September winds race down the mountain passes, playing hide-and-seek in the trees and adding a bite to the sun-warmed air. Colors have come to life in this once verdant blanket of green and the brilliant splashes now contrast with the greens of fir and pine.1
The crunching leaves beneath my feet entertains me as I walk to the the crystal stream; the rushing water is waiting for a cast of a fly rod to give up the hiding place of the brook trout.2
Night falls and only the crackling fire made up of twigs and logs,
scraps of ice cream wrappers and other debris left behind remind
of summer laughter. Looking deep into the flames of red and blue, tales of things that have taken place during the past year leap out, desiring to be heard.3
Morning comes with chill and hint of frost, chattering of chipmunks
and calling of crows, the only visitors which fly through the area like avenging black angels. But wait! There is a haunting cry in the distance that draws near as a flock of Canadian geese wing their way through the passes. What a sight as the multihued birds keep their leader in view, wings always outstretched to the utmost on the way to some secret destination.4
Now red leaves dance across the ground trying to masquerade as fire yet the only true warmth comes from that pit in front of my tent --- I sit down and think back to the time when learning to really love autumn when life makes such drastic changes and loneliness descends on the world.5
With the chill air so deafening in my ears and the remoteness caused by this dramatic season, I’m convinced here is the place to live --- and die.6
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Your descriptive detail is astounding - very beautiful. I like how you've included nature (the geese, trout etc) alongside the vivid imagery. The way you describe it almost reminds me of an oil painting - so alive with colour and shades.
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Beautiful
Nice descriptions. It makes me long for the outdoors in an isolated place where nature can be truly appreciated. Thanks for sharing.
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How gorgeous! What a beautiful nature piece. I so enjoyed reading this. I felt like you have taken me on wonderful refreshing ride. Thank you!
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This two weeks soothed broken nerves and healed the spirit. Time spent viewing the pallete of nature is the best spent time of all.
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Excellent
This is a lovely piece that you have written. Your details are powerful and moving, I felt like i was there with you.
Excellent story!
Glad to see you are back,
Lynn
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Thanks for the hand clapping, it is most welcome. Yes, it is good to be back...and hopefully this time on a more consitant basis
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Great imagery and description of the beauty of nature - even more so in Autumn when all the richest hues of colours come forth. I liked that you also balanced the sight with sound and also reflection.
Rather than a story, this came across more as a vignette.
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Very stunning imagery, amazingly well written =) I think a few more details here and there would make it flow a bit smoother, fitting in with the imagery of the story better, but it's really good as it is =) I love this piece, and it makes me want to hike up one of the surrounding mountains and take pictures!
~Aura ♥
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Very nice piece, very picturesque.
I'd love to see and autumn like that, it's very different to what we have in Australia. Which everything just gets brown and dies over winter from lack of water.
I thought the last line fit the piece quite well. Mainly because I can understand the feeling. I love the raw beauty of nature (I hold that God is the best artist in the universe), and sometimes when captivated by a particular place (or a picture of one) I reckon it'd be nice to go watching that sunset, or whatever. Very nice way to die.
So yes, very nice indeed.
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I actually like Fall, and with September being my birthday month, I was drawn to this piece. Great descriptions!
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Fall has so much going for it when you take time to watch how nature behaves. Thanks for the kudos.
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Hey, my birthday is in Autumn as well. But it's in March. xD
Yay for living different sides of the world.
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It's beautiful; I usually hate fall, with all the things dying. But this was very picturesque. I wasn't sure if you were camping, on walkabout, living on the edge of civilization or what, but I loved the fire pit description, and that bit right there seemed to clinch the image in my mind.
Your last line got a bit ominous though...without more info it's hard to tell if you're planning on living a long happy life there, or kill yourself before winter can show up and ruin things!
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I was camping for two weeks but chose this time of year for the solitude (saw people 3 times, twice by choice). No, not going to end my life, but when my time comes this just seems like a terrific time of year and great place to be when it take place
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Hmm.
This seems like a prologue or the beginning of a story, not complete in itself. The last line is conclusive, but doesn't seem to justify all the description before it. There is a lot of imagery, and I who am not used to that, found it a bit difficult to digest. However, reading some parts of this twice, I think I picked up the basic idea here, but I'd like to see more to it.
Andy
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Thanks for the comments and I'll give some effort to expanding the description of the camping experience. It seems you aren't the only one to dislike the last line
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I did not dislike the last line, I just felt that there needed to be more to the story.
Andy
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