... Leaving a gaping void,1
In this heart that has managed to stay buoyed.2
... Left alone in the lurch,3
I searched, but in vain, for my Lords church.4
... It seemed your job was done,5
For our string had come undone.6
You departed from my soul,7
... Leaving behind a living ghoul.8
I was but shattered, grimacing in agony and pain;9
... Ne'er would I be the same again!10
I cry alone, here forlorn...11
Now, that you are forever gone.12
My cries have now reduced to a sob.13
... The heart, still wincing, continues to throb...14
I miss you loads, downcast I remain;15
Ah... Good times do but little to anodyne that inner pain.16
I'd always tried, to be the perfect lover...17
But all I wish now- to be united with you forever!18
A time will come, whence I too shalt rest.19
Ne'er again... Shalt we remain at His behest...
Author notes
Option (c)
A contest entry
- Your Saddest Story by K.CTheDyingReindeer.
225 points, ended October 11, 2008, 6 entries
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Comments
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Awwwwwww, this is so sad, you really managed to bring a tear to my eyes. I wish you could have won one of those contests you entered. Really good work!
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Is this about God? Other than small piece of confusion, i love it. It may be depressing but it expresses the feelings well. Awesome job!
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Nope... I dunno what made you feel it's about God, friend. It's just the last line, where he/she feels life can sometimes be so unjust, cruel, etc. And as all the frustration culminates; it's only too human to feel that- in death, you and your departed loved-one are united forever...
Glad you liked it.
Peace.
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simply speechless good luck Kartz
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Gratias... Good to hear from you again.
Hope all is well...
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