Story 1: Kindara's Arrow1
Chapter 1: Meeting 2
Darkness, light, morning...3
For wolves, the words have no meaning.4
For Vire, they had no meaning ether.5
A young man in his early twenties, Vire was tall and handsome, every inch a warrior, from his strait, broad shoulders, to his muscular limbs.6
Vire stood among his subjects, the wolves.7
He was one of them, yet he was not.8
He was more.9
I watched him, my eyes gleaming with the fire light of curiosity.10
Would this man, this strange figure, notice me?11
Vire looked up. His head turned.12
I froze. 13
Two, large green eyes faced me, locked me in their burning intensity, caught my breath and tore it from me.14
I shivered, unable to move, yet feeling the urge to run, to get away.15
Vire whined softly.16
The wolves departed, off toward the cliff.17
I gulped nervously, pulling back into the shadows.18
I had been spotted.19
Vire slid over the ground, like a wolf on the hunt.20
He paused before the bushes that concealed me, his blazing eyes searching for me.21
Again they met mine. 22
Slowly, carefully, Vire pushed the foliage aside.23
I shrank back as his hand appeared, afraid of this strange figure.24
He smiled to show me he meant no harm.25
"I will not hurt you. Come out, snakes dwell in there."26
That was enough for me.27
I practically flung myself from the bushes, right into his arms.28
Gasping with shock, I immediately pulled back.29
He had startled me!30
He tilted his head, walking around me, looking me up and down.31
It occurred to me that this man had probably never met a girl before.32
Especially one like me.33
Shoulder length amber hair blew across my back, dark hazel eyes flickered.34
I was wearing a T-shirt, white in color, with a pair of slim jeans.35
He probably has never seen jeans ether, I thought.36
Vire stopped pacing around me.37
He looked quiet dangerous standing there, a fur cloak draped over his shoulder, wearing a shirt made from deer hide and long pants that ended at his ankles.38
"You have never been here before, have you?" He asked.39
I sucked in my breath sharply.40
"N-no, um..." I managed to stammer.41
How did he know-?42
"I never knew a girl would chance coming here."43
He peered at me curiously.44
"Well?" 45
"Well what?" 46
I could barley keep my voice from shaking.47
Vire noticed.48
He smiled.49
"Don't worry, I'm not like those stories say. I wont eat YOU."50
He said 'you' strangely, as if hinting something.51
I blinked, moving back once more.52
"W-what do y-you mean?"53
He swung around, and I watched in shock as he threw back his head and howled at the sky.54
My shock turned to horror as I found myself surrounded by wolves.55
Vire growled as one snapped at me, and they all stood back.56
Three wolves came forward.57
One was an old, bent male, his body twisted cruelly on the left side.58
The others were females.59
One was black, a huge beast, the other reddish brown.60
They walked around me, sniffing at my jeans, studying me with what I thought of as critical eyes.61
I was ridged with fear, staring at Vire with wide eyes, my hands quivering from the terror that froze my blood.62
He saw my fear, it made his heart tingle.63
Why, he thought, why does her fear make me sad? Fear has never bothered me, so why does hers?64
I shook, closing my eyes and willing myself never to do stupid things again.65
Idiot!! I clenched my hands.66
It was then something odd happened.67
Vire swept in, brushing the wolves aside, and grabbed my arm.68
He pulled me toward him, looking me strait in the eye, Hazel meeting Emerald.69
"What is your name?"70
His voice was like ice.71
I gulped.72
"Ki-k-Kindara...." 73
He blinked, as if unbelieving.74
"But that is an old name, a name that is not used by humans."75
I shivered.76
"I-it's my name. Everyone just calls me Kendra.."77
Vire froze.78
He raised his eyes.79
I followed them.80
Torches, bright and flaring, glimmered down on the slopes.81
"Bang!!"82
A gun went off.83
The wolves scattered, yipping and howling, racing away to the safety of their dens.84
I wanted to scream, but a hand clamped around my mouth.85
"Quiet. Just keep quiet, and we'll get away alive."86
Vire's voice was a pleading whisper.87
I nodded silently, the hand still over my mouth.88
He nodded back.89
"Right, listen. Climb on my back. I'll get you out of here."90
He took his hand away.91
"Why would you save me?" I asked softly.92
"Because no one deserves to be left to those jerks."93
I felt there was another reason, but I didn't press him.94
I knew Vire was right.95
Chapter 2: The flame trail96
Author notes
A work in progress.
I'll keep adding more to it every day, so I just kinda left it off randomly...
So ya, I write alot and I am random, but I lov to write and I lov my stories.
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Comments
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very interesting
I loved it!! One question though is he part wolf or was he ust raised by wolves, have to keep reading! keepup the good work!!
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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I enjoyed reading this. I think the spaces between every sentence was a little confusing, but it worked well with your story none-the-less. The plot is unfolding and the suspense was building up, which kept me entertained through out the entire thing. keep up the great work!


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Hm...
OK, so every single sentence is a paragraph?
Maybe you should combine sentences, yeah...
Anyways,
paragraph 69, strait-straight
thats all, really!

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No, not every sentence is a paragraph. To tell you the truth, my writing doesn't have paragraphs unless I write it on paper, or if I finnish the whole thing. Then I'll past all the little pages together, make them nice and happy, and I'll fix the sentences into paragraphs. Until then, I leave it like this.
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wow!
OMG! I LOVE Vire! He sooo sexy!
as for the beautiful iamgery and body-language-AMAZING! Hannah is spectacular! Excellent job! ME LOVES THIS!!!! Pwease write more! Pweeease?
-LIssy


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