?
Hmm, worrying person.
Ebbz
xoxo
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