Masses of flesh and bone
crowd-
pushing through the small openings.
Small organs of muscles,sensors and veins-
Parched-
Almost shrivelled
in the deep of a famine;
Searching for an oasis.1
In the midst of
the great drought,
the masses rush to the shamaan-
Seeking a spring,
Seeking the rain.
The shamaan takes their papers,
printed with prayers for entrance to
the oasis,
clutched tightly in outstretched hands.2
The masses of flesh and bone
form semicircles around the raised platform-
Whispering prayerfully-
Eyes eagerly drinking the signs of
the saving rain.3
The Whispering stops
as the raindancer appears above them.
Swathed in pink lycra and chiffon.
The masses brab their swinging monocles
and glasses,
To experience the thing that will bring their mental deliverance.4
The Raindancer stands on her toes,
arms outstretched
bidding the rain to come.
And she begins to dance.
Author notes
This is my attempt at using extended metaphor. If you are confused feel free to ask me about it. This is a poem i had before on another site but i thought it would be appropriate here with a slight modification. My username is Raeyle. Let's see what I would do with a random banana. Probably use it to measure how tall i am in banana length
A contest entry
- poetry by Alyana.
100 points, ended October 8, 2008, 25 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
What imagery was in your head after reading this?
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oh and dont forget the rules
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Sorry about the stanza thing. i had laid out but i forgot to turn off the fix lines thing i think. I am still new to posting on this site. Sorry about that. I hope that fixes the problem
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thats totally ok, its good :]
and you still need to read the rules again
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okay think it's solved now
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teehee :]]] very nice on the banana, most creative :]
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very nice, a bit confusing at the beginning because no one knows what is going on but that is explained in the end, which is ingenious(word of the day), very good job. I like this very much.
snaps and good luck!
Alyana
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