CHAPTER 11
Her face was a pale as snow; she had eyes that didn't sparkle. Cindy wasn't one to get out and go places too much, in fact not at all. She was more subdued, she had always loved the indoors. Once as a child she had the chance of a lifetime it was to take a trip to Europe with her family. However, she refused to go. Therefore now she never ventures outside. She sat inside her apartment all day by herself. She had a job on her computer, typing up medical documents and sending them out by mail. She had her groceries delivered to her every Tuesday at 9 in the morning. She didn't have any friends, she never really did. She was also home schooled in her younger years. However, she is now 28 years old. She had always been sheltered from the world as a child. She was always so scared she never set foot outside her door. 2
Her parents were very rich, and could afford the best for her. However now that she was older, they bought her an apartment. It was adventurous for her to get into the car and have someone drive her two blocks over. She swore she'd never leave her apartment. Therefore for many long years she remained in her small apartment. She enjoyed Tuesday evenings when the young girl brought her, her groceries. However, this Tuesday was different. There was a knock at her door, a very impatient one. 3
“I’ll be there in a minute Sherry!” 4
Cindy put on her bright blue skirt and answered the door.5
“Oh Sherry come-…” she stopped speaking.6
“Um, are you Cindy Stone?” he asked earnestly 7
He was pale with bright green eyes; he was also about 28 years old.8
“Yeah…” she said embarrassed. 9
“Well, I’ve got your groceries for you, that’ll be $24 please?”10
“Where’s Sherry?” Cindy asked.11
“Oh she was fired, I don’t know why.” He replied.12
“Oh…alright and you are?” she said fumbling through her purse.13
“Um, I’m Ayden. Nice place.” he said.14
“Um, yeah? Would you like to step in a moment, I need to get my other purse.” She said.15
“Sure, I guess.”16
He stood in the middle of Cindy’s living room. He noticed no pictures on the wall, none of any men, or of her family. When Cindy returned he smiled and began to speak, but she interrupted him.17
“Well I’ve found your money.” She said. “And a tip…” she added slowly.18
“It’s kinda bare in here…no pictures?”19
”Oh…I don’t really have a family anymore…I don’t want to be reminded of them…” she said shyly.20
“Oh really? Hey…how would you like to come out for a drink tomorrow, around oh, say seven? I could pick you up.”21
”Well I dunno. I mean I haven’t left this apartment in about seven years.” She replied.22
“SEVEN YEARS! Wow…why?” he said shocked.23
“Well, I was home schooled and my parents wouldn’t ever let me leave the house. I hated that house, so when I got older they finally got me an apartment. I didn’t go to college, I just type medical papers…” she said this in confusion. “Why am I telling him this?” she thought. She noticed she was beginning to get nervous, her hands were shaking.24
“Come on, please let me take you out for a drink, you’ve got to leave this shell sometime.” He said.25
“Well you’re the first turtle hunter I’ve met.” She retorted.26
“Hey, hey now, calm down. I just want you to get out of here. Can you at least think about it? I’ll be here at seven and if you want to go, you can come.”27
“Well all right.” She replied.28
“Yeah, I have to go; I’ve got more groceries to deliver. So…bye?”29
“Okay, bye” she said awkwardly.30
Ayden turned around opened the door and closed it. Cindy sat down on her couch in amazement. 31
”Wow he was…really cute.” She thought to herself while staring at the door. It seemed as if she hoped he would “reappear” in front of it. “But I can’t go…no, I can’t leave this house. It’s so safe here.” She thought. “And LA is a bad city, so big and busy. Also what about the crime?” many thoughts rushed to her head as she fell asleep on the couch.32
CHAPTER 233
The sun from the window began to warm Cindy’s face and it woke her slowly. She was still in her white shirt, and blue skirt from the night before. She also panicked when she saw it was 3 o’clock in the afternoon. She had never slept that long. She slowly got up and opened her door to check her mail. She even had her mail delivered to her door every morning. She noticed nothing…but a post-it note and it read34
“Cindy, please let me take you out tonight?35
Ayden”36
She smiled to herself as she heard the cries of a baby in another apartment. She stepped back inside and sat down at the couch. She didn’t have a clue what to do, how to dress…or act. She knew she couldn’t leave her apartment she just couldn’t. She knew that tonight at seven she’d be letting a very cute boy down. However she was so scared she couldn’t help it. Nevertheless she decided she’d change clothes and brush her hair. She wanted to at least look decent when she refused him. So she put on her pink skirt and black top. Hours later it was seven o’clock and she heard that same impatient knock at her door.37
“I’m coming, I’m coming” she repeated.38
She opened the door and Ayden stood before her. He looked really good, and his smell was so powerful.39
“I can’t…go tonight, or ever.” She said.40
“Oh yeah? Well you are!” He said forcefully41
“Oh and how’s that?” she said.42
But before she could do anything, Ayden grabbed her arm and pulled her out the door and pushed her into the elevator. Cindy began to feel scared; she didn’t really know this man. Would he hurt her?43
”What…do you want? I don’t have much, but what do you want? Please…just don’t hurt me.” She leaned up against the back of the elevator looking fearful.44
“Oh please, do you think I’d hurt you? No I’m taking you out for a drink…” he said laughing.45
The elevator door opened and he vigorously pulled her out and pushed her over near the door. He opened the door and moments later she was on the side walk. Cindy stood there, breathless. She was so scared; she couldn’t believe she let this man pull her out. However at the same time it was exhilarating. Then she slapped him.46
“How do you have the NERVE?” she said angrily. 47
“Well, it’s for your own good. God knows you’ll suffocate to death in that apartment.”48
But then Cindy smiled and did something she had never before. She kissed him, right on the lips. She was so shocked, and she still couldn’t move. He kissed her back and then there was an awkward silence.49
“Shall we go get a drink then?” he said recovering.50
“Um..” she said51
“You know what? You need to LIVE a little. I’m trying to help you.” He said crossly.52
“Er, yeah I know…I’m…sorry…but I didn’t ask for your help. Now did I?” she said smartly.53
“Well know, but trust me you need it.” He said.54
“Oh I do, do I?” she replied, taking offense.55
“Yeah you do, so you’re going with me okay?”56
“Well…fine, but so help me god, if you leave me out here tonight and don’t take me home…” she said heatedly.57
“I will bring you back.” He said58
“Well where’s your car?” she asked. 59
“Car? I don’t have one, we’re walking.” He said.60
“Walking? In LA? But that’s more dangerous than driving! What if we got shot? Or robbed, or…or” she said frantically.61
“Nothing’s going to happen to you, I promise.” He said sweetly.62
He began to take off in long strides then he noticed no one was by his side.63
“Cindy what are you doing?” he asked.64
Cindy stood breathless she looked so scared and helpless.65
Ayden walked back over to her and kissed her again.66
“Come on…let’s go” he said.67
She thought “Wow, he’s moving too fast…”68
”Yeah okay.” And she stepped forward.69
CHAPTER 370
Should I go on…or is it *that* bad?71
Author notes
lol should I continue?
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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Thrilling,
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Lol Great job Melissa!!! It's cool. She's like.. so isolated.. I thought I had no life rofl. It's good so far, it's developing, but I'd like to see more character description to get a better image.. sorta like.. more signs of if they're more impuslive or arrogant or shy or nice, you know? Uhh I dunno what else to say, it's good. It's moving pretty fast paced which is good. Keep it going!
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yeah, it's okay, I don't like it anyways.
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Well, I'm confused.
The girl's basically a hermit... that in itself interested me more than much of anything... and to be honest I would have liked to see more character development; more personal stories from her, more ... trials, I suppose, rather than just jumping directly into her being taken "captive" by that ayden kid so quickly into the story. It just seems like there's so many big topics you could elaborate on and they're left unaddressed, but perhaps you were saving those for future chapters.
Yeah, I'd like to see more from this. It's a very cute and highly original storyline. I want more about her relatives, maybe some friends (or maybe the lack thereof) and ... yeah... whatever you can come up with haha.
I liked it, basically. A few simple grammatical errors but who cares.
<3
-Jen

