[Song] -- My Girlfriend by Finding Daylight

Okay, really cruddy structure, mostly cause it's random. It's a song I wrote inspired by David and Star Finding Daylight is my fictional band I made to sing this! Yaaaaaays! The sound is somewhat equivalent to that of Girlfriend by Avril Lavigne and Sharada by Skye Sweetnam (even the lyrics are similar) >_<. Please read!1

♥-♥-♥2

[Verse 1]3

My Girlfriend
Is not a beauty queen
But she’ll be the front page
Of every magazine
She’ll be the star in the papers
For kidnapping Gerard Way
And his brother4

My girlfriend
Is not a girly teen
Mini skirts and tight tees
Just don’t do the scene
She’ll be the one in the combat boots
Cargo pants, hoodie on her head
Looking like a gangsta5

My girlfriend
Is a party girl
Like the celebrities, she will have a ball
Get drunk and call up the neighbours
Party ‘til 12 am, then watch the fireworks
Sitting romantically, ‘til our hair catches fire6

[Chorus]7

My girlfriend
The football, track star
Girly innocence, with an M16
She’s the epitome
Of a sour sweet 16
And she might just make me fall in love,
With her8

[Verse 2]9

My girlfriend
Is quite temperamental
She will kick you down
If you tick her off
She tried to hit me down, with her father’s car
Got her M16, and nearly shot my arm10

And when she’s PMSing
You better stay real far
She doesn’t have the softest touch
Say two words and she will kick your butt
I know she can’t be tamed
Tried that once and – it wasn’t pretty, so this
Is my advice11

---12

My girlfriend
Doesn’t play games
My girlfriend
Is a superstar
My girlfriend
Is a wild one
If there are a lot of fishes in the sea
She’s the white shark13

Young Love, they say it doesn’t get too far
My girlfriend and I will prove them wrong
The proof is here in this song
She’s my little shooting star
She’s wicked awesome, and beautiful
And I can’t make the night without her call
My friends say she’s not worth the day
They’re right
She’s worth eternity, and the entire galaxy
And if this song to her sucks
At least she knows it’s quite enough14

My girlfriend, Star [She makes me smile]
She can have, it all [And more]
My girlfriend, rocks [I’m telling you the truth]
And she, just might [make me]
Fall in love with her.15

[Guitar Solo]16

My girlfriend
The football, track star
Girly innocence, with an M16
She’s the epitome
Of a sour sweet 16
And she might just make me fall in love,
With her
With her,
With her,
I’m falling in love.

Author notes

Random! XD the day before yesterday it was stuck in my head so I decided to write it. Sorry for the lack of punctuation marks and stuff, but it was just a flow of creativity and I kind of didn't bother >_<

How did my boredom and randomness turn out?

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  • Karbear12345 silver member
    May 16, 2009

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    GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    it was so good write some more please i loved it it was so good great job nice dialog it was really good keep writing i loved it GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • adonvdo
    March 17, 2009
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    not bad

    your a better song writer than me,it just needs a thumping bass line

  • secretpart
    February 27, 2009

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    Amazing song! I prefered the second part of the sonf after "---12", the rhythm seemed to be faster and well..i love rhythm. . It was really amazing how i could even hear a sort of melody with your words and it was very well done! Good job!!


  • Keirii
    February 24, 2009

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    Sweet song!!!

    It definately wasn't boring or random. I think your pretty good at writing songs.

    You definately got a knack for it.

    I enjoyed reading this!!!


  • Trendster
    January 25, 2009
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    Randomness often brings the better feelings.


  • neutraltint
    January 10, 2009

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    AMAZING!

    This song is really well written! It's beautiful! The lyrics are so nice and really make a nice tune in my head! This is great! Nice job!


  • dancindream
    January 7, 2009

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    aww i think this is adorablee!! <33
    I could follow the ryhythm actually, and it was pretty catchy. your lyrics are bittersweet, and songs like this tend to be the ones way overplayed on my opid playlist
    i liked it, i can't write songs for even ice cream, so im not some amazing judge, but i thought this was just too cute!


    • Just Listen.
      January 7, 2009
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      Awww, thank you! I think your comment's adorable! xD
      Really? Cause I practically forgot all of the music except for the chorus and bridge xD lol

      I really appreciate the great comment! ^_^

      Oh, do I get ice-cream?! *drools*


  • Quiet Little Mime
    December 8, 2008

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    Awww! This is absolutely adorable! I love it! Avril Lavigne's Girlfriend was stuck onto my playlist reminding me of my boyfriend, so I kind of thought of him and I as I read through this. Totally cute though. You should write me a song! You have talent! Keep it up!


    • Just Listen.
      December 8, 2008

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      Stop commenting! XO It's making me blush

      lol, I'll try XD Thank you so much for the lovely comment! ^_^ You're cute!


      • Quiet Little Mime
        December 8, 2008
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        Well soooorry I like commenting on your fabulous work! D: And you're welcome and... thanks? xD Cute? Moi?


  • colormeimpressed
    November 24, 2008
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    I like it, i can't really follow the beat, but your girlfriend does sound pretty badass!


  • Aaez
    October 19, 2008

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    AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!
    TIS ADORABLE!
    I LOVE IT!
    WRITE A SONG FOR ME!


    • Just Listen.
      October 19, 2008
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      AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!! Thank you Aaez! I love you and your comments!

      Lol, it'll cost ya


  • Without List
    October 18, 2008

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    These feel like real lyrics, like I could hear them on a pop station. It's not my type of thing, but it does take talent. Very nice job.


    • Just Listen.
      October 19, 2008
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      Wow! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I really liked writing it and I'm happy someone could feel the work I put into it Thank you!


  • caelub
    October 15, 2008

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    I like it. I was actually reading it to the tune of I'm Just a Kid, by Simple Plan. it worked... for the chorus at least...

    • Just Listen.
      October 19, 2008
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      Ooh! Thank you so much for the great comment! I'll be sure to download that


  • Lost.Heaven
    October 5, 2008

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    I LOVE IT!
    Ooooh it would be neat if this turned into some hit and played on the telly and radio stations!
    I should take it to my Uncle Shawn
    He works at a record company
    OHOHOH! And my cousins and their band can sing it!
    YAY!


    • Just Listen.
      October 5, 2008
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      I love you! (but not Blane :P)

      YAaaaaaaaaaay! That'd be totally awesome! Writing a song that actually gets sung by real artists is on my bucket list!

      Thanks for the great comment! And let's hope that actually happens


      • Lost.Heaven
        October 5, 2008
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        It would be cool, but the song would probably turn into some really hardcore screaming song
        My cousin's got some harsh vocals.

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